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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #56778
    JTLeyba
    Participant

    Looking to make a realistic sounding ad spot for my Demo Reel. I’ve been told I have a young sounding voice so maybe college student products might be the way to go for me. Any feedback or constructive criticism is helpful and appreciated.

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    • #56824
      CYeschenko
      Participant

      Very nice! The casual, conversational feel and subtle humor shines through, and you’re right on track with branding in my opinion- college aged roles would suit your voice well. One note to keep in mind- it came in at around 36 seconds, so if you were submitting for a 30 second commercial you would have to pace it a bit quicker than on your current read. Great job overall though!

      • #56832
        JTLeyba
        Participant

        Thanks a lot! Will keep that in mind!

  • #56775
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    Ok, good recording quality, docr15. I’m glad there’s clear enunciation in your read and that there’s no background noises to distract the audience from your delivery.  As a commercial read, it’s very good. I like the “up next” feeling you have in your delivery. As a critique, maybe emphasize more when you say “attack”, “break”, and ” the nation is under siege”, it may add to the audience’s anticipation of, “Oh my goodness, I need to know what happens next on “24”. It’s an opinion.

    Great work

  • #56768
    docr15
    Participant

    The last of this week’s homework assignments for my Commercial Demo prep.

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    • #56790
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Hey Docr15 – On the Karibui coffee piece: I thought you did a nice job overall on the production. It sounded as though you had some pauses in unnatural places. It took me out of the read, and a bit of saliva noise. My coach mentioned that eating a piece of apple can help with this. I want to try that out myself. 🙂 Nice work! Keep it up.

  • #56765
    docr15
    Participant

    Another homework read for my Commercial Demo prep.

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    • #57212
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      For Docr15 – Cute! I like this read! I think there might be slightly too long of a pause between “what can ____ (pause) like a ____”. Maybe more of a micropause vs. a true pause would work better. Nice audio quality and nice job on this performance!

    • #56773
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Good job with the commercial read. You sounded ready to entertain the kids on tv, like the “up next on this show…” My only critique is when you ended the “up next on discovery kids”. I could hear your voice lose energy as you ended, saying  “discovery kids”. Other than that good work.

      • #57166
        bergtravis
        Participant

        Sounds great! Between “on’ and ‘discovery kids” might have been a little to long of a pause but that just my opinion

  • #56733
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    Here’s the one that I think has the most noise reduction

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  • #56731
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    For recording purposes, mostly eliminating background noises, I am resubmitting my Wise Man character read for my demo.

    Is this performance better?

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    • #56767
      docr15
      Participant

      Great voice characterization SuperLuke.  You seemed to change character a bit over the course of the read.  At first you sounded very strained, then you had an english, somewhat Winston Churchill sound then the last sentence lost all the gruffness and Churchill sound and it was just an english accent.

      • #56772
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        Thank you docr15 for your comment. Yes, me and my coach talked about “staying in character”. In the beginning I sort of sound like my young self. Then I was doing my best to sound like much time has passed and that I was older. When my voice sounds strained, I was following his advice by “constricting my throat” as I speak to have sound like an old textured, withered, and wise man. At the very end, I had to breathe and let go of my throat as I spoke.

        All feedback is welcome! How was the recording quality? Any advice on how to sound older, staying in character, without constricting my throat too much as I perform?

  • #56729
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    Wise man and hope script; for character demo. My coach wants me to sound like a gruff, rough textured old wizard who wants to remind his friends about the strength of “hope”. I’m really trying to eliminate problems in my home studio. Feedback needed.

    Lawless marauders spread pain and suffering as the sky burns. But we must never abandon Hope. We must look to the light in ourselves and each other. That light will become the dawn of a new civilization.

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    • #57315
      mkell755
      Participant

      SuperLuke – really liked the grit in your voice, and I was completely picturing the scene – dark and forboding in my mind. Very good!

    • #57165
      bergtravis
      Participant

      There is a little white noise in the background. Other than that it sounds good!

  • #56727
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    You did a good job with this recording. Sounded like a real commercial. Although, I thought when you said “ESPN” and “ABC”, I thought you were forcing the words out while trying to make sure you enunciated everything correctly.

    • #56764
      docr15
      Participant

      Thanks SuperLuke!

  • #56721
    docr15
    Participant

    Re-posting this since the website update.  This is homework for my Commercial Demo prep.  Thanks for any and all comments!

    “The following is a special presentation of ESPN on ABC… home of the Citi BCS National Championship.”

    • #56722
      docr15
      Participant

      Ooops, mis-clicked and sent the wrong file.

      Re-posting this since the website update.  This is homework for my Commercial Demo prep.  Thanks for any and all comments!

      “The following is a special presentation of ESPN on ABC… home of the Citi BCS National Championship.”

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      • #57183
        GJS
        Participant

        I didn’t have as much of an issue with your “ESPN” OR “ABC,” I think it sounds great! My only suggestion would be one extra beat before “Home of . . . because the who’s presenting it flows great, but the “what?” oh, “Home of the Citi . . . ” etc., I just would have taken the quick extra beat and hit “Home” a little harder. But it’s very, very good as it is.

      • #56812
        isabrandon30
        Participant

        WOW!  That sounded really good!  I think you did a good job in making the networks stand out. And your pacing was perfect for this type of work!  Good luck with your Demo!

  • #56631
    Tammy
    Participant

    Please review and provide constructive criticism. Thank you!

    County Center Homes
    Welcome to a Classic Home Town located in the Center of Prince William County.

    Come see how classic hometown living can be part of your modern lifestyle. County Center combines superb amenities with a friendly neighborhood atmosphere, creating a warm and inviting community designed to bring people together. Relax with friends around the swimming pool, enjoy playtime at the tot lots, meet up with friends in the Pocket Parks or on the Village Green. You can also take advantage of the walking and bike paths, tennis and multi-purpose courts, community retail center, farmers market, and even a community amphitheater. County Center. Classic Hometown. Modern Lifestyles.

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    • #57397
      dam1571
      Participant

      County Center Homes – Really nice voice. Smooth delivery.

    • #57258
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Lovely voice! A nice warm tone. Crisp and clear. Makes me want to visit! Great job!

    • #56806
      isabrandon30
      Participant

      I think you chose a great tone for this read.  It really suited the copy well.  Inflections especially towards the end were nice and clear.  Good Job!

    • #56763
      docr15
      Participant

      Tammy, nice performance for your County Center Homes script!  Great recording quality.  My only comment would be that it seemed to sound rushed, perhaps you edited the spaces between sentences too tightly?  Still, a great-sounding voice!  Nicely done.

    • #56709
      jonathan.anderson
      Edge Studio Staff

      Hi! Jonathan Anderson, Director of Education at Edge here. Congrats on being the first person to upload to our brand new feedback forum! You may want to try to re-upload your audio file, as we couldn’t get it to play anything.

      • #56728
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        I enjoyed the performance read of this county center homes presentation

        • #57218
          AndreaC
          Participant

          I really love the warmth in your voice! Very clear, and you create a sense of honesty and connection that I aspire to! Thank you!

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          StevenMBrun
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