[JAE Factor]

The volume levels are low. You may want to check the gain on your equipment and ensure it’s a suitable place for picking up your voice. Nevertheless, the audio is clean, I agree with the previous feedback.

I loved your first take on that piece and feel that you do have the voice for this style of VO. Another thing element that you’ll get used to as you continue is editing out your breaths at the beginning of a new word, phrase, or sentence (I’m still getting used it myself), but this will come with practice. Great job!