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  • #56826
    CYeschenko
    Participant

    Continued practice! Working on a more serious PSA than my usual humor filled copy, so any comments focused on performance would be especially appreciated. Thanks!

     

    National Flood Insurance Program

    Wherever it can rain, it can flood. And where it can flood, damage to homes and businesses is a serious risk. Last year, flooding was reported in all 50 states, including many areas not usually considered to be prone to flooding. More than a third of all flood insurance claims came from those lower-risk areas. The best way to keep a heavy rain from becoming a financial disaster is to get flood insurance backed by FEMAS’s National Flood Insurance Program. Visit FloodSmart.gov/info to assess your level of flood risk, estimate your premium, learn about low-cost policy options, and find an agent in your area.

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  • #56807
    isabrandon30
    Participant

    <h5 class=”title”>A Philosophy of Life</h5>
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    A man with one watch knows what time it is;
    a man with two watches is never quite sure.

    Don’t look where you fall,
    but where you slipped.

    Look at life through the windshield,
    not the rear view mirror.

    Nothing brings you peace but yourself.

    People may doubt what you say
    but they will believe what you do.

    Bee nice to people on your way up
    because you’ll need them on your way down.

    The time you enjoyed wasting
    was not wasted.

    Never explain.
    Your friends do not need it
    and your enemies will not believe it.

    While seeking revenge,
    dig two graves – one for yourself.

    Courage is not the lack of fear,
    but the ability to act while facing fear.

    You’ve got to do your own growing
    no matter how tall your father was.

    The best way to predict your future
    is to create it.

    It is better to be hated for what you are
    than to be loved for what you are not.

    Don’t worry about the people in your past
    there’s a reason they didn’t make it to your future.

    Happiness has one advantage over wealth;
    no one can borrow it.

    Everything happens for a reason.

    Forgiveness is not something we do for other people
    We do it for ourselves-to get well and move on.

    What’s different in you makes you beautiful.

    Contributed by Richurd

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    • #56830
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Great performance and recording quality! I say that you nailed it right on the money! It really meant a lot to me as I read along and listened to your performance delivery. It’s very touching, I could tell you were giving it your all “being in the moment”

  • #56805
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    Hi Katelyn,

    I really enjoyed your performance, you have a great voice. Good recording quality too. As a commercial read, it may be important when you say, “We prefer a glass”, to emphasize the importance of a glass of wine. But other than that, you did an excellent job!

  • #56788
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

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    Beringer Wine

    Some might choose a lecture or a documentary film to tell the story of 125 years of winemaking. We prefer a glass. At Beringer, we are proud to be the only winery ever to win Wine Spectator’s “Number-1 Wine of the Year” for both a cabernet and a chardonnay. But our greatest achievement lies in knowing that everything we’ve learned is yours to enjoy – each time you pour a glass of our wine. Beringer…All we are in every bottle.

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    • #57234
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Really nice! Sounds great! A warm and calm delivery — that’s how wine makes us feel! Right!?

      My only critique is the “gasp” at the beginning of your opening line. Other than that, good job!

    • #57167
      bergtravis
      Participant

      Only critique I would have would be when saying hundred it comes out a little bit like hunderd. I definitely have that problem a lot. Sounds great!

      • #57211
        katelyndawnvo
        Participant

        Lol you’re so right… HUNDERED!!!

    • #57163
      GJS
      Participant

      Sounds really good! Actually, I would echo Superluke on the “We prefer a glass,” line. Very nice, I’m ready for some Beringer!

      • #57370
        JDonaldson
        Participant

        Be careful with are and our. Can k**l the ownership tag.

  • #56783
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    JTLeyba, good afternoon. I really enjoyed the commercial ad for the Caribou coffee. I enjoyed the background music as well. Your beginning was perfect as you gave a convincing “ah coffee, the drink of life” made the audience get the feel for how good coffee is. Very relatable as the commercial read continued. Keep up the great work

  • #56781
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    I have two computers. This is my Mac. I was using Audacity when I made this. Feedback is appreciated.

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    • #56809
      isabrandon30
      Participant

      Great job getting into character!  I was worried at first when I heard the voice because I thought it might not be clear; but each word was nice and clear.  I really like that breathy quality to the voice initially.  Maybe see if you can hold on to it all the way to the last words?  Keep doing great things!

  • #56778
    JTLeyba
    Participant

    Looking to make a realistic sounding ad spot for my Demo Reel. I’ve been told I have a young sounding voice so maybe college student products might be the way to go for me. Any feedback or constructive criticism is helpful and appreciated.

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    • #56824
      CYeschenko
      Participant

      Very nice! The casual, conversational feel and subtle humor shines through, and you’re right on track with branding in my opinion- college aged roles would suit your voice well. One note to keep in mind- it came in at around 36 seconds, so if you were submitting for a 30 second commercial you would have to pace it a bit quicker than on your current read. Great job overall though!

      • #56832
        JTLeyba
        Participant

        Thanks a lot! Will keep that in mind!

  • #56775
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    Ok, good recording quality, docr15. I’m glad there’s clear enunciation in your read and that there’s no background noises to distract the audience from your delivery.  As a commercial read, it’s very good. I like the “up next” feeling you have in your delivery. As a critique, maybe emphasize more when you say “attack”, “break”, and ” the nation is under siege”, it may add to the audience’s anticipation of, “Oh my goodness, I need to know what happens next on “24”. It’s an opinion.

    Great work

  • #56768
    docr15
    Participant

    The last of this week’s homework assignments for my Commercial Demo prep.

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    • #56790
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Hey Docr15 – On the Karibui coffee piece: I thought you did a nice job overall on the production. It sounded as though you had some pauses in unnatural places. It took me out of the read, and a bit of saliva noise. My coach mentioned that eating a piece of apple can help with this. I want to try that out myself. 🙂 Nice work! Keep it up.

  • #56765
    docr15
    Participant

    Another homework read for my Commercial Demo prep.

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    • #57212
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      For Docr15 – Cute! I like this read! I think there might be slightly too long of a pause between “what can ____ (pause) like a ____”. Maybe more of a micropause vs. a true pause would work better. Nice audio quality and nice job on this performance!

    • #56773
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Good job with the commercial read. You sounded ready to entertain the kids on tv, like the “up next on this show…” My only critique is when you ended the “up next on discovery kids”. I could hear your voice lose energy as you ended, saying  “discovery kids”. Other than that good work.

      • #57166
        bergtravis
        Participant

        Sounds great! Between “on’ and ‘discovery kids” might have been a little to long of a pause but that just my opinion

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