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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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October 28, 2020 at 3:34 pm #56788
katelyndawnvo
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Beringer Wine
Some might choose a lecture or a documentary film to tell the story of 125 years of winemaking. We prefer a glass. At Beringer, we are proud to be the only winery ever to win Wine Spectator’s “Number-1 Wine of the Year” for both a cabernet and a chardonnay. But our greatest achievement lies in knowing that everything we’ve learned is yours to enjoy – each time you pour a glass of our wine. Beringer…All we are in every bottle.
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November 5, 2020 at 12:19 am #57234
kfvoice
ParticipantReally nice! Sounds great! A warm and calm delivery — that’s how wine makes us feel! Right!?
My only critique is the “gasp” at the beginning of your opening line. Other than that, good job!
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November 2, 2020 at 1:33 pm #57167
bergtravis
ParticipantOnly critique I would have would be when saying hundred it comes out a little bit like hunderd. I definitely have that problem a lot. Sounds great!
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November 3, 2020 at 5:26 pm #57211
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantLol you’re so right… HUNDERED!!!
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November 2, 2020 at 1:07 pm #57163
GJS
ParticipantSounds really good! Actually, I would echo Superluke on the “We prefer a glass,” line. Very nice, I’m ready for some Beringer!
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November 8, 2020 at 1:31 pm #57370
JDonaldson
ParticipantBe careful with are and our. Can k**l the ownership tag.
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October 28, 2020 at 1:12 pm #56783
SuperLuke
ParticipantJTLeyba, good afternoon. I really enjoyed the commercial ad for the Caribou coffee. I enjoyed the background music as well. Your beginning was perfect as you gave a convincing “ah coffee, the drink of life” made the audience get the feel for how good coffee is. Very relatable as the commercial read continued. Keep up the great work
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October 28, 2020 at 1:05 pm #56781
SuperLuke
ParticipantI have two computers. This is my Mac. I was using Audacity when I made this. Feedback is appreciated.
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October 28, 2020 at 8:47 pm #56809
isabrandon30
ParticipantGreat job getting into character! I was worried at first when I heard the voice because I thought it might not be clear; but each word was nice and clear. I really like that breathy quality to the voice initially. Maybe see if you can hold on to it all the way to the last words? Keep doing great things!
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October 28, 2020 at 12:19 pm #56778
JTLeyba
ParticipantLooking to make a realistic sounding ad spot for my Demo Reel. I’ve been told I have a young sounding voice so maybe college student products might be the way to go for me. Any feedback or constructive criticism is helpful and appreciated.
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October 29, 2020 at 2:12 am #56824
CYeschenko
ParticipantVery nice! The casual, conversational feel and subtle humor shines through, and you’re right on track with branding in my opinion- college aged roles would suit your voice well. One note to keep in mind- it came in at around 36 seconds, so if you were submitting for a 30 second commercial you would have to pace it a bit quicker than on your current read. Great job overall though!
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October 28, 2020 at 11:43 am #56775
SuperLuke
ParticipantOk, good recording quality, docr15. I’m glad there’s clear enunciation in your read and that there’s no background noises to distract the audience from your delivery. As a commercial read, it’s very good. I like the “up next” feeling you have in your delivery. As a critique, maybe emphasize more when you say “attack”, “break”, and ” the nation is under siege”, it may add to the audience’s anticipation of, “Oh my goodness, I need to know what happens next on “24”. It’s an opinion.
Great work
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October 28, 2020 at 7:06 am #56768
docr15
ParticipantThe last of this week’s homework assignments for my Commercial Demo prep.
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October 28, 2020 at 3:38 pm #56790
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHey Docr15 – On the Karibui coffee piece: I thought you did a nice job overall on the production. It sounded as though you had some pauses in unnatural places. It took me out of the read, and a bit of saliva noise. My coach mentioned that eating a piece of apple can help with this. I want to try that out myself. 🙂 Nice work! Keep it up.
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October 28, 2020 at 6:57 am #56765
docr15
ParticipantAnother homework read for my Commercial Demo prep.
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November 3, 2020 at 9:35 pm #57212
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantFor Docr15 – Cute! I like this read! I think there might be slightly too long of a pause between “what can ____ (pause) like a ____”. Maybe more of a micropause vs. a true pause would work better. Nice audio quality and nice job on this performance!
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October 28, 2020 at 11:34 am #56773
SuperLuke
ParticipantGood job with the commercial read. You sounded ready to entertain the kids on tv, like the “up next on this show…” My only critique is when you ended the “up next on discovery kids”. I could hear your voice lose energy as you ended, saying “discovery kids”. Other than that good work.
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November 2, 2020 at 1:31 pm #57166
bergtravis
ParticipantSounds great! Between “on’ and ‘discovery kids” might have been a little to long of a pause but that just my opinion
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October 27, 2020 at 9:12 pm #56733
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October 27, 2020 at 9:06 pm #56731
SuperLuke
ParticipantFor recording purposes, mostly eliminating background noises, I am resubmitting my Wise Man character read for my demo.
Is this performance better?
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October 28, 2020 at 7:04 am #56767
docr15
ParticipantGreat voice characterization SuperLuke. You seemed to change character a bit over the course of the read. At first you sounded very strained, then you had an english, somewhat Winston Churchill sound then the last sentence lost all the gruffness and Churchill sound and it was just an english accent.
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October 28, 2020 at 11:20 am #56772
SuperLuke
ParticipantThank you docr15 for your comment. Yes, me and my coach talked about “staying in character”. In the beginning I sort of sound like my young self. Then I was doing my best to sound like much time has passed and that I was older. When my voice sounds strained, I was following his advice by “constricting my throat” as I speak to have sound like an old textured, withered, and wise man. At the very end, I had to breathe and let go of my throat as I spoke.
All feedback is welcome! How was the recording quality? Any advice on how to sound older, staying in character, without constricting my throat too much as I perform?
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October 27, 2020 at 8:29 pm #56729
SuperLuke
ParticipantWise man and hope script; for character demo. My coach wants me to sound like a gruff, rough textured old wizard who wants to remind his friends about the strength of “hope”. I’m really trying to eliminate problems in my home studio. Feedback needed.
Lawless marauders spread pain and suffering as the sky burns. But we must never abandon Hope. We must look to the light in ourselves and each other. That light will become the dawn of a new civilization.
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November 7, 2020 at 3:41 pm #57315
mkell755
ParticipantSuperLuke – really liked the grit in your voice, and I was completely picturing the scene – dark and forboding in my mind. Very good!
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November 2, 2020 at 1:28 pm #57165
bergtravis
ParticipantThere is a little white noise in the background. Other than that it sounds good!
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