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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #71415
    ColtonJLong
    Participant

    Hey guys!
    Got a couple new homework assignment scripts, and some retakes as part of the same assignment!
    Rip into them, Im really trying to go h*****n improving!
    Thanks!

    AARP

    It’s right in your own backyard.
    While it may be hard to believe, roughly five million Americans don’t even know where their next meal will come from.
    In communities just like yours, there are many who need help.
    Join people across the country who are coming together with AARP Create the Good, to end hunger.
    Start today. It can be as easy as giving food or money to your local area food bank, or getting tips to start your own food drive.
    Whatever level of involvement is right for you, we’ve made it simple to find and help people in your area.
    So get involved. Go to http://www.createthegood.org/hunger.

    Red Cross Blanket

    You don’t think much about it
    You never dwell on how it was made
    It’s just a blanket after all
    But when everything else has been lost
    The comfort it provides.. is immeasurable
    The American Red Cross brings hope and help to people in need
    Every eight minutes every day
    So this season, give something that means something
    Support us at redcross.org.

    Cleaner Elections

    Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
    Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics?
    Do they think it really helps their campaign?
    It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful.
    So why do we allow them to continue?
    It’s time to level the playing field.
    You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
    This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
    Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.

    History Channel

    If you lived before our time, who would you be?
    Would you fight your brother for the rights of another? Who would you be?
    Would you find new dreams or create wonders?
    What if you could choose from a 1,000 yesterdays; a 1,000 lives, when the past was today and the new took your breath away.
    Who would you be? What would you feel? How would you live? Who would you love?
    Remembering every generation before us;
    Remembering for generations to come.
    The History Channel. Where the past comes alive.

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  • #71406
    John Trape
    Participant

    Hi everyone,

    I am attaching three narration recordings, supported by the scripts below, and would very much welcome any and all feedback.

    Kind regards,

    John

    1. Beethoven
    Of all the hundreds of symphonies that have been composed, none can rival in popularity or emotional interest the nine great symphonic works that Beethoven wrote. Beethoven took music off the pedestal of formal beauty, where Haydn and Mozart had left it, and immersed it in the whirlpool of life. He roughened it up until it began to do what he expected it to do … to express problems, evoke emotions, move and struggle exuberantly. More people can respond at once to a Beethoven symphony than to any other. Many have written fine symphonies, but Beethoven’s remain in a class by themselves, as invaluable a part of our heritage as are Shakespeare’s plays.

    2. 2012 Extinction
    The Maya, an ancient South American culture, predicted that time would end
    in a violent apocalypse on December 21, 2012. They created an elaborate
    astronomical calendar called “The Long Count,” which stops abruptly in
    2012. This date, which is also the winter equinox, coincides with an
    incredibly rare galactic alignment that happens once every 26,000 years.
    What did the Mayans think would happen when their calendar ended? And,
    were they joined by other cultures–from different parts of the world and in
    different centuries–all pointing to 2012 as a calamitous end time? The Hopi
    Indians and Eastern Hindu share similar calendars, which are remarkably
    synchronous. One counter-culture mystic even uses an Ancient Chinese
    philosophy to unlock the key to a 2012 prophecy. Nostradamus himself
    suggests the world is headed toward a coming cataclysm. What can we do to
    heed the warning of the Mayan apocalypse?

    3. This….is my voice.
    There is no music, and there are no sound effects…only the pure, clear sound, recorded for your ears.
    I am a voice over artist, a voice actor, a voice talent, and I can convey my message in many ways, in many tones and with many emotions.
    I can speak in a very light whisper, to share an intimate message with you. Or my voice can boom deeply, demanding respect from those who are listening. My voice can express sympathy to someone who has just experienced a great loss, or it can reflect the happiness one feels after having accomplished something great!
    I sit (or stand) before this tube constructed of metals, of plastics, of wire and of silicon, which listens patiently to me, as if it were alive like a mistress, hour after hour, day after day and night after night. It never judges me, however it is a reflection of me….one which is neither vengeful, nor forgiving.
    I am a voice actor…..and this is my voice.

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    • #71456
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi John, these are all GREAT! Really good pacing, flow and enunciation for all of them. Your voice is really nice, clear and deep and is very pleasant to hear. My favorite of these three was Beethoven – you really took your time to tell the story and I wanted to hear more! The only comment I would have on the Mayan script is the pronunciation of “2012”. I wonder if it should be said “twenty-twelve” or “two-thousand and twelve” as you did. You stayed consistent throughout, so it’s just more of a question on my end in general. I have very little criticism for you, only that this is really good stuff and I want to hear an audiobook soon!!! I’ve been listening to you these last few months and you really sound polished. Very good!

