[David Goldberg]

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[Stephen Winburn]

Hello again friends!

We’re narrowing down scripts for my reel and this is one I like so I’ve provided 3 reads. I was playing with different tones for each read so as a general note choosing which of the 3 you prefer is helpful! For more specific notes i was asked to focus on being conversational, having a specific audience in mind, and avoiding micro pauses: any specific notes on those 3 things would also be much appreciated!

I apologize in advance for the shoddy microphone!
-Steph

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[Declan Waters]

Hi Steph – nice reads! Some notes:
1. I like the tone of your first take the best – it’s the most casual and laid back ie conversational, in my mind.
2. I like the speed of #2, and the passion of #3, but I think overall you achieve conversational tone, audience specification, and lack of micro pauses best in #1.
3. To nitpick, there is a micropause before the word “happier” in #1 that disrupts the flow a little bit, I think.
4. (Referring to #1) Your diction overall is great, though I noticed the word “and” (something I struggle with, so I notice it in particular in other people’s reads) sounds like “an” without the D at the end of the word to round it out.

I hope this helps!
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[Declan Waters]

Hello!

I am starting up my VO business, and would love feedback, including technical. How’s my sound, anything to improve that you notice? I want to make sure my studio space is up to par. Feel free to be blunt/direct (but helpful), please. Thanks!

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[Angela Doyle]

DAFC–it felt like you weren’t into it nearly as much as for Retail Explainer. I liked the energy in the latter. I felt like you connected more with the copy in DAFC as you went along, but the first couple of lines didn’t grab me very much.

I like your voice.

[Earthbul]

The first read could have been read with a little more smile. I also felt the second read was just a little too monotone. I’m just nitpicking though. The reads are really solid overall. Your voice and diction are awesome and your recording quality is aces.

[Angela Doyle]

Hi, everyone! Me again preparing for my next narration coaching session. I’d love to hear feedback on these 2 spots please! Does it flow or is it choppy? Is it engaging? Thank you so much.

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[Earthbul]

I like your sound Angela. I just felt the flow was off. Not enough ups and downs. Not enough inflection. Don’t get me wrong, I enjoyed the read overall I just felt it was a little disjointed or stiff.

[TIm Sullivan]

Good reads!

For BMS, I know it’s a more serious topic, but it felt slow. Some advice I’ve received is to smile when reading (it makes a difference) and mark where you plan to take a breath. There were some unneeded pauses (between “bodies” and “and” in the first sentence, for example). Planning your breaths will help with that.

Motorcycle had a better pace – it sounded like you were enjoying the topic. One word that was a little rushed was “experience.” Take your time on long words.

You have a very engaging tone.

[Earthbul]

Any thoughts or comments would be appreciated.

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[TIm Sullivan]

I loved that read!

One thing that did stick our for me was your final “s” sounds. The “s” is held a little long (“made from fresh ingredients” “expert chefs”) for example.

But, the tone is great. I don’t even have a dog, and I’m thinking about ordering some of this food!

[Angela Doyle]

That was awesome! My one nit was re: “Here’s how it works”. “Here’s” wasn’t quite as clear as I personally would have liked; it was dragged out a bit, but otherwise, I REALLY liked this!

[TIm Sullivan]

Hi.

Here are a couple potential audition reads. I’d appreciate some feedback.

The “Thirst” piece is looking for a middle aged masculine, husky voice.

The GNH spot wants a friendly but authoritative voice.

Thanks in advance,

Tim

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[Earthbul]

I think you hit it out of tbe part on both these reads. Both are very distinct types of reads which you managed to convey to this listener wonderfully.

[Angela Doyle]

Thirst–I was expecting to hear a more lighthearted approach during “you’re not thinking about it at all”–just minding your own business, la dee dah, and then suddenly desperation in “until it’s all you can think about…brain screams…”, and then maybe a change in tone to a more factual one halfway through as you begin to describe the list of effects of dehydration (after a bit more of a pause to emphasize the switch).

GNH–you definitely hit the friendly but authoritative mark!

Nicely done.

[TIm Sullivan]

Thank you, Angela.

That’s great feedback. I’ll incorporate it into my read!

[Angela Doyle]

I’d love to hear an updated version here!

[Frantz]

Hey everyone, first time posting on here! I’m here looking for feedback with my recordings, mainly with diction, speed, and flow as I feel like those are my main issues whenever I play back my stuff. If there’s anything else that you think I can improve on, please let me know. I’m also working on editing my audios as well (making sure its audible and lowering peaks/breaths, etc.), so feedback from that department would also be much appreciated.

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[Angela Doyle]

I usually try not to read other people’s feedback before I post mine, but somehow read Tim’s first, but I totally agree with him on all of his points aside from clicking (I didn’t notice it). I do love the different sounds for the 2!

[TIm Sullivan]

Hi.

I liked the very different tones for the two pieces.

