[David Goldberg]

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[Sarania]

Hello All,

Just one more. I would love some feedback on this one as I am really trying to pick the correct tone for the script. I sometimes struggle with more serious scripts.

Thanks so much,

Sarania

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[Sarania]

Script:
Social Security
Whether you’re young or old, male or female, single or with a family – this video is for and about you. That’s because Social Security has programs that affect everybody. This presentation was prepared by the Social Security Administration and tells you what you need to know about Social Security while still working and what you need to know when it’s your turn to collect benefits. It also provides an overview of Medicare and Supplemental Security Income benefits.

[Sarania]

Hi All,

This was another that I think I did well with but would love any feedback.

Thanks so much,

Sarania

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[irvj]

Hi Sarania, I thought your tone was great. I liked the use of inflection. One thing that caught my ear was in the first line, you sort of combined “is an” together and then it occurred again in the second line with “in a 1945 survey”. I might be nitpicking here but in the 3rd line, “Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because…” a short pause after the second Betty to emphasize her name. Just a thought. Great read otherwise!

[Sarania]

Script:

Betty Crocker
Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second-best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt. She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion. Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker. The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today.

[SuperLuke]

Hi Sarania,

Very good performance. Again, like the previous recording, it sounds like a good narration of an essay. I like how there’s no background noises and that I can hear you perfectly with your delivery. My only critique is that you include a script for the audience to follow along with.

hope this helps,

-SL

[Sarania]

Hi All,

Working on a different tone here than what I am used to. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Thanks so much,

Sarania

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[kfvoice]

Hi Sarania! Great read! You had a nice flow, and a range in tone.

As for the quality of the recording, I heard some clicks and pops. Can you hear them?

Kathy

[SuperLuke]

Hi Sarania, I like how you posted this recording in time for Halloween. I wish you had attached a script for the audience to follow along with. The performance is very clear. I like how there’s no background noise and that I can hear your narration very well. I imagine this is possibly a documentary, maybe an audiobook essay? Your delivery reminds me of Stephen King’s book, “Danse Maccabre” where he talks about Horror films being junk food and what scares people the most etc.  Keep up the good work!

[Sarania]

Hi SuperLuke,

Thanks so much for your feedback. I really appreciate it. You’re right, I forgot to post the script. Here it is:

About Horror
Take a trip back to a time when late night creature features were all the rage and the personalities that presented them were just as popular as the movies.
Beginning in the 1950s, the horror fest was a staple of regional television. From ghouls to vampires – to werewolves and crypt keepers – every host had a persona to suit their unique personalities.

[Anonymous]

Practicing sounding calmer, more inviting, and retrospective. Mostly just trying to focus on more effectively conveying non-humor emotions in my voice. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Script:

Things that never get old; enjoying the warm crackle of a fire under a clear sky full of stars. Stepping out of your tent in the morning and taking a deep breath of fresh cool, air. And that first sip of the perfect cup of coffee to start your day. Gevalia Coffee – Discover your perfect cup.
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[Sarania]

Hi leenaji,

I don’t see your recording here. I don’t think it attached properly. Would love to hear it.

[BethanScreen]

Hello!

Another one from me – at the moment I’m hoping for feedback on recording quality as I’m in a new studio space.

Thank you so much!

Bethan

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[Beckolin]

Nice contrast to your first example! Again, very clean recording quality, and I hear no excess noise from either the space or you.

[SuperLuke]

Another great performance BethanScreen. I like how there’s no background noise in the performance. Your voice and performance comes out nicely. As I am familiar with a degree in History, I can relate this as the struggle for power with the British King and Queens, or even the TV show, “The Crown”. Would you mind posting scripts for the audience to read along as they listen to your performance. Which British dialect did you choose to use in the performance? I think it really fits the performance.

[BethanScreen]

Hello!

I’m in a new recording space so I’m mostly looking for feedback on recording sound and quality.

Let me know what you think.

Thank you so much for your help!

Bethan

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[irvj]

Loved your voice! I thought the recording sounded clean. I wish I could have heard something from your previous recording space as a comparison.

[Beckolin]

Hi Bethan! I’m very new to this field (these are, in fact, my first words written in this forum) but thought I would chime in. I don’t know what your previous space sounded like–it would be interesting to hear a recording from your old set-up–but this sounds very clean and clear to me. I hear nothing in the spaces when you are not speaking that would be a distraction, and you have a lovely speaking voice. I imagine that to get the most effective feedback, somebody would need to be able to do a before/after comparison and run your recording through an equalizer to make sure all registers are well represented. But to my ear, you sound great 😉

[SuperLuke]

Hi there BethanScreen, I really enjoyed the recording quality and the performance was great. The accent made the commercial very interesting to listen to. Although there was no script to follow along with. I listened to it 4 times, to hear what you were saying and because I liked what I heard. Very nice voice.

[whataboutsmee]

Practicing sounding calmer, more inviting, and retrospective. Mostly just trying to focus on more effectively conveying non-humor emotions in my voice. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Script:

Things that never get old; enjoying the warm crackle of a fire under a clear sky full of stars. Stepping out of your tent in the morning and taking a deep breath of fresh cool, air. And that first sip of the perfect cup of coffee to start your day. Gevalia Coffee – Discover your perfect cup.

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[kfvoice]

You do sound calm and retrospective here. Make sure the ‘s’ on stars is pronounced clearer. I do hear a little background noise, however, I am sure you have that solved by now.

[SuperLuke]

Great performance regarding the coffee. But I hear a humming sound in the background when you’re not speaking. Please look into that and you’ll be all set

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[SuperLuke]

So far, it sounds like a good commercial. Your voice sounded serious for a serious cause. Good recording quality and performance.

[CYeschenko]

Continued practice! Working on a more serious PSA than my usual humor filled copy, so any comments focused on performance would be especially appreciated. Thanks!

 

National Flood Insurance Program

Wherever it can rain, it can flood. And where it can flood, damage to homes and businesses is a serious risk. Last year, flooding was reported in all 50 states, including many areas not usually considered to be prone to flooding. More than a third of all flood insurance claims came from those lower-risk areas. The best way to keep a heavy rain from becoming a financial disaster is to get flood insurance backed by FEMAS’s National Flood Insurance Program. Visit FloodSmart.gov/info to assess your level of flood risk, estimate your premium, learn about low-cost policy options, and find an agent in your area.

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<h5 class=”title”>A Philosophy of Life</h5>
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A man with one watch knows what time it is;
a man with two watches is never quite sure.

Don’t look where you fall,
but where you slipped.

Look at life through the windshield,
not the rear view mirror.

Nothing brings you peace but yourself.

People may doubt what you say
but they will believe what you do.

Bee nice to people on your way up
because you’ll need them on your way down.

The time you enjoyed wasting
was not wasted.

Never explain.
Your friends do not need it
and your enemies will not believe it.

While seeking revenge,
dig two graves – one for yourself.

Courage is not the lack of fear,
but the ability to act while facing fear.

You’ve got to do your own growing
no matter how tall your father was.

The best way to predict your future
is to create it.

It is better to be hated for what you are
than to be loved for what you are not.

Don’t worry about the people in your past
there’s a reason they didn’t make it to your future.

Happiness has one advantage over wealth;
no one can borrow it.

Everything happens for a reason.

Forgiveness is not something we do for other people
We do it for ourselves-to get well and move on.

What’s different in you makes you beautiful.

Contributed by Richurd

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[SuperLuke]

Great performance and recording quality! I say that you nailed it right on the money! It really meant a lot to me as I read along and listened to your performance delivery. It’s very touching, I could tell you were giving it your all “being in the moment”

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