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    Edge Studio
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    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #58594
    mrtripo9
    Participant

    OK ! I thought I should give this a shot , This is CNN! James Earl Jones!
    please take it easy on me if I ruined it..lol

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    • #58724
      reeyab
      Participant

      I totally got the James Earl Jones vibe from this! Your pitch matches him quite well. I think your accent could be a great asset as well, it’s very unique (I have so much family in England but I’ve never heard anything quite like yours – such a cool sound). I agree that maybe working a bit more on getting the vowel sounds a little more distinct in the word “world” would strengthen this a lot. Other than that I thought it was great and you definitely didn’t ruin it!

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    • #58653
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi mrtripo9!

      You didn’t ruin it! You have that deep tone like James Earl Jones — just with a British accent! I think with a little practice with the enunciation, you have a great voice for promo work!

      Good job! I look forward to listening to more of your reads!

      Kathy

      • #58670
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        Thanks , I am focusing my training on enunciation /diction , thanks again Kathy

        • #58687
          SuperLuke
          Participant

          I liked it. It was cool to hear James Earl Jones’s/ Darth Vader’s voice with a British accent. Judy keep practicing with what you want to enunciate better.

    • #58628
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Mrtripo9! I like the deep warmth of your voice. I too had trouble understanding “world’s” but other than that it sounded great!

      Mary

    • #58605
      colleen
      Participant

      Beautiful rich voice & tone…but I also had trouble understanding your pronunciation of “world’s”.

      • #58637
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        Thanks Colleen , am always on the look out for yr feedback here.

    • #58602
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Wow this is so fancy! Great bass tone in your voice. For a few plays I couldn’t understand “world’s” but I also don’t know how Mr. Earl Jones speaks. I’d love to hear more from you 🙂

      • #58636
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        Thanks kate , I just hired a diction coach to help out….lol ,

    • #58598
      RYoung
      Participant

      Is that your native British accent? If it is you should flout it, I would die for an English accent, maybe try some narration-story telling. Good luck and thanks for sharing that.

      • #58635
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        Thanks RYoung, I appreciate the nice words. Yes ! its my natural accent , some people say its hard to understand my read. I am hiring a diction/accent coach to help out. What do you think?

  • #58569
    kfvoice
    Participant

    Hi everyone! Upload of homework practice from the narration script library.

    I noticed “aboard” did not come out very clearly in my read. What other feedback and critiques you got for me?

    Thanks again!

    Kathy

    eLearning/Education

    American Airlines

    Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

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    • #58671
      mrtripo9
      Participant

      Amazing read, this sounds like its ready for release, i totally agree with Robert, for a minute i felt i was in a plane. Good job

    • #58645
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Wow, that was really good. You had me trying to buckle up in my chair here, lol.

      • #58648
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Too kind, Robert, thank you!

    • #58629
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Kathy! Good read. I too am hearing some nasalness, but it may just be your accent / normal speaking voice that is unique to you. Good pacing and enunciation on the script throughout. I realize this is in the elearning category, but you might try it with a little more smile and energy in your voice to lift up the passengers. I haven’t flown in awhile (crazy year!) but I always like hearing funny upbeat airline stewards/stewardesses – helps get the passenger’s attention to actually listen to the announcement vs. just tune them out.

      Mary

      • #58639
        kfvoice
        Participant

        I edited my entry, and then it didn’t submit the edit!

        Anyway, about the nasal sound. I, too, noticed I sounded more nasally than normal yesterday. I do get congested in the colder months/spring time here in northern New England. I have a humidifier in the house downstairs (I do my recording in a bedroom upstairs), and use saline nasal mist sprays, but I may need to add another humidifier somewhere upstairs now that I am doing voiceover!

        Kathy

      • #58634
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Thank you, Mary! Noted!

        I struggled with this one yesterday. I’d work on it for an hour, walk away for 10-15 minutes, and repeat. Must of been a few hours. I finally said, I have to stop for now, and uploaded the end result.

        I agree, I like funny stewards/stewardesses. I went back and forth as to how to deliver this. To me this script falls under the announcer category (maybe it’s in there), so definitely, upbeat would of been best. Then the other side of me thought, “Is this for a trainer video?”. It still should sound more upbeat, though, so thanks again for the feedback!

        Kathy

        • #58804
          mkell755
          Participant

          Hi Kathy, sure, you are welcome! It’s a serious topic (life safety), but I think delivering serious messages in an upbeat way can make them more palatable? As long as it sounds professional in the delivery (which your voice does) it works. Thanks!

          Mary

    • #58597
      RYoung
      Participant

      I had this issue previously, sounds like your speaking with too much nasal sounding, instead try to speak from your diaphragm maybe. Otherwise your pacing and enunciation are very good!

