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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
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Hi kungfu23,
I thought your read was quite clear. I think it sounds a bit monotone in my ear but I do see that this is a more serious read so perhaps that is the tone you were going for. Otherwise, I think you read well.
Sarania
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I agree that this performance read does sound monotone. I also hear that this is a commercial for the New York Times. It was good to listen to. If you’re aiming for seriousness in your performance, good job. A script would’ve helped me understand the seriousness of it all when I first listened to your performance.
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Hi there!
I love that you did a script reading for a makeup tutorial! I like the enthusiasm!
There are a couple of things I would be mindful of:
First, in the section, “How do you get it?”, sounds like “How do-ya get it?”
Secondly, I noticed some places where you sound “breathy” in between words. Be careful of micro-pauses, too.
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Comment: I like how you are aiming for the commercial read. You have good enthusiasm in your voice as you perform. You keep the listener interested in the product you are talking about.
Critique: In the beginning, there seems to be a “roomy” sound in the background. It was hard to know what you were saying at first. Please consider inserting a script for the listeners. In the end where you say, “Simple basic steps in this video”, I heard an unnecessary pause that I think you can easily fix to make your commercial performance better.
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<div>One of my favorite posters says, “Life is a test. It is only a test. Had this been a real life, you would have been instructed where to go and what to do.” Whenever I think of this humorous bit of wisdom, it reminds me to not take my life so seriously. And in the next hour, I’ll help you learn how to not take your life so seriously as well.
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isabrandon30 – Nice work here. I like your warm relaxing tone. Seems like a good tone of voice for eLearning. Very welcoming and non-threatening. Great recording quality as well. There was only one part that I thought you could come at with a slightly bit of different energy. You picked up the energy at the end a bit and I heard a sparkle in your eye and a smile in your voice, but I thought the line “humorous bit of wisdom” could use a bit more sparkle here as well just to break it up so it doesn’t sound too much the same throughout. Nice job!
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Nice work. It came across as conversational and easy to listen to for a self help tape, and you interpreted the copy well. One thing that might enhance the read is making the quotation slightly different from the rest, or more clearly emphasized- it will help draw the listener in, you can accent the humor in it even more, and it will let the listener know what words are your own versus the quotation.
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<span style=”font-weight: 400;”>Would love some feedback on this practice script. Feedback on vocal performance and recording space if you could. Thanks!
Script:</span><span style=”font-weight: 400;”>Skechers Arch Fit</span>
<span style=”font-weight: 400;”>We put a lot of stress on our feet, it’s no wonder they ache. Introducing arch fit from Skechers. Arch fit distributes pressure across the arch providing balance and support to make walking more comfortable. Plus they’re even machine washable. Try a pair from skechers.com</span>
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Nice job! I think you hit a nice tone for this read and the tempo feels perfect. I think one area you could work on with this read would be a smoother delivery. There are parts of this read that sound a bit staccato (“We put a lot. of stress. on our feet.”, “Arch fit distributes pressure. across the arch…”) In normal conversation (which seems to be the kind of vibe this script is going for) we don’t really do this – we think in complete phrases and move through them smoothly while speaking, so you could try doing some reads where instead of performing in front of the mic you try to talk to it the same way you’d talk to a friend about your sore feet and these sick shoes that feel amazing!!!
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Looks like this forum has a little bit of a bug, no matter! Here is what I said originally:
Would love some feedback on this practice script. Feedback on vocal performance and recording space if you could. Thanks!
We put a lot of stress on our feet, it’s no wonder they ache. Introducing arch fit from Skechers. Arch fit distributes pressure across the arch providing balance and support to make walking more comfortable. Plus they’re even machine washable. Try a pair from skechers.com
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Hello All,
Just one more. I would love some feedback on this one as I am really trying to pick the correct tone for the script. I sometimes struggle with more serious scripts.
