[David Goldberg]

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[Wltrcurtis]

Hi Everyone, looking for feedback on another read. All advice and tips are welcome. Really appreciate specific feedback. Thanks in advance.

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[rustylj63]

Hey Man, is it Walter or Curtis? Which do you prefer?

I liked your voice, tempo, and changes in tone… but to me it did sound chunky, like you were reading independent clauses.

[Wltrcurtis]

Hi, either is fine. Appreciate the feedback. I went to listen to it again later in the night. You’re right about the chunky sound. I think I edited my audio too much and it gave it a weird sound.

[Roman Saienni]

Hi Everyone,
I’d appreciate your feedback on these two reads. As always, specific comments are most valuable.

Thanks,
Roman

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[Ems412]

Hello,

I really liked the cirque de soleil one. For the Acura one, I didn’t think the list was flat. I could hear you inflecting but it wasn’t very noticeable.

[rustylj63]

Hi Roman,

As I listened to both recordings the one thing that hit me was your lists sounded flat. In the first read all three items sounded the same as far as pitch and tone. There was no variation. The same thing for the first list in the second read. The the second list in the second read you changed the pitch on the last two items and it made a HUGE difference in how they sounded.

Also, I know some of us aren’t as worried about audio quality as we are specificially working on how our read sounds, but the audio quality in the second recording made it difficult for me to listen to. It was like the signal would cut out and then you’d talk again.

[Roman Saienni]

Thanks Rusty,
I appreciate the feedback, and thanks for the technical note about the second file. I don’t know what happened… they both sounded right when I uploaded. Gotta do some checking.

[Wes@1972]

Hi everyone! I’m hoping to get some feedback on my homework assignment for an upcoming narration demo. Editing correctly has been a past issue, and I feel I’ve addressed those issues in this assignment. I appreciate the constructive criticism that I’ve received in the past. Thank you! It has made me better.

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[rustylj63]

Hi Wes,

I just listened to all three recordings and they sounded the same. Yes, the words were different, but the tone, pitch, and tempo were the same and there was very little range. You share something with me that I’m working very h*****n as well… over enunciating words.

[indexasp]

For all three clips I have similar feedback. To me, your voice conveys authority, wisdom, and authenticity – but the reads also feel somewhat flat. By this I mean that the dynamic range (highs, lows, variation) is fairly small, and the emotion you’re putting into the reads feels somewhat limited. I want to HEAR that you FEEL more strongly about these topics… so the old ‘tell a friend’ saw applies here.. picture yourself telling a good friend about this stuff! 🙂

[Wes@1972]

Thank you very much! I appreciate that, and will work to put more heart felt emotion in my reads.

[Joel]

Hi everyone, may I have some feedback as to the conversational tone and flow of my readings. So helpful to get constructive criticism from you all.

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[rustylj63]

Hi Joel,

I agree with some of what Roman says. I think that if you raised the pitch just a little bit in some areas it would make a lot of difference. On the USO read, the first lines about coming home being a battle… I would read that close to the way you did… it’s sad, but as soon as you start talking about the USO I’d put some happiness in it. As a Veteran who’s used the USO while traveling, I’ll tell ya… it’s a happy thing for us. Also, for a lot of those passengers going to Rome, it may be there holiday or vacation… some joy and happiness here would be really good too. Hope that helps.

[Joel]

Thank you Rusty for your comments, very helpful!

[Roman Saienni]

Hi Joel,
You have a very authoritative and serious tone to your voice, which is a strong trait. But I think both of these reads need to deliver a more friendly tone. Especially the pre-boarding announcemen. Try striking a balance between serious and fun. Flying is still an adventure (in a way) and the pre-board announcement could convey a bit of excitement of the adventure the passengers are about to go on. In the case of the USO read your purpose is to create awareness and maybe inspire listeners to donate to the USO. The read, while being respectful of the USO’s mission, could be more welcoming, rather than instructional, to the audience. Hope this helps. You’re on the right track, keep at it.
regards,
Roman

[Joel]

Roman, thank you for taking the time to listen to my recording and giving me feedback. Much appreciated!

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[mikemcgann]

Hello everyone,
Below are two reads that I’d be interested in feedback on whether it be processing or technique.

Thanks

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[indexasp]

Pacing – between words I think it’s already good… but between endings of sentences or phrases, there were times where I thought a bit less pause, or a bit more, would have been more effective.

[mikemcgann]

Thanks for the feedback, that’s exactly what I’m working on perfecting at the moment.

[Joel]

Mike, I too liked your readings. Very conversational and easy to listen and understand the message you are trying to get across. Like the comment before me, I would have had more spacing between the sentences, giving the listener a moment to get what you are saying before moving on to the next thought.

[mikemcgann]

Thanks Joel, I appreciate the listen. I’ll be working on that a little more. I had comments before of choppiness, so I may be over compensating somewhere between delivery and processing.

[Tracy]

You have a really pleasant voice – it’s very soothing and seems well suited for an informative voiceovers like the firefighting one. With both of the recordings, I would say that it would help the listener for you to slow down a bit. Either in the editing or delivery it sounded as if there was no pause between sentences. I would also saw that, particularly with the second recording, you could also infuse a smile into the recording as it came across a bit detached from what you were reading.

[mikemcgann]

Thanks for the feedback, it’s very helpful.

