[David Goldberg]

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[nettipo1]

Hi Fellow VO Artists! Trying to do some comedic reads. Thank you for your feedback!

Honda Accord
I remember my first new car… I met more cute guys when that clunker would die on the highway. Then there was my subcompact. Stalled at the mere sight of a rain cloud. Next thing some gorgeous hunk pulls over to help. I met Harold on route 9. Vinny on the turnpike. Now I’ve got a Honda Accord. 85,000 miles without a hitch. Ooooohhh boy am I lonely.

Snapple
Attention shoppers: those of you who are over in home improvements, and are looking for Snapple, please be aware, you will NOT find any of Snapple’s assortment of flavors in THAT department. We realize a tasty drink like Snapple Raspberry Iced Tea or Kiwi Strawberry Cocktail would, in fact, be a FINE improvement to any home. But technically, Snapple is a beverage. Therefore, we are left with no choice but to keep it in the beverage aisle. With that said, thanks for your cooperation. And happy shopping, from SNAPPLE.

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[rustylj63]

Hi Nettipo, I really like the honda read. At the very beginning I thought it odd that your energy dropped as you talked about meeting cute guys on the highway. I thought that would be exciting. I loved the way you talked about meeting Harold and Vinnie… your emotion sounded perfect on that part to me. The ending was also quite good.

I listened to the Snapple bit a few times. I think what I was listening to was the pacing. If this were a narration I think the pace would be very good, clear diction, lots of room for it to breathe. But, if this is more of a commercial then it could be more conversational (a quicker pace). Other than that I think it sounded good.

[Ewhite44]

Hello –

I’m requesting feedback on a few practice reads. I’m recording on my phone so please try to disregard the low quality audio. Thanks in advance and best wishes to everyone!

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[rustylj63]

Hi, I liked the way you read Bona. The only thing I’d say about it is that it sounded like you said “harwood” instead of hardwood towards the end.
Google Pixel was also pretty strong. Listen to the way you say Google Pixel at the end, then listen to the way you say it at the beginning. I think the second one sounds a lot better.
I would have to say the Kia read was my least favorite. It sounds like you don’t have an opinion about it.
Hope this helps.

[Ewhite44]

Thank you, I really appreciate all of the feedback!

[RBenesVO]

Hey all, homework feedback time! Thanks in advance.

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[rustylj63]

Hey, Yeah… EWhite was spot on, your tempo increased pretty significantly at that point in the motel 6 read.
You’ve got a strong voice and you read well (no diction, enunciation problems). But I wonder what you think of buying Nissan. I couldn’t really hear your opinion in the read.

[Ewhite44]

Motel 6: Great voice! Audio sounded perfect. The only thing I noticed was that you seemed to pick up speed when you first said “Motel 6 recently got an updo of sorts”. Not sure if you meant to or not. I laughed at the joke at the end so your funny came across.

Nissan: Sounded good! Lots of words. Lol. I noticed something I’m not sure how to describe when you got to the word “us”. Otherwise, great!

[RBenesVO]

You’re right, I didn’t separate with-us. And turned it into withus. Thank you! I appreciate the feedback and for laughing at the prior read lol.

[rustylj63]

Hey Folks,
It’s almost demo time… I could really use some honest feedback. Please don’t worry about the recording quality, I’m sitting at my desk, in an untreated room, with the fan blowing because it’s HOT! Seriously though, I’d love your honest feedback on my narrations.
Thanks in advance!

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[Ewhite44]

Great reads! I have similar feedback regarding energy in the 4H read. That energy works well for Advanced Technologies though. Thanks for letting us provide feedback!

[RBenesVO]

Good reads. Perhaps add a little more energy in the 4H read. For advanced technologies I’d offer the same, particularly where you mentioned the “excitement and challenges”. When you state “Advanced Technologies” is sounds like Advance Technologies as the words are compressed together a bit. Without running your audio through my DAW I didn’t think the quality was bad lol, but since you said it was untreated I’ll leave it as such. Great work, good luck on the Demo! I recently finished my first one and and starting work towards #2.

[Nailah]

Good Day All,

I have a couple of practice reads. Any feedback would be appreciated! Thank you in advance!

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[rustylj63]

Hi Nailah,

You’ve got a great sounding voice, for the most part your pitch and tempo are very good. In “Milk”I heard your volume change a couple of times and in both pieces there are some words you are not finishing. With sounds like wit in a couple of places and you dropped a couple of Ks.
In Carnation, again, voice is great, I wonder if the tempo might be just a little slow though. You dropped the last letter on a couple of words in this one too (breakfas & coul (instead of could).
You’re sounding good though.

