[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[ILMVOMan]

Hey all. Here’s my first stab at this. Comments and feedback plz.

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[SteveVO]

Trying an audiobook script of The Emperor’s New Clothes. Thanks for any feedback.

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[Shaun Cruz]

Loved it! Perfect pace, pulls your audience right in. Entertaining.. Keep it up!

[SteveVO]

Thanks! I appreciate it very much.

[Erik B]

Hello everybody. Below is a commercial practice read I worked on. Please feel free to provide feedback on performance and recording quality.
Thank you.

Your Smile

Your smile says a lot about you. If you let it. When you’re uncomfortable about your teeth, it’s easy to hold back your smile. Invisalign’s advanced technology now lets you straighten your teeth invisibly – so you can express yourself fully. And because they’re invisible, no one has to know about it. Hundreds of thousands of people already have discovered Invisalign. Maybe it’s time you were one of them.

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[IvyEdgeCEO]

I really liked the pace and tone; it sounds like a voice I would hear on an Invisalign infomercial. I also liked the little laugh during “no one has to know about it.” Makes the read very warm and relatable.

[Bil-Bo]

AMSTEL
Hey… if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would actually come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. Who says nothing’s perfect?…Amstel Light.

Duracell Quantum Batterie
SFX: Children Giggling: Then Music Under
This Duracell truck has some very special power.
It’s filled with new Duracell Quantum batteries.
These red batteries are so powerful that this year
they’ll power all the Hasbro toys donated to “Toys for Tots”.
Wanna help power some smiles?
SFX: Children Giggling: Then Music Under
Duracell. Trusted everywhere.

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[Bil-Bo]

AMSTEL
Hey… if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would actually come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. Who says nothing’s perfect?…Amstel Light.

Duracell Quantum Batterie
SFX: Children Giggling: Then Music Under
This Duracell truck has some very special power.
It’s filled with new Duracell Quantum batteries.
These red batteries are so powerful that this year
they’ll power all the Hasbro toys donated to “Toys for Tots”.
Wanna help power some smiles?
SFX: Children Giggling: Then Music Under
Duracell. Trusted everywhere.

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[Bil-Bo]

This was not supposed to be uploaded. This very user-unfriendly site does not allow mistakes to be corrected!!!!

[smith_voice]

Greetings- My latest commercial homework for Art. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

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[Erik B]

Hi Mr. Smith,

I checked out your reads, and wanted to provide my feedback.

Human Society – Good tone and good pacing. I noticed upspeak at the end of the first and second sentence, watch out for that. Also maybe add a bit of differentiation b/w abandoned, some sick or injured.

Machine Learning – good tone and good pacing, but it sounded slighly robotic. Also watch out for the glottal between “nature and”.

Zellers – good differentiation b/w men, kid’s and ladies. But the read could have used a little more pep. Imagine if Crazy Eddie did this read. You don’t have to be that over the top, but just give the read a bit more excitement.

Overall good job.

[salmaperez001]

Hello, hope everyone had wonderful holidays! I have attached my Commercial recordings below! I would greatly appreciate any and all feedback. Thank you!

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[Andres]

Just looking for any feedback that you might think is helpful, trying to practice for my Narration Demo so I appreciate whatever advice you may have.

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[Erik B]

Hi Andres,

I listened to your read, and I thought it was good. The tone and pacing of the read are solid. Also you differentiate between sentences nicely. The only suggestion I have is slowing down, “hello and welcome”. Also may I suggest next time you post on the forum, include the copy of the read. It allows listeners to better analyze your performance, and provide more helpful feedback.

[edward]

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[Mark.OD]

I would love to get some feedback on these pieces. Just started the narration track and am working to find that authentic voice while considering varying audiences.
(Also, it’s my first upload and I hope I did this correctly. Any help is appreciated)
Thanks.

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