Thanks so much,
Sarania
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Script:
Social Security
Whether you’re young or old, male or female, single or with a family – this video is for and about you. That’s because Social Security has programs that affect everybody. This presentation was prepared by the Social Security Administration and tells you what you need to know about Social Security while still working and what you need to know when it’s your turn to collect benefits. It also provides an overview of Medicare and Supplemental Security Income benefits.
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Hi All,
This was another that I think I did well with but would love any feedback.
Thanks so much,
Sarania
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Hi Sarania, I thought your tone was great. I liked the use of inflection. One thing that caught my ear was in the first line, you sort of combined “is an” together and then it occurred again in the second line with “in a 1945 survey”. I might be nitpicking here but in the 3rd line, “Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because…” a short pause after the second Betty to emphasize her name. Just a thought. Great read otherwise!
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Betty Crocker
Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second-best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt. She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion. Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker. The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today. -
Hi Sarania,
Very good performance. Again, like the previous recording, it sounds like a good narration of an essay. I like how there’s no background noises and that I can hear you perfectly with your delivery. My only critique is that you include a script for the audience to follow along with.
hope this helps,
-SL
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Hi All,
Working on a different tone here than what I am used to. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.
Thanks so much,
Sarania
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Hi Sarania, I like how you posted this recording in time for Halloween. I wish you had attached a script for the audience to follow along with. The performance is very clear. I like how there’s no background noise and that I can hear your narration very well. I imagine this is possibly a documentary, maybe an audiobook essay? Your delivery reminds me of Stephen King’s book, “Danse Maccabre” where he talks about Horror films being junk food and what scares people the most etc. Keep up the good work!
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Hi SuperLuke,
Thanks so much for your feedback. I really appreciate it. You’re right, I forgot to post the script. Here it is:
About Horror
Take a trip back to a time when late night creature features were all the rage and the personalities that presented them were just as popular as the movies.
Beginning in the 1950s, the horror fest was a staple of regional television. From ghouls to vampires – to werewolves and crypt keepers – every host had a persona to suit their unique personalities.
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Practicing sounding calmer, more inviting, and retrospective. Mostly just trying to focus on more effectively conveying non-humor emotions in my voice. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!
Script:
Things that never get old; enjoying the warm crackle of a fire under a clear sky full of stars. Stepping out of your tent in the morning and taking a deep breath of fresh cool, air. And that first sip of the perfect cup of coffee to start your day. Gevalia Coffee – Discover your perfect cup.
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Hello!
Another one from me – at the moment I’m hoping for feedback on recording quality as I’m in a new studio space.
Thank you so much!
Bethan
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Nice contrast to your first example! Again, very clean recording quality, and I hear no excess noise from either the space or you.
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Another great performance BethanScreen. I like how there’s no background noise in the performance. Your voice and performance comes out nicely. As I am familiar with a degree in History, I can relate this as the struggle for power with the British King and Queens, or even the TV show, “The Crown”. Would you mind posting scripts for the audience to read along as they listen to your performance. Which British dialect did you choose to use in the performance? I think it really fits the performance.
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Hello!
I’m in a new recording space so I’m mostly looking for feedback on recording sound and quality.
Let me know what you think.
Thank you so much for your help!
Bethan
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Hi Bethan! I’m very new to this field (these are, in fact, my first words written in this forum) but thought I would chime in. I don’t know what your previous space sounded like–it would be interesting to hear a recording from your old set-up–but this sounds very clean and clear to me. I hear nothing in the spaces when you are not speaking that would be a distraction, and you have a lovely speaking voice. I imagine that to get the most effective feedback, somebody would need to be able to do a before/after comparison and run your recording through an equalizer to make sure all registers are well represented. But to my ear, you sound great 😉
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Hi there BethanScreen, I really enjoyed the recording quality and the performance was great. The accent made the commercial very interesting to listen to. Although there was no script to follow along with. I listened to it 4 times, to hear what you were saying and because I liked what I heard. Very nice voice.
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