      Mary

      • #71500
        John Trape
        Participant

        Hi Mary,

        Thank you very much for your support. I apologise for this late response. Yes, your comment on dates was spot on – my coach made the same point. Thank you again!

        John

  • #71403
    ecbrown220
    Participant

    If possible please offer some feedback and be brutally honest and critical.

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    • #71431
      Logan DFD
      Participant

      You have a nice, deep voice, which fits perfectly with the script you read. I think you should add more variation to your pitch, and try to relax when reading your script. Also, the recording skipped in one or two places, so you might want to look into that. Good work!

  • #71363
    Lex Herber
    Participant

    Hello,

    I have recently recorded my first character demos (gaming & animation).

    They were to recorded in my home studio while being live directed by a pro in London, who then mixed, mastered & sent them back.

    I would love to know the feelings of the international community here.

    Please also, feel free to check out my website which I managed to build solo, with negative web design skills!
    http://www.lexherbervoiceover.com

    Thank you 🙏

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  • #71358
    brucem
    Participant

    Hi everyone,
    I have some scripts that I’m working on for a narration demo; please take a listen when you get a chance. Any and all feedback welcome!
    Thanks
    Bruce

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    • #71405
      ecbrown220
      Participant

      Hi Bruce,

      I listened to your SamCookBio file. It sounded awesome my only critique would be on your sentences the ended with a “s”. Be careful to not drag the “s” too much at then end of your sentence. Otherwise it was great.

  • #71326
    Leann
    Participant

    Hello there! I am uploading all of these in preparation for my upcoming session and hope maybe someone may have some time to give a little feedback? 🙂 I look forward to hearing any tips or tricks. I seem to be having a hard time with cutting and pasting using Audacity and finding the right levels. Give it to me straight here, folks! I can take it. 😉
    Thanks <3

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    • #71352
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi Leann,
      All of your reads were very clear. An overall suggestion I would offer is to relax more, as you sounded kind of careful, particularly in the VOCorp-trainer read, and also try different ways to make it more conversational. Sometime it helps to ad lib a fake conversation with another (imaginary) person, and then roll right into the script, and see if it helps you continue with that conversational tone. I can relate to the Audacity challenges – I found that the DAW/Audacity class that they offer will give you the key settings to aim for. Good job!

    • #71344
      Oktober10
      Participant

      Hi Leann, I really love the tone of your voice. You annunciate well and have a clear voice. I like the expression in your voice as all. Friendly, authoritative and believable. nice work!

    • #71331
      Leann
      Participant

      Oops! One more… 😉

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  • #71316
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Hi All,

    I find that sometimes I don’t know what exactly I’m trying to do in my practice sessions. Probably doesn’t help for me to practice too many times in one sitting. Anyway, here are two different types of reads. Arm and Hammer is meant to be light and humorous, and PPG Paints (practice#2) is supposed to be more “real”–although I personally think it sounds rather gloomy. I’ve also included PPG paint practice#1 for comparison. I am open to any thoughts, suggestions, opinions on which version you like more. Thank you.

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  • #71311
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hi all! I’m looking for some feedback to this script for my upcoming narration demo. Please let me know what you think. I’m trying for friendly / conversational. Thanks!

    Mary

    Henri Cartier-Bresson was a French humanist photographer born in 1908. He is considered a master of candid photography, viewing the craft as an avenue to capture a decisive moment. He was one of the earliest photographers to use 35mm film and shot almost exclusively in black and white. Though his large body of work, which included a variety of street photography, was impressive, he turned his attention solely to painting later in life.

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    • #71393
      Evette75
      Participant

      Hi Mary, I agree with Oktober10 – that moment when you fold the pamphelt and start paying attention to the audio. I can see what nettipo1 mentioned about changing tone to give more attention to his changing paths. Overall, great job!

      • #71434
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Evette! I’m glad that it sounds like something that would get your attention. Agree too with varying the tone when describing changing paths in later life, that’s very helpful. Thanks!

