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  • in reply to: Feedback Forum #67294
    RYoung
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    Hi Luke, Congrats on a great demo! I like the Bain character, great work and good luck!
    Rich

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66823
    RYoung
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    Good work on this genre John! I like your storytelling ability to connect with the listener, very nice. My only critique would be some of the long pauses in the last two reads, it breaks up the flow, unless you had another reason to separate the lines, not sure?

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66822
    RYoung
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    Hi Steve, pleasant and welcoming audio tour! This one has a lot of lists which you handled very well! The inflections are good as well. I would just invest a little more emotion to entice the listener in describing the museum initially and the last sentence could emphasize “you” and “their works” if that makes sense, great work and good to hear a familiar voice!

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66696
    RYoung
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    Jay, really like your delivery very relaxed and also you’re inflections seem to be pretty spot on. I would only say that especially on the a1 sauce commercial you may want to add a little smile at the end to emphasize the product otherwise great work and thanks for sharing that.

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66695
    RYoung
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    I would say very smooth deliveries! Nice work Bill.

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66684
    RYoung
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    Hi, you may want to convert to mp3 so everyone can listen instead of downloading the wav file. your style seems fine for this genre, a little disjointed though and try a more relaxed approach? Good luck and hope to hear more from you!

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66682
    RYoung
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    This is a unique script from the library, a while back. It was written by Richurd. Thanks for listening any comments most welcome!

    Where is the home of your heart?
    The machinations of man covets
    and squanders our time as though it
    were of some significant value.
    Our hearts become preoccupied
    with issues and perplexities
    that never seem to go away.
    So debilitating are it’s affects we
    long for solace.
    The heart longs for a place of respite.
    Invariably we are drawn back to the land.
    The earths constancy and tranquil
    endurance washes over us, cleansing us.
    A vast array of landscapes
    that all have the same effect.
    They take back the space that is stolen by man
    and fills your heart with a calm and pleasant reward.
    You can travel the world of man with your heart
    but it is the land that you will come home to.
    This grand earth in all it’s splendor,
    is the place we call home.
    Our fondest memories are
    bound up in the land on which we stand.
    Memories of times that are now lost to
    the machinations of man.
    A new generation can never know
    nor recover all that has been lost
    and that is now preserved only in our memory.
    A day will come that is not so far away
    when even that treasure trove will fade and disappear.
    Yet from this land we can draw strength that all will not be lost.
    For within it’s soil are the seeds of renewal.
    Therein lies the hope that mellows our souls,
    the hope that all that man has wrought
    the earth will erase.
    The earth will once again be a place
    we can call home.

    Written and contributed by Richurd
    Music Bed : Susan Boyle – Mull of Kintyre – Windsor 2012

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    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66067
    RYoung
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    Hi Jasol, the Spanish language telephony was nice but the accent probably shouldn’t be used if your not familiar with it, but good try! I like the margarita delivery sounds like a travelouge very well done! The last one is tough to make sound interesting, it just didn’t flow? I like your voice for travelouge type documentaries or commercials on travel, good luck on your demo!

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #66053
    RYoung
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    Thanks both, appreciate your listening!

    in reply to: Feedback Forum #65948
    RYoung
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    Excellent delivery on this narration corporate style.

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