[David Goldberg]

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[IlikeGlen]

Hello Community
I would love all of your feedback on My commercial reads I just finished my third coaching session and my coach said she see some progress would like to know what you all think thanks in advance.

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[gigihernandezdoesit]

hi IlikeGlen! You have a fab voice and the energy is great for a kids candy commercial! the only note I have for you is to keep an eye on your diction: I heard “Aventure” and not “ADventure”. Thats it! keep up the good work!

[Cheechman]

The first and second sounds like the pitch is a little on the high side. Too sing Songy
The 3rd one sounded like you were reading opff the paper and very monotone

[Luke V]

I really liked how all three had their own clear tones. It also sounded like they were carefully balanced to keep the conversational nature of the read. That was awesome.

[Tim Kraft]

Hi all – back on the board after a brief hiatus. Working on a narration demo, so wanted to post a baseline of where I’m at now. Previous training has been in promo and just on the front-end of narration coaching. Basically I’m winging it, based on listening to other e-learning samples. Script is from a P2P site, with the usual vague direction “natural, approachable voice for a mental health e-learning module”.

Any and all feedback is welcome, from comments on the read itself to technical feedback.

Thanks as always!

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[Gill]

Welcome back Tim,
Your read on this script sounds natural and approachable. I like your energy and approach to it given that you’re winging it! I would just note your diction. I hear some dropped “th” when you say health and a slur with this word as well. I think that would be somewhere to start.

[twstark]

The attached is an excerpt from a corporate annual report script. The intent is to be professional, upbeat, and…well…”corporate,” while remaining as natural as possible. All feedback is welcome – thanks!

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[Gill]

Great job tackling this read. You sound professional and serious. There are a few things I would just be mindful of with corporate reads. Because they are consider formal reads, the pace is usually a little slower. The Beginning of your audio has a plosive when you say two thousand so you are aware. Your listing of variations are good but be mindful of pausing in between as it makes the read a little choppy. Overall very good diction and nice job!

[twstark]

Hi Gill,

Thanks, that’s helpful, and I agree. It’s a bit “halting” or choppy and I’m going to take another cut at it. Much appreciated!

[nicolance]

Documentary “travelogue” narration – working on “AND” and “TO” so they sound like Anned and too . . .and not Ann or ta – any feedback on diction or anything else, please. Lance

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[Gill]

I think you did good with and on here but I hear you with to if we say it fast enough it unconsciously comes out as ta. I hear it when you say “causing the water to boil over.” Try slowing down when you’re about to approach “to” I think your brain will remind you to say too instead. Keep at it!

[Tim Kraft]

Hi Lance – Loving the energy you bring to the read! Don’t lose that, but I think you should tone down the enthusiasm. When I started with a coach, I recall being told (often) when I went “over the top”…that’s what I’m hearing here. You have a wonderful narration voice, reminds me of Jean Shepard in “A Christmas Story”. Let your natural excitement and sincerity shine through and I think this will sound like a more real experience that people can envision, which is what it’s all about (unless the director tells you otherwise of course).

I’m hearing some plosives, are you using a pop filter? If so, you can probably dial back the ennunciation. Again, just guessing that your natural style is already quite articulate.

Hoping this helps!

[RetsofNoraa]

Here’s my first post! Decided to tackle the Motel 6 script for my first session. Excuse the quality; I can’t hook up my microphone to the iPad just yet, and my desktop computer makes way too much noise to make recording viable.

Currently working on enunciation, but any and all feedback is greatly appreciated!

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[Cheechman]

Need to hilite Motel 6 more.
no emotion in the read.
Voice sounds good.

[Luke V]

I’m right there with you on PCs making too much noise. Currently trying to find an alternative myself.

Concerning the recording, if your focus is enunciation, I highly recommend “stretching” your voice by doing lip trills or even just taking a half-filled bottle of water and blowing bubbles with a straw. Doing so helps you build up breath energy that makes your words sound more lively, impactful, and clear. Overall, I thought the read was quite natural and conversational.

[Evan Papier]

It sounded really good. A few words were a little hard to hear so just make sure you have great diction the whole commercial!

[nicolance]

Please listen and provide feedback – this is for an instructional video narration, trying to sound both informative and conversational. Any feedback at all will be very very welcome – thanks, Lance

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[Luke V]

I love the consistency you have concerning the volume and tempo. I don’t know if it was intentional, but I also love the subtle change to a slightly higher pitch at 43 seconds in the mp3 when reading “height”. Overall, it was very informative and digestible.

