[David Goldberg]

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[gikegami]

Here is my recording of two commercials. I’d appreciate any feedback, mainly on delivery or pacing. Thank you

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[Cheechman]

Need to work on the slurring of certain words. Add more excitement and less hi nots.
Very articulate and good pace.

[RBenesVO]

Great energy in the reads. I would work on identifying which words where more inflection is needed. I think I’m hearing mouth clicks or mouth noises which could be edited out with something like iZotope RX or other plugin providers. Green apples work too!

[CMcHugh]

Hi everyone, posting two reads for homework, any feedback would be much appreciated 😊

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[QuiceStraughter]

Hey, everyone. I used to post a lot of recordings before this website had been revamped. So this will be my first recording in three years. I found a copy on this website. I basically tried to memorize the script to see if it would make it sound more authentic. The copy seemed eerie to me so I went for a darker take.

In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the things we see and the things we fear, there are doors.
When they are opened,
Nightmares become reality.

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[gikegami]

I liked the tone of your voice and how you delivered it. However, one slight mistake you made was that you said “imaginable”, rather than “unimaginable”. Maybe you could also try highlighting some more key words, like doors. Great job overall.

[QuiceStraughter]

Shoot! I didn’t catch that when I was recording. Haha. I was so busy trying to memorize the script. Thanks for the critique. I really appreciate it.

[Elise Duke]

Hi everyone! Would love your feedback on these two samples. Specifically, how was my pace and conversational tone? Any feedback is appreciated!

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[RBenesVO]

Great read. Right pace and tone.

[RBenesVO]

Also, just listened to the running shoes one. Great work on the natural breathes and leaving them in for the narration. Flowed well.

[QuiceStraughter]

I like the reads for both of the copies. On the Crest Extender read, I just think it needs a bit more energy, and a bit more “smile”, if that makes sense. Other than that, good job.

[cammons01]

Hey everyone! Just uploaded a couple of practice reads. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

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[RBenesVO]

Great voice. Some mouth noises at the start of breathes to watch out for. At :12, and I think :20 for example. Maybe slow down just a tad to make it more conversational.

[cammons01]

Thanks for the feedback! Greatly appreciate it. I’ll go back and take another listen to the mouth noises in the clips.

[Elise Duke]

Hi cammons01! The American Airlines read started off great! It sounded welcoming and comfortable. The very, very end sounded rushed.

When you’re reading a list (for example, “your flight, your destination AND the equipment…”), it’s been suggested to me to not exaggerate the “and” so as not to draw too much attention to it and rather focus on the other words in the list. You can also vary the tone of your voice for each word in the list. This is feedback I’ve received and am working on this myself. I hope that helps!

[cammons01]

Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it. Thanks for the helpful tips. I’ll be mindful of this as I continue to practice.

[JNMullett]

Hi everyone, Here are a couple of practice reads I’ve been working on. Please let me know what you think. Thanks in advance!!

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[Cheechman]

WOW….great range. I like the over-the-top style and enjoy performing that style.
The wine read was great too
You hilied theproducts really nice.

[JNardecchia]

Reposting my latest with a smaller file size.

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[Gill]

Good diction- There are places where your pauses makes the read a little choppy removing those pauses will make the read smoother. Your pace is okay but could be a little faster. I also hear clicks which can be fixed with hydration or just editing out. Keep it up!

[JNardecchia]

Hello Forum!

Here are a couple reads, I’ve been working on warm/intimate/dry/raspy reads.

Thanks!

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[jr.roop]

Hi Everyone, I’m uploading two commercial pieces. I chose them because I like the products. Although I’m not sure I came off very natural in them. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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[Cheechman]

Need more excitement for Crayola.
Sounds like you are reading right from the script.
I don;t know if you read this a couple times to memorize but might want to try.

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening!

Working on yet another recording. I have a feeling I’ve done this one already, but… I like DQ, and my birthday’s next week, so hey, lol.

I don’t have a specific focus tonight, other than the usual- beginning/middle/end, conversational feeling (I kinda have the feeling that the ending doesn’t mesh well with this, but merely my opinion), etc.

Feedback and criticisms of any kind are greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance!

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