[marioh5]

Hi all! I’m looking for feedback for my 1st practice recording, any & all feedback is greatly appreciated!

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[rustylj63]

Hey Marioh,

Congrats on your first practice recording. I agree with both RBenes and Gill. This was a great first post! A couple of things I noticed was (as RBenes noted) a fluctuation in your volume (probably moving around the mic). A biggy though is the mispronunciation of arboretum you pronounced it ar-bor-ay-tum and it should be ar-bor-ee-tum. If you are unsure of pronunciation, most online dictionaries will provide pronunciations as well. Hey, it happens to all of us. I got busted on a word today. I was pronouncing it with a mid-west dialectal sound which is great in the mid-west, but its pronouced differently every where else. Also, when you said “scroll” it sounded to me like you were saying “shcroll” both times you said it.

Keep it up man. It only gets better with practice!

[marioh5]

Thank you! Great feedback, especially pointing out mispronouncing words, good stuff!

[Gill]

Nice strong introduction on your first practice read. I agree with RBenesVO when you get to a list of items try to vary them instead of just reading across the board. As your read speed increased your diction slurs when you say tour it sounds like chore. Once again when you have common words such as Use try to vary them and as you give instructions slow your pace instead of speeding it up. Keep it up!

[marioh5]

Excellent feedback, just what I need!

[RBenesVO]

Great work on knocking out your first practice recording. Voice fits it really nice. Consider adding a change in pitch/inflection when listing different things separated by a comma. A couple mouth clicks but no distracting large breaths which is good. There is a change in volume at I believe 0:18 where you begin describing the tabs. You may have changed position with the microphone at that point. I have noticed I’ll do that sometimes when I get animated and start acting out what I’m saying and inadvertently look towards something else and the change in positioning is noticeable in the recording. Different mics are more susceptible as mine is. But, now that I’ve gone long winded, nice work!

[marioh5]

Thanks for the feedback! Very useful and on point!

[anlevine95]

Hey all!

here’s 4 reads I made w/ two versions on each mp3. no need to listen to all just trying to get diversity of reads on each copy. appreciate any and all feedback. Thanks.

Adam

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[Alli]

Hello, Im practicing my VO and would love some feedback. I know my audio is terrible but aside from that please let me know how Im doing with my narration vocals. If you can please me know how Im doing with: my diction and articulation, my pacing, delivery, and if my voice matches this narration script.

I understand that I sound pretty young and youthful but I am almost 30yrs old, and after getting used to hearing my own voice, Im still trying to find my niche. Thanks!

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[rustylj63]

Hi Alli,

I think Gill gave you some great advice. I heard the same things she was talking about in both narrations. You’re pauses are long in places and it does create some confusion… it’s like is she done, oh nope… not done there’s more. Also, there were a few times you pronounced “the” more like “duh” your th sound is coming out like a d in a few places.
One last little note… can you turn up the gain on your microphone? Your recordings were very quiet and whenever a listener turns up the volume they’re going to hear a little extra noise.

[Alli]

Just scheduled a session with Pen-Pen!

[Gill]

You have a nice soft voice thats youthful.
Risewell:
I would be careful when pronouncing client’s products as I believe Risewell is mispronounced it sounds like you’re saying rinse well. There are lots of pauses in between your read which makes it a little awkward to listen to you can remove spaces with your editing so everything is combined and sounds smoother.

Type 2 Learn:
This was a very cute read, You gave this read good energy and the pace was on spot for instructional. I would just be mindful of the dead spaces in between your reads. Keep it up!

[Alli]

I really appreciate your feedback. I was actually saying rinsewell and didnt know it, so thanks for catching that! I will keep the pauses in mind as well, I was told to slow down my pace, so Im still finding that balance but I will definitely be practicing my audio edits by editing out those pauses.

[Gill]

Yes, there’s so much to keep track of when you’re learning, we’re all there with you! Keep at it and it will start to piece together!

[RBenesVO]

You have a very pleasant voice. The diction and articulation seem right about where they should be though the volume seemed a bit low. Is it normalized to -3db?

[Alli]

I will have to play around with the audio a bit more but I really appreciate your feedback! Thanks!

[gikegami]

Here is my recording of two commercials. I’d appreciate any feedback, mainly on delivery or pacing. Thank you

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[Cheechman]

Need to work on the slurring of certain words. Add more excitement and less hi nots.
Very articulate and good pace.

[RBenesVO]

Great energy in the reads. I would work on identifying which words where more inflection is needed. I think I’m hearing mouth clicks or mouth noises which could be edited out with something like iZotope RX or other plugin providers. Green apples work too!

[CMcHugh]

Hi everyone, posting two reads for homework, any feedback would be much appreciated 😊

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