[David Goldberg]

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[mir19800]

Hello, I am brand new to VO, please provide me with your positive feedback, thanking you in advance.

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[mikemcgann]

Hello,

Trendi: Watch for overall speed and pacing. That 75% would probably want to be slower, while looking at that, think of other words the client may want to stand out as well. I also agree with making sure words are complete. One example would be “and everything ships free” the “and” is almost there but a little is missing.

Password reset: Watch for saliva noises, there are a few and the file starts with one. I think the friendliness the read is asking for is there, but if this is a “process” to follow, I would try going a little slower. Think of it as giving the person a chance to grab a pen and paper if they need, and then maintaining that so they can follow along.

Aetna: same comments on saliva and breaths. Pacing was a little inconsistent, it smoothed out better when you got to “That’s why Aetna” but you may still want to find a slightly slower speed and try it again for the whole piece.

Still a nice start to your VO career!

[Gill]

Welcome!
I agree with TimberTykes, but also wanted to add to be mindful of your diction when you say words like important and create just make sure they are clear and not cut short.

[TimberTykes]

Hello! I really enjoy your voice! It’s comes off as sincere, and it really helps sell the ‘Aetna,’ and even the ‘Password-Reset’ recording flow-wise.

I really enjoyed the recordings, but I think the items you’re selling within the recordings could do with a little inflection- it helps us figure out what we’re supposed to be paying attention to! Also, with ‘Great style, great value…,’ try finding different ways to say ‘great,’ to keep things interesting.

[JNMullett]

Hi Everyone, more practice reads for my demo training. Again, any feedback you would care to share is greatly appreciated.

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[Teddpr]

The American Cancer Society sounded totally professional. You nailed it. I thought you were a little over the top with your emotion in describing the right side of the brain for the JC Penny commercial.

[JNMullett]

Thank you for the feedback, I’ll watch out for that in the future!!

[mir19800]

Great voice! I thought I was listening to a live TV commercial.

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening!

I have another recording today. I wanted to record two times today, but there’s a lot of commotion outside. With that, the quality of this one may be a little… eh, so apologies in advance.

I’m trying to balance my cadence here, making sure my lines don’t sound too similar to another one, but I have a feeling I’m not quite getting it. If you have any feedback, it’s well appreciated!

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[nicolance]

This is narration from non profit explainer – Guide Dogs for the Blind – do you feel spoken to or spoken at?
Thanks for any feedback
Lance

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[nicolance]

Narration sample uploaded – DTS Tech medical explainer – how’s my diction?
Thank you
Lance

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[Gill]

Hi Lance medical reads are tough. Your diction is great, proliferation sounded a little out of place .

[SuperLuke]

Hello all,
I wanted to share a recording of my narrating the first chapter of Lee Child’s “Killing Floor” before I go ahead with working on an audiobook demo.

[Gill]

Hi Everyone,
I’m back with some more practice scripts! I’m working on flow and diction and would love your feedback! Thanks…

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[gigihernandezdoesit]

Hi Gill! Your Airoptic take is so natural, i really like how it sounds. diction sounds clear and i’d say your flow is allllmost there; although i like how much real estate you’re taking up with the first sentence, there are some pauses near the end of the copy that sound like periods instead of commas. where ever it is that you start sentences with “and” and “because”, the sentence before does sound like a complete thought. maybe its a copy thing, because you do seem to pick it up with a lot of energy each time. either way, great work!
Gigi

[mikemcgann]

Hello Gill,

Airoptic: Overall a very well done read. I would watch for the included breaths and some minor background shuffling. I feel the overall read could slow down a little to be in the realm of comfort and bed time. Listen for a few key words the client may want specifically hit, there were a few key words that should have popped a little more.

Allstate: I would watch for breaths and the mouth noises that happen at the same time. I don’t think I heard any saliva noises during words, but I caught some at the end of a word or at the beginning of the next. Otherwise nicely done.

Both your reads have a nice friendly and relaxed voice, definitely the inviting voice both of these scripts would be looking for. Good Job.

[TimberTykes]

Hello!

These were great takes, and you have very nice and clear voice! Your diction was clear and well-pronounced.

If I had anything to say regarding flow, it’d be to make sure you’re enhancing your words, and adding variation where it matters. I can’t really tell what the product is and its properties (at first listen) without a little enhancement, telling me what it is. I hope that makes sense!

[Gill]

Thanks TimberTykes, I appreciate your feedback!

[Tracy]

Good evening everyone –

I have two recordings and would welcome feedback on the attached. Thanks for your time.

Tracy

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[nicolance]

How do you feel about steel drums? Would have liked to hear more perspective in your narration.

[Gill]

Hi Tracy
I would work on the flow and tone of both read and see how it sounds after.

[JNMullett]

Just getting started with Commercial Demo training. I would greatly appreciate any feedback. Thanks in advance!!

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[Gill]

Jeff,
You picked a couple of scripts that really highlights your voice well. I liked your natural voice in advil, your pace and diction are good too but I sort of felt you were putting it on for the chevy script. I think your natural voice would work just fine for chevy.

[maxspitz]

Hey Ya’ll!

Been trying to get some practice in. Let me know any comments, feedback, etc. on these two reads. Thanks so much!

– Max

Lowes:
Living rooms become classrooms…
Dining rooms become offices…
Bathrooms become break rooms…
Garages…become gyms…
And backyards…become the great outdoors…
Lowe’s…
What home can become…

Website Greeting:
Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car.A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough.
According to Google – customers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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[Gill]

Hi Max,
For lowe’s a little variation with the first three lines would enhance your read and I would just be mindful of your diction on website greeting where you say could have sounds like could of overall nice pace and tone.

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