[David Goldberg]

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[AJS10]

Hello! Would love some feedback on a couple of scripts I’ve been practicing. Thank you!

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[Ems412]

Hello,

I liked both but for the Mrs. Dash spot the part “instead of reaching…reach” is a bit fast.

[Roman Saienni]

Hi everyone,
Here are a few scripts I’ve been working on this week.
Thanks for your feedback.

Roman

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[michaelflemingvoice]

Yeah, man. I can dig it. The Starbucks was your best one because it felt the most relatable and comfortable. I could tell you were you. In National, I liked every single time you highlighted “back”, but the whatever was after that felt weak. Don’t shy away from “road warriors”. Hit it just as hard. And watch the enunciation a bit (something I struggle with too). Discover LA felt like it could have had more variation and was maybe too serious. I think because each phrase ended downwards in pitch, it felt more like something was wrong than something exciting that I want to be a part of. Love the voice, though. It feels like commercials are your thing!

[DillonP]

Here are three new samples I just got done. I would really appreciate some impute and if there is to much clicking. And if there is how do I deal with it properly?

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[Sarania]

Hi Dillon,

I really liked your reads for Big-O-Tires and Butterball! Big-O-Tires had great energy and excitement. It would really grab my attention on a radio spot. Butterball felt so warm and inviting. The overall mood of the season was conveyed very well. I didn’t hear any clicking honestly. So I think you did very very.

[chennianen]

Here’s a short political ad!

Script:
Jobs are leaving the state in record numbers while John Jacobson continues to be an outspoken advocate for outsourcing.
Keep jobs where they belong – in-state.
Vote Nadine Ronald for a better economic future!
Paid for by Nadine Ronald for Governor.

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[michaelflemingvoice]

Howdy! I would love to hear it again without the pause after “numbers”. I felt the change in tone in “John Jacobson” was right on, and I think not pausing will be very effective. And more smile on the “vote Nadine Ronald for a better economic future” while keeping everything else the same. While your voice sounds young, I think you could be very effective if you keep pursuing training in this.

[Elise Duke]

Hi everyone! I’d love to get your feedback on these two samples. Your time and input are much appreciated 🙂 Thank you!

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[DillonP]

The diction was good, and enunciation good, and pacing was fine. But there seems to be a little to much space in between the sentences at the end of them and some clicking and they both sound the same. Overall they were pretty good.

[Courtney Feiman]

Thanks for the feedback and critique!

Blue From American Express:
We are helping put instruments back in the hands of kids. Why? Studies indicate kids who learn music excel at reading, science and math. But Budget cuts are eliminating music programs. So, join blue from American Express to help put music back in the hands of kids!

Honey Bunches of Oats:
It’s amazing! I never thought one cereal would make my whole family stay for breakfast. HONEY BUNCHES OF OATS. There’s never been a cereal like it. With big corn flakes and crunchy bunches of oats. Finally … a cereal my whole family loves.

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[AJS10]

Hi Courtney! I agree… great reads! Re: AMEX, it felt a little bit like you lose a bit of energy on the last word of each sentence. Your voice goes down a bit and has a bit of vocal fry. This is a common issue with me and is something I’m working on so I guess that’s why it stuck out to me 🙂 Honey Bunches of Oats was great! I could really hear your smile towards the end!

[Elise Duke]

Hi Courtney! Great reads! I thought the American Express read sounded a bit fast, so maybe try slowing that one down a bit.

I really liked Honey Bunches of Oats! I think you added emphasis on the right words and it made me excited to want to go get some Honey Bunches of Oats cereal 🙂

[Courtney Feiman]

Thank you so much! I appreciate your feedback.

[Earthbul]

World War II
All feedback is welcomed and appreciated

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[michaelflemingvoice]

I have enjoyed everything I’ve seen you post on here. You got it going on. 2 things:
1) See if you can push through a little more at the end of each phrase. It gets a little too breathy too often.
2) When I say too often, this sounds like a piece of a much longer narration, so the audience will catch on to that speech pattern of the same rise and fall on each phrase and might turn them off. Really play with variation in the read and truly think about where you are pausing and why.

I’d hire you , though. In a heartbeat.

[AJS10]

Wow, I honestly don’t think I have any critique… that sounded great!! Nice work!

[Lawszvoice]

Touzet. Love your script choices and reads. With your voice and delivery, I clearly envisioned both the wild west cowboy and the outdoors excavating landscaper. Nice job!

[Lawszvoice]

Ilene, nice read on the Disney Cruise. Your enthusiasm made me want to pack my bags and join you. The only critic is that I heard “every” instead of ever.

[touzet]

Edge Script: Cactus Pepper Sauce

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