[David Goldberg]

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[LFlynt]

hi everyone!

I’m inching closer to Demo Day – so, as always – your feedback is much appreciated. it’s been so helpful these past months and I appreciate you all, so much, for your time and candor. I usually don’t ask for specifics, but this time, I’d love to know how and what the read makes you feel, if anything. and, of course, any other notes are also welcomed.

my best to you all, fellow artists!

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[Joel]

LFlynt, I would check your diction for some of your words, such as, “young adults,” “couches,” and “vulnerable.”

[carynbell]

Hi All,

Been working on my pacing and diction. Feedback is appreciated.

Thanks!

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[Nik]

Hi really soothing voice!! I agree with the other comment that it could be a bit faster.

[carynbell]

Hi All,

Been working on my pacing and diction. Feedback is appreciated.

Thanks!

BENZ 2020 E-CLASS

A car that can actually see like a human.
Using stereoscopic cameras and even stopping itself if it has to.
The technology may be hard to imagine — but why you would want it, is not.
The 2020 E-class.
It doesn’t just see the future…
It is the future.

USPS PSA

The US Postal Service wants 2 remind everyone this year 2 protect themselves from becoming victims of identity theft. Promptly remove incoming mail from your mailbox – and don’t give out passwords, pin numbers, or account numbers. 2 learn more, visit consumer.gov/ncpw

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[Gill]

Caryn, your voice is very soothing. I agree with Joel’s comments on your diction, but wanted to add that it sounds like you sort of have an accent when you say “themselves” like selves drags on maybe southern so i would be aware of that if you’re trying to stay neutral.
Your pace could slightly be a little faster

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[Joel]

Cary, very listenable voice. I would take a look at your diction for words like “promptly” and when you say, “to learn more.” You said, “t’ learn more.” Your focus on using clear diction at “vist consumer.gov/ncpw” was good. My coach noted that instead of saying “your,” I was say, “yer.” So I think we all sometimes shorten some words in our day to day language use. But for voice over work we have to more careful. Also, you only uploaded one mp3 file. I liked your pacing.

[carynbell]

Thanks Joel!!! I’ll fix that other file.

[rustylj63]

Only one read tonight… thank you, in advance for your feedback. It is really helping.

Please disregard the audio quality, I’m sitting at my desk instead of in my “studio.”

Thank you!

Rusty

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[indexasp]

I’d make that opening question stronger and more confident.. have more of a POV! 🙂 And reduce the silence after the question by just a beat – it stretches out a beat too long imho.

Listenable voice for sure..

[TimberTykes]

I want to say thay you have a great voice! Especially for this read. If I had any feedback, I think you could work on the enhancement of your words between commas, and as for the opening line to this script, I felt like there was hesitation when asking the question, leaving the line feeling a little awkward. Other than that, a great read!

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[ashleymitchel]

Practicing for my narration demo – any feedback is appreciated!

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Ashley! I liked your reads, both sound natural. My note for you on Primanti Bros one, I’m noticing each sentence seems to end on the same pitch. Maybe you could try varying the tone / pitch of the last word of each sentence, to keep the listener engaged.

[rustylj63]

Hi Ashley,

Thanks for the feedback on my Allure read. I listened to both of yours and feel you did a really good job, especially with the Bob Ross one. One note I had on the Primanti brothers is about timing… I might put a small pause, maybe another heartbeat, between “…strip district” and “an area.” Try it and let me know what you think… I felt like they were both good reads!

[ashleymitchel]

Hi Rusty! Great feedback, thank you. I’ll give the small pause a try.

[mikemcgann]

Bob Ross was pretty good to me, just watch for plosives and background shuffling. I may suggest to inflect up a little more at the question at the end.

Primanti Bros was pretty good, but you may want to slow down a little bit on the reading to enforce the idea of nostalgia in the story telling and allow a beat between sentences as well.

Overall, I thought both were done well.

[ashleymitchel]

Thank you for the feedback! Very helpful. I often get the “slow down” note 😛

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[rustylj63]

Hey Everyone,

Sooo… Same drill as my last posting. I’ve got two recordings… same read. Hoping for feedback on the read, but also which voice is preferred.

Thanks!

Rusty

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[mikemcgann]

Nice job on the reads as well as eliminating more background noise since the other samples.

I would just suggest to either lower your gain a little or make a little more distance on the mic, not by much though, as you’re doing well isolating your voice in the room. It seems like it’s picking up some nasal pops, just between the 17 to 20 sec on allure 1.
I used to get these a lot more often, but if you lower your head just a little more you may find it will reduce the appearance of them. I think of it like treading water with your head on the surface, you realize how much air makes it out your nose and creates pops.

Besides that, you did great matching the voice to the feel of the scripts.

[rustylj63]

Mike,

I continue to appreciate the detailed feedback. I am really learning to hate nasal pops. I contracted pneumonia back in October and haven’t been able to shake all the congestion yet. I HATE it!

[mikemcgann]

Yeah, those nasal pops are a pain. They can even make you sound stuffed up when you’re not! I was dumbfounded where the pops were coming from in my recordings early on until I stumbled upon it. A little head tilt down and speaking from the diaphragm made a big difference. Hope you feel better.

[ashleymitchel]

I love Allure 1! So smooth. I like how you take your time to savor each phrase.

[chloeblackstone]

Hi Folks! I would love some feedback on this B****r documentary take. Things I’m working on are diction, and pitching down consistently at the end of sentences. Any input is welcome! Thanks. – Chloe

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[Gill]

Chole, your read is really engaging, I wanted to hear more. I think you did a great job changing your flow.

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[chloeblackstone]

thank you Gill!

[ashleymitchel]

Your annunciation is on point!

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[ashleymitchel]

Wow, sounds like it’s ready for the radio! The word “boulder” and “month” were slightly garbled but it sounded more like a recording issue than a pronunciation issue.

[rustylj63]

hello, your recording sounded great! Strong voice, good tempo, good pitch variation. The only thing I could make note on is that the word “Bolder” wasn’t very clear to me. Otherwise, really good job in my opinion!

[rustylj63]

Hey Folks, I’ve got a couple of files I’m posting. They are the same read, but different voices. Could I please not only get feedback on how the read went, but also, which voice is preferred?

Thank you so much!

Rusty

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[Wltrcurtis]

Hi, I went through both reads a couple times. The first read has more energy in it. I did notice some plosives during the read. The second read was much clearer but could use some energy. They both have some general background noise but that can be edited out. In terms of preference, I think I would enjoy hearing the second reading more. Its a deeper voice voice with more clarity. Maybe you could try different tone or changing tempo. Hope this helped.

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