For GrammarlyGo, be careful with the product name. You might want to slow it down to make sure it’s understood (they’d be the ones paying for the spot…). And, I did hear some mouth noise (clicking). I’ve been told hydration will help with that.

I loved the pacing for the Niagara Falls piece. But, be careful with pitch. It felt a little roller coaster-y. Pitch went up and down and up and down. I tend to do this sometimes, too.

Good reads. Good variety!

[Emily Gauthier]

Hey everyone!

Back again with another couple of samples! I have two from the same read, just wanting to know which people prefer. I think I like 2 overall more, but if you could let me know why which one sounds better than the other i’d appreciate it! Thank you!

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[Angela Doyle]

I like both takes, but I prefer the beginning of take #1 more than #2 because #2 sounds SUPER annoyed. I know it’s supposed to sound annoyed and frustrated, but it turned me off a bit since it was VERY annoyed. There was a bit too much attitude for me, especially “there’s gotta be one near ya”. Aside from that (and that’s just me, of course), nice read!

[TIm Sullivan]

Nice reads. I also preferred #2 – a little more attitude in that one.

I’m not sure if this was a regional spot, if it isn’t be careful with pronunciation. “Fire alarms” really stuck out for this New England boy’s ears.

Also, I did hear a bit of mouth noise (clicking) toward the end of your reads. I know I have trouble with that, too.

[Frantz]

Hey Emily!

First off, I must say that your takes were great! I can definitely picture myself hearing this in the background with the TV on or YouTube playing somewhere. I do like how both of them sound conversational and overall friendly, but I’d say that you have to be careful with the vocalizations scattered throughout both audios. I’ve been told that it’s only natural for us to do so because we’d like to appear like we’re engaging with the listener, but we also have to be conscious about the editing process as well since some people are not a fan of them.

As for my pick on which take sounds better, I’d have to choose 2 as well. Though they both sound very similar to me, I like 2’s flow better, especially with the last part where you’re listing what 7-11 has and when they’re open. Also, I do like the beginning part of 2 with the starving part but the fire alarm situation of 1 sounds better, since both feel like they’re more natural to me. So yes, 2 is overall better, hope this helps!

[Angela Doyle]

Hello everyone. Here’s my homework for my next coaching session. I’d love to hear from you specifically as to whether you felt like I connected with you sufficiently. Other feedback (besides technical) is definitely welcome as well! Thank you.

Also, I’d like to hear what adjectives you’d use to describe my voice. Thanks so much!

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[Frantz]

Hey Angela! Both of these were great takes! With the meditation audio, I’d say that you have the perfect voice to get into this part of the industry. It’s very comforting and safe, personal and warm. With regard to feeling like you connected with me, I’d say yes to that, 100%.

As for the Chase audio, I can definitely see your voice also fitting into this part of the industry as it’s very calm and in control. I’m not too sure what type of feel you were going for here, but to me, it felt rather impersonal and that it doesn’t have that human feel to it. Maybe a smile can help with that, just something that helps with making it feel like you’re engaging with the listener a bit more.

Hopefully these help! Have a good one!

[Angela Doyle]

Thank you! My coach said the same thing about the Chase read about being a bit impersonal =)

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[Emily Gauthier]

Hi Angela!

The first read was fantastic, I had a double-take as it took me right back to the professional ones i’ve heard over the years! Your voice seems very natural for meditation videos and audio, I would definitely put this as something in your wheelhouse! I would describe your voice here as calm, collected, and reassuring.

Chase IVR was nice, but I feel it needed to be slowed down more. It also felt a bit more robotic, which I understood is for phone service, but it could have used just a slight shift of personal comfort, if that makes sense. Coupled with the faster dialogue it felt more like you were reading the script than trying to make a pleasant experience for the person on the other line. I would describe your voice here as crisp, quick, and just a little samey.

I hope these help!

[Angela Doyle]

Thank you! I REALLY feel like meditation reads are in my wheelhouse, so I’m glad to hear it worked for you! The Chase read–my coach said the same thing about being robotic/not as personal as it could be. =)

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[Alexander Wright]

Trying out this gardening spot for my demo. It’s one of a couple that i connect with the script some. Anyway, would love to get feedback on tone, speed, pace, and anything you would like to recommend improving. Thank you!!!

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[Angela Doyle]

I feel like a bit more excitement was in order. Your articulation was great, and I like your voice.

[Grace Lee]

There seems to be an inconsistency in speed, as if it was sped up in the middle and then slowed down towards the end. I’m not sure if this version was the one you wanted to upload. You have a pleasant voice though~

[Alexander Wright]

Thank you for the feedback!

[ierxyzz]

Hi all, uploading these 2 reads before my upcoming coaching session. This is my first time using the De-Clicker tool, and I think it went well. Thanks in advance for any feedback!

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[Alexander Wright]

Hello there, ‘
The freshii bit was clean. i think it flowed really well start to finish. The risewell had different tones or levels to it. It did sound a little choppy in the middle. The recording quality is excellent…sounds clean.

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