[David Goldberg]

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[cammons01]

Hey everyone! Just uploaded a couple of practice reads. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

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[RBenesVO]

Great voice. Some mouth noises at the start of breathes to watch out for. At :12, and I think :20 for example. Maybe slow down just a tad to make it more conversational.

[cammons01]

Thanks for the feedback! Greatly appreciate it. I’ll go back and take another listen to the mouth noises in the clips.

[Elise Duke]

Hi cammons01! The American Airlines read started off great! It sounded welcoming and comfortable. The very, very end sounded rushed.

When you’re reading a list (for example, “your flight, your destination AND the equipment…”), it’s been suggested to me to not exaggerate the “and” so as not to draw too much attention to it and rather focus on the other words in the list. You can also vary the tone of your voice for each word in the list. This is feedback I’ve received and am working on this myself. I hope that helps!

[cammons01]

Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it. Thanks for the helpful tips. I’ll be mindful of this as I continue to practice.

[JNMullett]

Hi everyone, Here are a couple of practice reads I’ve been working on. Please let me know what you think. Thanks in advance!!

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[Cheechman]

WOW….great range. I like the over-the-top style and enjoy performing that style.
The wine read was great too
You hilied theproducts really nice.

[JNardecchia]

Reposting my latest with a smaller file size.

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[Gill]

Good diction- There are places where your pauses makes the read a little choppy removing those pauses will make the read smoother. Your pace is okay but could be a little faster. I also hear clicks which can be fixed with hydration or just editing out. Keep it up!

[JNardecchia]

Hello Forum!

Here are a couple reads, I’ve been working on warm/intimate/dry/raspy reads.

Thanks!

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[jr.roop]

Hi Everyone, I’m uploading two commercial pieces. I chose them because I like the products. Although I’m not sure I came off very natural in them. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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[Cheechman]

Need more excitement for Crayola.
Sounds like you are reading right from the script.
I don;t know if you read this a couple times to memorize but might want to try.

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening!

Working on yet another recording. I have a feeling I’ve done this one already, but… I like DQ, and my birthday’s next week, so hey, lol.

I don’t have a specific focus tonight, other than the usual- beginning/middle/end, conversational feeling (I kinda have the feeling that the ending doesn’t mesh well with this, but merely my opinion), etc.

Feedback and criticisms of any kind are greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance!

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[Gill]

Hi Everyone!
Would love your feedback I’m working on pauses. Thanks!

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[Elise Duke]

Hi Gill! I agree with Lance in that I didn’t hear any odd or out of place pauses – great job! I loved the overall tone of Clorox – informative, playful and convinces me to want to buy some Clorox wipes!

I also echo Lance’s comment about the Harvey read. I think you can add some changes in your tone to give it a more playful vibe (like the Clorox read). Great work!

[nicolance]

Hi Gill – wonderful friendly and conversational reads – but I am not sure what you mean about pauses . . .do you mean in the editing? Otherwise, pauses all seemed natural and not out of place. I think the Harvey spot might have benefited from a little more attitude, especially with the line “now if only he could work the microwave” – Keep up the good work. Lance

[Gill]

Thanks Lance 🙂

[smarlowe]

Hello everyone,

Here are two samples for feedback. I’m specifically concerned about sound quality and pacing, but I’d be appreciative of any feedback on any aspect of the samples. Thanks! 🙂

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[JoyceVOA]

HOP – Hi. I thought you started off well but then got choppy towards the middle. You started to sound more robotic and less conversational. After another listen, I heard emotion in the beginning then you lost it around “This unique”. You seemed to drag out read and reading. Overall I really like your voice. Perfect for the genre.

[JAE Factor]

Hello smarlowe, my feedback for your reads is below:

1. Hooked on Phonics – The pacing here was pretty good and the sound quality was clear as well. The only feedback on this one I have is editing out the breaths such as the part, “a few times a week.” Also, at the end when you said “read,” I would emphasize it, but stress it less (seems like you dragged it out a bit). Otherwise, I liked this read!

2. Anxiety PSA – I wasn’t clear what angle you were going for, but I got the impression this was an ominous internal conversation. Is this one supposed to be narration or a commercial? Sorry, I might be missing something here.

[JAE Factor]

This is a practice sample that I recorded this morning. Please let me know what you think: the good, the bad, and the u**y!

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[Cheechman]

Integral was pronounced great. I say it that way too.
Great voice.
Would work on hiliting the correct words a little.
Maybe try to read it several different ways and listen to all to find the right one.

Overall great read!

[smarlowe]

I thought it sounded great! Side note- I think “integral” was mispronounced –IN tuh grahl as opposed to in TAY grahl. Your “our” was spot on though (I always have trouble with that one) Otherwise I really enjoyed it. Your voice and cadence was clear, warm, and engaging.

[nicolance]

Hi again – Real Estate explainer – did it sound like I was having a conversation with you specifically? Please provide any and all feedback – Thanks! Lance

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[JoyceVOA]

Yes! I want to go on this journey with you. You sounded very conversational. You sound like you care about me. Very warm and inviting.

[smarlowe]

nice! You had a nice down to earth kind of sound, and I liked that you varied your pace at the end.

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