      • #58633
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Noted! Thank you, RYoung!

  • #58543
    svenbot5000
    Participant

    Hey everyone! Hope everyone had a nice Thanksgiving. Posting another quick practice read. Let me know what you think!

    McCholesterol

    Come to McCholesterol’s and try our Triple Bacon and cheese Heart Attack Burger and triple fat fries! This Friday, for only fifty cents, at McCholesterol’s.
    Eat for today, eat for the moment…
    May as well, we’re all going to die soon anyways. Death by fast food, why not? …

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    • #58689
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Wow, I’m flattered to see that the spoof commercial I and my coach made for my demo reel has made it to another person at Edge. Nice enthusiasm and interpretation in the performance.

    • #58556
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Svenbot! Good read! Way to get into the character and mood of the script! I could tell you were relaxed and smiling as you read it. Good inflection throughout – good job!

      Mary

  • #58540
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    Hi peeps! Here is a commercial read. Put together this script, any feedback is appreciated!

    Sun B*m Hair Lightener is formulated to brighten your hair by amplifying the natural highlighting effects of the sun.
    It’s infused with pineapples and lemons and has a hydrogen peroxide boost for faster results.
    It smells like sunkissed summer, and does all the good things with none of the bad things.

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    • #58646
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Good job writing the script and reading is also. Your voice is good fit for this.

    • #58614
      monibr16
      Participant

      Wow this was great! you sound very relaxed. Pacing was very good. I agree great fit for your voice!

    • #58610
      colleen
      Participant

      Hi, Katelyn-
      Really nice job! Upbeat, confident, believable…your voice suits this kind of commercial!
      ~colleen

    • #58557
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn – good read! I really like the tone and texture of your voice – good variation throughout. Your voice sounds well-suited for this type of commercial. Good job!

      Mary

  • #58527

    Getting back to practice recordings after a little break – any and all feedback is appreciated!!

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    • #58615
      monibr16
      Participant

      Sounds great, I just had trouble hearing the second “we’re” you sped up a little and it was hard to make out. Other than that it was good!

    • #58558
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Gabe! Great read! Good flow, energy and pace of the read, really nice!

      Mary

    • #58534
      colleen
      Participant

      Great read, Gabe! I loved your timing, enthusiasm and pitch…

    • #58530
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Very nice.

  • #58525
    colleen
    Participant

    Hi there! Here’s the first of my narration scripts for session #1 homework. Absolutely brand new to voiceover, recorded on Mac computer in my freezing-cold basement(no husband, dog or extraneous noise there…) & looking forward to any tips, feedback, suggestions, etc. Big thanks! ~colleen

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    • #58652
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Colleen!

      A nice first read! I know sometimes pace can be hard in the beginning, but you did a really good job with that here.

      As for voice memo download — I don’t have experience with a MacBook, but on my iPhone, I recorded on the Voice Record Pro app, not the voice memos on the phone, when starting out, and then emailed it to myself as a MP3 file. I am not sure if this helps at all, but I thought I would mention it.

      Overall, good job! Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #58658
        colleen
        Participant

        Kathy~
        Thanks so much for the feedback & sharing your “technical” advice. It’s great to see the different ways people voice record!

    • #58647
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Sounds like you found a good spot to record if you can keep warm. I like the pace and tone of your voice. I think you may have your voice slightly louder. Over all a good effort!!

      • #58659
        colleen
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback, Robert!

    • #58559
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Colleen! First off, welcome! I’m pretty new as well and always learning.

      The recording sounded great, but was very quiet on my end. Your voice sounds really nice and smooth for this sort of read. I liked the pace and tone, but there seemed to be a few micro pauses throughout that might not be needed, like they did not seem to be at periods or at the end of a thought. Overall really good!

      Mary

      • #58578
        colleen
        Participant

        Mary-
        Thanks so much for your feedback! This is definitely a big learning curve…especially when you also need pretty savvy computer skills (which I definitely do NOT have!!) Looking forward to more listening & learning.

        • #58631
          mkell755
          Participant

          Hey you are welcome Colleen! Yes, I think I speak for everyone here in that we are all here to learn. Practice makes perfect, right? 🙂

          Mary

    • #58531
      colleen
      Participant

      IF anyone has suggestions on how to download voice memos from a MacBook so that it shows up as an “attachment”, please let me know! 🙂

      • #58581
        touzet
        Participant

        It’s going to need to be an mp3 instead of an m4a. Google something like “m4a to mp3 on mac” and some converters will popup. You just need to make sure there’s no malware in the one you choose.

        • #58606
          colleen
          Participant

          Thanks so much for this info, touzet! I will try it with my next read.

