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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
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Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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May 19, 2022 at 5:44 pm #76775
AJS10
ParticipantHello! I’ve attached two scripts that I’m using to practice for my Narrative demo: one for adult e-learning and the other is more biography/documentary. Would love some feedback. Thank you!
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May 25, 2022 at 3:25 pm #76896
rustylj63
ParticipantHi AJS, I think your voice sounds great. I’m not sure if its the sound quality of if you’ve got a bit of vocal fry going on, but I’ve been told vocal fry can be a bad thing. Just what I’ve heard. I’m working towards my narration demo as well and one thing I’ve been told a couple of times is that we should let the narration “breath” more. I had a habit of rushing through my reads. Once I started slowing down, giving some space and pausing a bit, it started to sound much better. As good as your voice is, I’d bet that if you slowed your tempo just a bit, the reads would sound even better.
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May 19, 2022 at 5:37 pm #76770
AJS10
ParticipantHello! I’ve attached two scripts that I’m using to practice for my Narrative demo: one for adult e-learning and the other is more biography/documentary. Would love some feedback. Thank you!
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May 19, 2022 at 3:04 pm #76759
DillonP
ParticipantI have two new pieces, one a commercial and the other narration. I am right now planning something big right now, so I would appreciate some feedback that can be helpful for me going forward.
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May 25, 2022 at 3:29 pm #76897
rustylj63
ParticipantHi Dillon, some of your words sound like they’re getting run together or not completed. I think that might be what Lance was referring to. For your narration, maybe try slowing your tempo a little. That’s some advice my coach keeps giving me.
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May 19, 2022 at 5:24 pm #76769
nicolance
ParticipantHi Dillon – nice and friendly tone, but I noticed some diction issues in the Invisalign spot, and some definite slurring in the poem. Try slowing down, paying attention to diction, and still remain nice and friendly. Good luck – Lance
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May 18, 2022 at 10:51 pm #76750
NuZe
ParticipantHello all,
I want to try to get feedback for my commercial VO reads. Any advice would be great!
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May 20, 2022 at 12:44 pm #76794
AJS10
ParticipantHi! I think this is a good read for you. I would try this one as a “radio read” because of the way the script is written. I agree with what Mike said above regarding “unique” and “freshness”. But overall, I think this is a good one for you!
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May 19, 2022 at 3:51 pm #76766
mikemcgann
ParticipantHello NuZe,
This sounded pretty good to me. The pacing for me wasn’t an issue, but it could have used more in how you hit the features of the product. “Unique” and “freshness” could have had more emotion to them to sell that uniqueness like the feeling emoted for “the way no other bag can.” Besides that, be mindful of the mouth noises and background noises.
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May 19, 2022 at 3:06 pm #76762
DillonP
ParticipantYour read is good, but too technical, by putting more pace and emotion I think it would come out better, even so keep it up.
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May 18, 2022 at 7:43 pm #76744
swy619
ParticipantHello,
I have a couple of narration scripts here for feedback. I tried for them to be quite different from each other.
Thanks,
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May 20, 2022 at 12:47 pm #76795
AJS10
ParticipantI agree with Gill.. engaging and warm. I would suggest just a bit more energy on the OPB read. Your voice is very relaxing but with that read I’d worry it would come off a little too relaxing, so adding a little energy would help. Hope that makes sense!
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May 19, 2022 at 3:08 pm #76763
Gill
ParticipantSarah,
Nice job on your reads, its very engaging and warm. Your pace and diction is also good. I do hear some lip smacks which is a pretty easy fix. Again, awesome job!
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May 18, 2022 at 7:38 pm #76738
anlevine95
ParticipantHey All! here’s two samples. Thanks for taking a look. appreciate the feedback.
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May 19, 2022 at 1:54 pm #76758
nicolance
ParticipantAre you recording in your home studio? I hear tons of echo and a slight distortion underneath. Not sure if you wanted any technical feedback. Lance
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May 18, 2022 at 8:05 pm #76747
swy619
ParticipantHi,
Nice job. I think your Church’s Chicken read was especially strong. Good enthusiasm and pitch variation. I would be aware of clarity of diction a bit for the Freshii Ad, especially in the first part, through “master.” Also, maybe vary the pitch a bit more for interest on that one. Again, nice work. These certainly made me hungry.
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May 18, 2022 at 4:11 pm #76735
nicolance
Participant60 second recording for financial services explainer video – any feedback is very welcome, thank you – Lance
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May 18, 2022 at 8:28 pm #76748
swy619
ParticipantHi Lance,
I think this sounds very professional. You sound like an expert on the subject and like you’re really interested and confident in explaining these financial services to me. It did sound like you may have been running out of breath a bit around “CFT’s,” so perhaps be aware of that, if you felt that too. Overall, I feel like this was a great and strong read.
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May 18, 2022 at 12:00 pm #76729
Roman Saienni
ParticipantHi everyone…
Here are a couple new ones I just recorded. Please give them a listen and and let me know your feedback.Thanks,
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May 18, 2022 at 7:17 pm #76737
anlevine95
ParticipantHi Roman- you have a great voice btw. I thought you had a smooth deep voice that could be an asset to much VO work. I thought the kinder bueno read was more consistent (the depression stick seemed like the pitch increased) but it felt like with the kinder read you were selling like a truck or something. i think with kinder if you had a little pitch and maybe increased the speed it might sound better for a chocolate bar. overall i felt you were really confident and it sounded great.
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May 18, 2022 at 1:23 am #76722
Sarania
ParticipantHello All, if you have a chance, would love some feedback my three commercial script reads. These are harder scripts for me so any feedback would be appreciated.
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May 18, 2022 at 12:17 pm #76732
Roman Saienni
ParticipantHello,
First off, let me point out that you have a very nice and pleasing vocal quality. I thought the MB spot was the strongest. Overall I recommend smoothing out your delivery, all the reads came across a bit choppy and could be smoother. Keep at it and you’ll get it nailed down.Hope this helps…
Roman
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May 17, 2022 at 8:04 pm #76715
etotheliz
ParticipantHello all!
It was recommended during my coaching session that I upload two practice samples here for feedback.
Thanks in advance! I’ll be sure to return the favor on others’ tracks as well. 🙂Attachments:
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May 18, 2022 at 12:34 am #76720
Roman Saienni
ParticipantGreat job on both reads. I loved the Earhart spot. Your pacing and intonation were spot on. The Shakespeare & Co spot was good too however, you were peaking at the top of the read (specifically on the “crowd rousing… life changing” lines). Seems like you may have been to close to the mic. Overall though, I really like your vocal quality and delivery. Best of luck!
Roman
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