        Mary

    • #71353
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hello,
      Your delivery is friendly, smooth, and soothing, and you have no issues with reading or doing any unnecessary pausing, which is wonderful. I still tend to think that you could be more conversational. Be mindful of the down inflection at the end of his name “Bresson.”, which ends up slightly halting the sentence mid-way. Also, the last sentence contains a bit of interesting information (changing to painting later on in life), which you might want to call to the listener’s attention by changing your tone or inflection so that it’s “audibly” different from the preceding sentences.

      • #71433
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Nettipo! I will work on being more conversational, and that totally makes sense about varying the tone at the pivot point of the script – changing to painting later in life, good observation. Thanks again!

        Mary

    • #71347
      Oktober10
      Participant

      AWESOME! I imagined myself in a museum with the audio learning about the work. Great pace and tone and very informative speak.

      • #71432
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Oktober10! I’m glad the pace and tone sounded appropriate and informative. Thanks!

        Mary

  • #71306
    Sheila Harris
    Participant

    Hi! Here are two of my latest scripts. Looking forward to your feedback!

    Official Alaska Vacation Planning Video

    This Official Alaska Vacation Planning Video is filled with plenty of breathtaking scenes. But more important, it’s loaded with all the information you need for planning a trip to Alaska. Like when to go, what to wear, and what to see. So if you’ve got Alaska on your mind, you’re going to love this video. Let’s begin with snow sports. This is definitely the place. For cross-country and down-hill skiing. For snow boarding, tobogganing, and even ice fishing.

    Advance Technologies

    Welcome to advance technology incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunities.

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    • #71354
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi Sheila, I was wondering if you could upload the files in mp3 format…I’m unable to listen to the Garage Band files!

  • #71279
    bevy
    Participant

    Good Day,

    I am attaching 3 narration recordings for my HW assignment. I would appreciate your general feedback as well as specific feedback around my pace, tone, ability to switch up style in a way that compliments the read and glottal stops (which has been a bit of a challenge for me). Suggestions on how to improve are always appreciated.

    Of the three recordings, I wrestled the most with the Jazz recording. I have two versions, but decided to upload the “smoother” versus the “upbeat” version here.

    Scripts:

    Children’s Educational Space Game:
    Today we’re going to explore all of the planets in our solar system and some other places as well. We’ll travel into the future when astronauts live throughout the solar system. On each world we’ll see what the weather is like, what we would wear, and what we would do to have fun! Grab your oxygen, put on your seatbelt, and let’s blast off!

    Documentray on Jazz:
    It is America’s music. It is an improvised Art, making itself up as it goes along. It rewards individual expression. But demands selfless collaboration. It is forever changing. But nearly always rooted in the blues. It has a rich tradition and its own rules. But it is brand new every night.

    Advance Tech:
    Welcome to advance technology incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunities.

    Thank you!

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    • #71387
      brucem
      Participant

      Hi Bevy,
      As others have mentioned, you have a nice smooth delivery; for the children’s educational space game, you’re trying to get kids interested in playing your game, so I think it could use a little more excitement and inflection. I’m curious to hear the “upbeat” reading of the jazz script. As someone who has spent many a night in NYC jazz clubs, this is a little too laid back. It’s exciting music that is “brand new every night”.
      Advance tech has a nice balance of corporate but friendly.

    • #71355
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi bevy,
      I enjoyed your reads. Overall, they were smoothly delivered with a friendly and credible tone. As others noted, the Space Game was rushed throughout. In the Jazz script, I think what might be happening is the tendency to rush the beginnings of sentences, or the parts of the sentence that do not contain any key words that are being emphasized. I know this because I do the same thing. So phrases like “it rewards” and “but demands” could be delivered a tad bit slower so that it’s clearer for the listener. Also, make sure you remember your audience for each script and talk to them on their level. Again, you have a credible tone that has the flexibility to work for multiple audiences.

    • #71310
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Bevy, good work! I liked the first script but agree with Radioguy in that there needed to be a bit more pausing with the punctuation; it sounded a bit rushed. I liked the tone on this one. For the second script on jazz it sounded a bit monotone to me. I think you could vary the tone a bit more, and still keep it smooth. The words themselves are describing lots of variation, so I think your voice could mimic that more. The third script was a nice variation from the first two and sounded nice and corporate. Good job!

      Mary

    • #71303
      radioguy
      Participant

      You have a very appealing tone but remember that this is voice acting so you need to pause with punctuation and vary your emphasis on certain phrases. Use your energy to make the copy come alive in your VO.

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