  • #58519
    Hulykulani
    Participant

    Hello everybody! First time posting on here for my homework for my commercial demo recording coaching sessions! I have currently two commercials worked on – American Express and Rivers Stadium in Pittsburgh. The scripts themselves are below and I appreciate any and all feedback (on the reads themselves or the way I should set up these posts as I never had to do it for my animation voice over work.

    Commercial 1 – American Express

    Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.

    Commercial 2 – Pittsburgh

    In this city… There’s an expectation in the air. We all pay it forward. We all earn it. There’s a currency that connects us. The karma we share. The way we celebrate. If you’re not from here, that’s okay. All comers are welcome. Here’s one more tip. There’s only one place in Pittsburgh we all come together. Whatever your game… Rivers is where Pittsburgh comes to play.

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    • #58560
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Hulykulani! Welcome! I liked both scripts. I too heard an echo in the background. Good pace and emphasis on the key product words such as Private Payments, American Express and Rivers. Very good!

      Mary

    • #58542
      svenbot5000
      Participant

      Howdy! On the first commercial in the middle, specifically the “I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make” section, it sounds more like you’re reading off the script instead of having a conversation compared to the rest of the reading. Don’t be afraid to vary your speed a little. Other than that, good job!

    • #58529
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Good performances for a few commercials, so far. My only critique is that I hear an echoey background.

  • #58496
    JackStansbury
    Participant

    Last round of commercial homework! Any feedback is welcome and appreciated

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    • #58651
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Jack!

      Nice reads!

      In Script 1, I liked your low tone. I believe I heard “a” pronounced like “ah”. I have been struggling with this, as well.
      In Script 2, I liked the natural, casual delivery approach, but I agree with a previous comment to try to vary your pitch and tone.
      In Script 3, just … awesome. I can’t find anything to critique here. This sounds commercial ready!

      Good job!

      Kathy

    • #58561
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Jack! All 3 scripts were good for your voice and nicely read.
      Nike – good low tone
      Wranlger – great casual and easygoing tone!
      All State – good variation in tone throughout

      Overall really nice!

      Mary

    • #58532
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      This is really awesome. Good work!

    • #58523
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Really nice work! I also really loved the allstate read. The wrangler read I thought could have been a bit more enthusiastic or have a varied pitch/tone to it while still maintaining that “wrangler” edge. Good stuff!

    • #58513

      I completely agree with the comment before me – I loved your allstate reading! It sounded casual, charming, and you lifted important words without making it sound unnatural. I really liked the Nike copy too, and thought it served as a great contrast to the Allstate one. However it sort of sounded like the final line “it’s nike” was thrown away a bit, and the word Nike felt a bit like an afterthought. Make sure to lift up the product name! great work, though!

    • #58508
      colleen
      Participant

      Jack-
      Nice work! I especially liked the All State script: you sounded confident, natural, personable, trustworthy & had a nice flow…I wanted to buy insurance from you 🙂 I thought the Wrangler script sounded a bit flat & slow…but a good start. I really like your voice & think you have amazing potential!

  • #58488
    kfvoice
    Participant

    Hello everyone!

    Another read with new, different, equipment. This is an Interactive Voice Response script from the library. The last two lines are actually a second take, so my tone and pitch vary slightly than in the first part of the read. Is it noticeable, or does it fit the script? Any feedback is appreciated.

    Thanks!

    IVR

    You have reached Animal Wellness Center. Please listen as our menu options have changed. Our hours are Monday through Friday from 8 am to 6 pm. We are closed from 12:30 to 1:30 for lunch and on Wednesday from 12:30 to 2:00. We are closed on weekends. To schedule an appointment or reach the front desk, press 0. For Kathy Miller, head of reproduction, press 1.

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    • #58562
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Kathy! Good read! The flow was nice and the reading smooth and clear. Since “…on Wednesday from 12:30 to 2:00” is something different from all other times on other days, I think emphasizing “Wednesday” might be helpful.

      I did not notice any difference in tone and pitch from the first part of the script as compared to the last 2 lines. Good read!

      Mary

      • #58567
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Thank you, Mary! Noted!

  • #58481
    mrtripo9
    Participant

    Here is another one, I might need help with editing.

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    • #58650
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hello mrtripo9!

      Your pace here sounded good to me, and your voice, with a warm and welcoming tone, is well suited for eLearning/Education/Explainer/Training scripts. Good read! Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #58669
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        thanks KfVoice , I apprciate , its always great to get the opinion of participant like you. Thanks

    • #58563
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi MrTripo9 – very nice! You have a nice deep warm tone to your voice, and a nice accent. Good reading throughout!

      Mary

      • #58588
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        thanks Mary,your feedback means a lot.

        • #58632
          mkell755
          Participant

          Sure! You are welcome 🙂

          Mary

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