If you anyone has a moment if they could listen to the updated ones I’m attaching today.

firefighter: I added a half beat between full sentences, and a quarter beat in a few spots just to space it better. I’ll think of it to myself as giving the listener time to catch up with writing notes along with the tutorial.

website greeting: This is a completely new recording. I put more smile into the read as well as slowed down with the same pacing in mind I added to the firefighter read.

Thanks again for the input.

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[rustylj63]

Hello All,

I have a couple of new recordings and would love to know what y’all think about them.
Thank you,

Rusty

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[Joel]

Rusty, I found that both your readings could have some clarity at the beginning. It sounded like you were off to races from the start, but then in both readings, once you get past that opening, you seemed to settle down into a nice rhythm, despite that some of the text you selected got pretty wordy, nevertheless you handled it well.

[mikemcgann]

Hey Rusty,

You have a good level volume when you speak, but I would look at improving the audio quality. I hear electronic feedback during your words and in between, I would check if you hear those sounds after reviewing the raw recording, then listen again between processing steps to see what may be causing it. Sometimes an effect setting work one day, but you may find need adjustment the next time because they’re working too hard under new conditions.
Also watch for plosives, I caught one soft one at :12 and another at 1:01 in EOB.
There also appears to be an occasional creak or pop after a word like at :18 of EOB, maybe your chair is making noise.
You may also want to watch for occasional sibilance on your “S” there was a sharp one at :30 at the end of “scripts.” You can fix these sometimes by either lowering the decibel level on just that S, or sometimes just removing a small section of it and making sure it still sounds natural after. I didn’t hear any other spots that were particularly sibilant.

Aside from those bits, nice professional tone to your reads.

[rustylj63]

Hi Mike,

Thank you for the detailed feedback. It is very helpful! The audio quality is lower because I’m recording these at my desk (yeah, that’s my chair you hear creaking a bit). The plosives and sibilance is something I will pay closer attention to. Again, thank you for the detailed feedback!

Rusty

[mikemcgann]

No problem Rusty. Another thing you may want to try is put something behind you. I also record at a desk and I used to have a slight echo problem and I experimented with an easle, some foam board, and a moving blanket drapped over and it made a big difference. I didn’t realize how much was slap back was getting to the wall behind me.

[Kira_DanNext]

Hello Edge Community. I had my first coaching session 3 months ago and then got sidetracked by various events. Back on track only looking forward. Please listen to attached and give feedback. Thanks.

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[indexasp]

Great tone, great highs and lows, etc. I’d just focus on the smooth factor, the spacing between words and phrases seems a bit too long – which comes across as it being a bit too ‘reading’, or ‘precious’. What a warm, friendly voice you have!

[Kira_DanNext]

Thank you @indexasp. “Smooth Factor” YES that is what I want 🙂 I will pay extremely close attention to that. Very helpful reviews.

[rustylj63]

Hi Kira,
Your reads have good inflection in them, there is a good variance in pitch making them easy to listen to. In your “Always” read, there was a spot that sounded like you might be over enunciating words just a little. When you say: “…alway designed new multipacks…” there is a pronounced break between always and designed. It’s just my ear, but maybe listen to it and see what you think?

[Kira_DanNext]

Thank you so much Rustylj63 for listening. I will definitely pay attention to the points you brought up.

[swy619]

Hi there,
I haven’t practiced voice over for a while but am happy to be getting back into it. I have a couple of travel narration reads here. any feedback would be appreciated.
Thanks,
Sarah

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[rustylj63]

Hello Swy,

I thought your reads sounded great.

[Gill]

Hi,
I like your dublin read you have good diction, tone and pace. i would just be mindful of your pauses.
Your flow at the end of hersey sounds like you’re getting excited for it but maybe that enthusiasm can be brought to the beginning. i would also be mindful of your pronunciation of idyllic.

[LindsayCampbell]

Hello! A few more longer narration scripts for feedback.
Thanks in advance!

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[swy619]

Hi Lindsay,
thanks for sharing these scripts. I think your voice is nice and clear and your pace is good on these reads. I think you could vary your pitch a bit more for interest, and I feel like there may have been some issues with flow on the KinderDance script. It almost sounded like there was a period after “movement” in the second sentence, even though it wasn’t the end of the sentence, and the script could have ended on a more conclusive tone. Hope this can be helpful. you’re doing a great job!

[Kira_DanNext]

Hello Lindsay. The Children’s Hospital script was presented in a style (pace and tone) that made it easy for me to close my eyes and picture step by step images of what the text was explaining.

[IlikeGlen]

HI Everyone!
hope everyone is well im going about to have my 2nd coaching session and I would your help community with any pointers you can give me thanks in advance

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[mikemcgann]

You have a great voice, but each sample was pretty fast. I think especially the cool jazz sample should be slowed down emphasis the “cool” in jazz.

Watch out in the “carnation be” I think you were a little hot on the mic or just need to lower your gain as it created distortion.

Also listen for mouth clicks, the NY Life had a few.

Again great voice, just mostly need to take your time.

[IlikeGlen]

Thanks Mikemcgann
Your feedback is very helpful you have a good ear
Because thats what my coach
Told me as well.

[rustylj63]

Hi Glen,

Great voice. A couple of things I heard: in your AMEX read it sounded like you said car instead of card at the beginning. Other than that, your pace is fast. See how it sounds if you slow it down a little. I really think the cool-jazz read could be awesome if you played with the tempo, especially at the beginning. Just late it drag out a little. Just my thoughts…

[Gill]

Hi Glen,

You have a nice strong voice, and you hit client’s names really well. I would be careful with over projecting. Also, your pace is a little too fast so just be mindful of that.

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