[David Goldberg]

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[nicolance]

This is narration from non profit explainer – Guide Dogs for the Blind – do you feel spoken to or spoken at?
Thanks for any feedback
Lance

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[nicolance]

Narration sample uploaded – DTS Tech medical explainer – how’s my diction?
Thank you
Lance

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[Gill]

Hi Lance medical reads are tough. Your diction is great, proliferation sounded a little out of place .

[SuperLuke]

Hello all,
I wanted to share a recording of my narrating the first chapter of Lee Child’s “Killing Floor” before I go ahead with working on an audiobook demo.

[Gill]

Hi Everyone,
I’m back with some more practice scripts! I’m working on flow and diction and would love your feedback! Thanks…

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[gigihernandezdoesit]

Hi Gill! Your Airoptic take is so natural, i really like how it sounds. diction sounds clear and i’d say your flow is allllmost there; although i like how much real estate you’re taking up with the first sentence, there are some pauses near the end of the copy that sound like periods instead of commas. where ever it is that you start sentences with “and” and “because”, the sentence before does sound like a complete thought. maybe its a copy thing, because you do seem to pick it up with a lot of energy each time. either way, great work!
Gigi

[mikemcgann]

Hello Gill,

Airoptic: Overall a very well done read. I would watch for the included breaths and some minor background shuffling. I feel the overall read could slow down a little to be in the realm of comfort and bed time. Listen for a few key words the client may want specifically hit, there were a few key words that should have popped a little more.

Allstate: I would watch for breaths and the mouth noises that happen at the same time. I don’t think I heard any saliva noises during words, but I caught some at the end of a word or at the beginning of the next. Otherwise nicely done.

Both your reads have a nice friendly and relaxed voice, definitely the inviting voice both of these scripts would be looking for. Good Job.

[TimberTykes]

Hello!

These were great takes, and you have very nice and clear voice! Your diction was clear and well-pronounced.

If I had anything to say regarding flow, it’d be to make sure you’re enhancing your words, and adding variation where it matters. I can’t really tell what the product is and its properties (at first listen) without a little enhancement, telling me what it is. I hope that makes sense!

[Gill]

Thanks TimberTykes, I appreciate your feedback!

[Tracy]

Good evening everyone –

I have two recordings and would welcome feedback on the attached. Thanks for your time.

Tracy

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[nicolance]

How do you feel about steel drums? Would have liked to hear more perspective in your narration.

[Gill]

Hi Tracy
I would work on the flow and tone of both read and see how it sounds after.

[JNMullett]

Just getting started with Commercial Demo training. I would greatly appreciate any feedback. Thanks in advance!!

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[Gill]

Jeff,
You picked a couple of scripts that really highlights your voice well. I liked your natural voice in advil, your pace and diction are good too but I sort of felt you were putting it on for the chevy script. I think your natural voice would work just fine for chevy.

[maxspitz]

Hey Ya’ll!

Been trying to get some practice in. Let me know any comments, feedback, etc. on these two reads. Thanks so much!

– Max

Lowes:
Living rooms become classrooms…
Dining rooms become offices…
Bathrooms become break rooms…
Garages…become gyms…
And backyards…become the great outdoors…
Lowe’s…
What home can become…

Website Greeting:
Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car.A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough.
According to Google – customers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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[Gill]

Hi Max,
For lowe’s a little variation with the first three lines would enhance your read and I would just be mindful of your diction on website greeting where you say could have sounds like could of overall nice pace and tone.

[Nik]

Hi would appreciate any feedback on my homework assignment!!:)

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[Joel]

Nik, during your recording, you seem to dip into an accent, though I can’t tell where it is from. You have an American accent for most of the voice over (which sounds good and natural), but a couple of words, like “ham” for instance seems slightly out of place.

[Nik]

Hey Joel,
You are spot on! I’m Indian by nationality but went to an American school my whole life..hence the accent :)) I live in Dubai (UAE) and here they would categorize my accent as “neutral.” Hoping that will help me secure some work in this region 🙂

[Joel]

Nik, its funny, one of my former students, Niki K, lives in Dubai and works at The Platform Dubai. Good luck with getting work in that part of the world. I know my former student is certainly enjoying her time there and meeting a lot of good friends.

[LFlynt]

hi everyone!

I’m inching closer to Demo Day – so, as always – your feedback is much appreciated. it’s been so helpful these past months and I appreciate you all, so much, for your time and candor. I usually don’t ask for specifics, but this time, I’d love to know how and what the read makes you feel, if anything. and, of course, any other notes are also welcomed.

my best to you all, fellow artists!

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[Joel]

LFlynt, I would check your diction for some of your words, such as, “young adults,” “couches,” and “vulnerable.”

[carynbell]

Hi All,

Been working on my pacing and diction. Feedback is appreciated.

Thanks!

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[Nik]

Hi really soothing voice!! I agree with the other comment that it could be a bit faster.

[Author]

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