[David Goldberg]

The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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[bevy]

Good Afternoon,

Please find my recent reads in preparation for my VO coaching session. Any feedback would be appreciated. Thank you.

DataPlex
All of us here at DataPlex welcome you to our website in which we attempt to distill the essence of what we are all about …
helping our customers improve their use of disparate, complex and ever-changing technologies. In a nutshell, we increase their “tech worth” by evolving, integrating or expanding their existing systems and by strategically deploying new, state-of-the-art platforms.

THE TRAVELERS INSURANCE COMPANY
We all share the same goals in business and in life. Security … protection … trust. What every man, woman, and child seeks from birth. What we at The Travelers have been dedicated to providing for 130 years. A difference backed by over $100 billion in assets, and the knowledge that every customer under America‘s umbrella is our most important one. The Travelers Insurance Company.

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[LFlynt]

Hi Bevy – thanks for sharing this!

I enjoyed both reads and found they both had clarity and excellent pacing. I like that you chose two pieces of copy at opposite ends of the spectrum: one “techy” and one “warmer” and *more personal*. It’s great to show range.

Nicely done!

[Esandyii]

Homework for Bruder 1.31.2022

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[maxspitz]

Hey Ya’ll!

Hope everyone’s having a good Monday so far! I’m uploading a few spots for my narration hw, this week focusing on documentary. Any feedback, comments or notes are greatly appreciated.

Thanks!
Max

Yosemite:
In the northern part of the park, large stretches of grass and sagebrush spread across the mountains and valleys. Similar to the prairies, this habitat provides an excellent home to the badger and her new family. They see light, for perhaps the first time. A strange new world for them. And they stay close to their mother at first. But growing bolder, they begin to explore on their own.

Tales from the Hive:
Bees have been busy for millions of years now, and they’re not about to stop anytime soon. Foragers still return from the fields with nectar, while guard bees still watch and wait. There’s treasure in this beekeeper’s hive, and all are sworn to protect it…with their lives.
Suddenly, an intruder comes flying in: a wasp, hoping to capture a bee and feed it to its hungry grubs. The battle begins in earnest.

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[LFlynt]

Hi Max – thanks for sharing your reads!

There is a wonderful warmth, tonal quality to your voice which lends itself well to the copy you chose. I found that the energy matched the text, for each: “Yosemite” was smooth and easygoing and “Bees” was more kinetic, which fit the “busy-ness” of the story. That’s a great trait.
I did find that “Bees” felt a little rushed – some pauses may have added some suspense to the wasp entering. :-), but I understand if you had to time yourself. That’s my practice area, too.

Really nice job!

[Sylvanie]

Hello Everyone, I would love to get your feedback on my homework practice scripts below. Much appreciated as always!

Estee Lauder

Beautiful skin…Young or old. Oily or dry. Every skin can look smoother and more radiant with Fruition Extra. Within an hour, this world-famous multi-hydroxy formula starts working gently to even out skin color and texture, sweep away dry patches, reduce oiliness. And reveal the beautiful skin beneath. Fruition Extra Multi-Action Complex from Estee Lauder

Always

Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

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[naderaliamer]

Hi everyone! These are for my latest training session and a couple of them are redos(with suggestions from feedback from my last posting)

Thanks again in advance!

Fish Boil

Even people who don’t like fish, have been known to like this fish. That’s why a fish boil is a must-do experience when you visit Door County. It all starts with a blazing bonfire under a
kettle of salted water. People circle around to warm themselves and take in the crisp smell. When the temperature is just right and the crackle of the fire is just loud enough, the boil master adds a basket of potatoes and onions to the kettle. A few crackles later, the mild whitefish steaks, fresh from Lake Michigan, are delicately lowered in. At just the right moment, kerosene is tossed into the fire, exciting the blaze and causing the water to boil over, dramatically carrying off the fish oil that has collected on top. The fish are pulled out and greeted with a generous drizzling of butter. Ladies and gentlemen, dinner is served.

Texicon Family

“Hey there new employee, or should we say, new family member. As a member of the Texicon family, we want to formally introduce you to your new home, but not too formal because that’s just not our style. Now you’ve already got your new uniforms and met with our incredible CEO, or head of the family as we like to call him. Now it’s time for me to bring you up to speed on what your days are going to be filled in with. Make sure you grab some of the complimentary cake you have in front of you, we love cake here so you’re going to have to get used to that, and see what the rest of your time at the Texicon household has in store for you!”

Jerry Seinfeld

The move to New York meant returning to his roots for Seinfeld, who was born April 29, 1954, in Brooklyn and raised in the Long Island town of Massapequa (which he has always joked was an old Indian name meaning “by the mall”). After graduating from Queens College, Seinfeld appeared at New York comedy spots while supporting himself with odd jobs, including selling lightbulbs over the phone and waiting tables at Brew and Burger. As his act grew more polished, he honed the wry observational style that was to become his trademark.

Educational Explainer Video Intro Only – Real Estate

Would you like to buy a house?
Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run.
But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house.
Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.

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[Esandyii]

Homework for Bruder 1.30.2022

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[SteveVoice2]

Forgot one:
Assassins Creed

For 20 years, after the Assassins defeated the Templars in London, the city enjoyed a certain peace, until the autumn of Terror in 1888.
London is plunged into shadow and fear, by a series of gruesome and unsolvable murders. The Brothels of White Chapel seem warm and safe by
comparison to its streets, where prostitutes are being mutilated and being left on grotesque display for the world to ogle.
Jacob Frye hunts the elusive killer to bring an end to the Terror of Jack the Ripper.

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[SteveVoice2]

Hi Everyone:
Looking for some feedback to my latest homework assignments:

Thanks very much

Steve
Beringer Wine
Some might choose a lecture or documentary film to tell the story of 125 years of winemaking. We prefer a glass. At Beringer, we are proud to be the only winery
ever to win Wine Spectator’s “Number 1 Wine of the Year” for both a cabernet & a chardonnay. But our greatest achievement lies in knowing that everything we’ve learned is your to enjoy…each time you pour a glass of our wine. Beringer…All we are in every bottle

Sesame Place
Sesame Place is the theme park where Sesame Street comes to life! New in 2018 is our biggest, most exciting roller coaster ever – Oscar’s Wacky Taxi!
Bring the entire family to whirl on rides, splash down slides and hug everyone’s favorite furry friends! So before little kids become big kids, bring them to meet their Sesame Street friends at Sesame Place theme park!

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[mmyers24]

Happy Sunday Everyone,
My name is Malissa and I am new to the Edge Feedback Forum. I am not performing on professional set up just yet, however I need feedback on my conversational commercial reads. Thank you all for taking the time to take a listen and comment. I am so excited to see your thoughts. Have an amazing day.

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[Mike Reddy]

Hello everyone,

Hoping to get some feedback on my recordings. Any and all comments, critiques, etc. are greatly appreciated.

Thanks and have a great weekend!

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[mmyers24]

Hi There PMuller, You have such a calming voice. Great job on controlling your breaths between your sentences especially in the Allstate one. The only thing I would say is on What is Spark and Allstate is maybe vision that you are talking to someone you know to help your message connect to your audience a little more. (This is something I too am working on). Loved the energy in your Texicon read, Just make sure that energy flows throughout. Nice job. Thank you for sharing. Have a fantastic Sunday.

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