[DillonP]

I have two new recordings I got done. A commercial Discovery Kids and Narration Breast Cancer Research. I would apricate some feedback to help me be ready for when my Demos being developed, thank you.

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[Grace17]

Hi Dillon,
I think a playful attitude is great for the discovery kids read, slowing down a bit would help the audience process what you’re saying. This is a descriptive read that I think is meant to paint a picture in the listener’s mind of what animal this could possibly be, with the adjectives “big”, “stinky” and words “see” and “dark.” So I would suggest placing more value on/hitting those words. The degree to which you hit those descriptive and valuable words is up to you. I think painting a fun picture in your mind of what you’re saying would help you hit the words without overemphasizing them. You elongated “discovery kids” at the end which sounds great to me.

In the breast cancer read, you sound a little emotionally removed so try talking to or thinking of someone specifically and connecting to the essence of what you’re saying. The pacing is good though! Getting closer to the mic for the breast cancer read is a nice choice, for a more intimate read. I noticed you overstated the “t” in “breast” and “fight”, so watch out for over-enunciating. I also suggest getting more purposeful about what words to hit, otherwise you miss the opportunity to hit some very valuable words and be the most effective. Though breast cancer is a serious topic, try experimenting with a more conversational read, instead of a more professional and removed read. I think being more conversational will match with the intimacy created by being closer to the mic.

If you’re not already, consider doing tongue twisters while holding a pencil between your teeth to improve articulation. Just a little bit of that can make a big difference.

[nicolance]

Dillon – Discovery Kids is a promo – a little rushed and a little slurring at start – try to slow down and have fun with the words. As for the breast cancer piece, I think is meant for a female actor. What kind of demo are you making – commercial? You should look for other spots that work with your warm, soft and caring tone. Lance

[kbridges]

Hi there! I received some feedback from a potential client asking if I have a more mature read. I typically target younger sounding spots, but want to give the “mature” thing a shot.

Attached are two recordings. One is a radio spot (less mature in my opinion) and a travel podcast intro (more mature? I’ve heard that travel is a good genre for a mature read).

Please share your feedback and any tips on a more mature read! I want to play a different character without sounding inauthentic.

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[Cheechman]

Solfullmoon was very monotone and sounded like you were reading the script.
Needs more excitement

[twstark]

Hi KB,

I agree with Grace’s notes above. I also think the NZ-Travel read would benefit from slightly more emotional/enthusiastic vocal expression. Your voice, to me, sounds mature enough for the read. But I would add a little more excitement about NZ as a travel destination. One other thought re. NZ-Travel: Be sure you’re confident in how to pronounce words with which you’re not familiar. The Maori people would generally pronounce the word either as “Mahwri” or “Mahwdi” but never “May-o-ri.” In other words, the “a” should be pronounced like, “Ow!” versus the month of “May.” Hope that makes sense. 🙂

[Grace17]

Hi kbridges,

I like how clear and articulate your voice is. I would think a mature read is about sounding knowledgeable in the subject and confident, like an expert. So I recommend aiming to sound very knowledgeable in what you’re saying. The Travel read actually strikes me as more mature because you “hit” the word at the end of your sentences(as the Edgestudio guidebook describes it) more than you did in the radio read, which made you sound more confident in the Travel read. It seems like you were trying to be mature by being less emotional in the radio spot, which might be what the client wants too, but without that sense of expertise in your voice, the read may just sound merely nonchalant for the most part. In the radio read, the end of most of your sentences had an uptick in pitch which can be fine, it’s just that it sounded like you were questioning what you were saying especially in the first sentence. So I think you inverted your words too often in that read and that wouldn’t sound expert-like. So I think hitting words, more than inverting them, particularly in the end of your sentence, would make you sound more credible and mature. At the end of the radio spot, you hit the word “.com”, for example. Having the attitude of an expert would help too.

[edixon310]

Hi all!
It’s been a while. I created a bio that I would like for you to comment on.
I’ve been working on my equipment settings and techniques.

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[twstark]

Earl,

Velvety smooth, and very clever – well done!!

[kbridges]

Wow, this is so creative! Such an awesome, entertaining way to show the variety of characters you can achieve with your voice. I found it really compelling and it kept me listening all the way through. You really “create a whole world” with your voice just as you say in the recording! The editing and mixing is really smooth and seamless as well, with really good sound effects and music throughout it. Nothing but positive affirmations from me!

[Grace Lee]

Sorry! I don’t know how to delete this. I meant to reply to someone else’s post but it created a new post. Please disregard!

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