[David Goldberg]

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[SteveVoice2]

Good afternoon my fellow voice over students:
I am submitting for feedback my homework assignment from my recent lesson, which has 3 reads in total.
I realize my editing may need a little more practice, focusing primarily on voice, pitch, range and tone.
Any thoughts would be greatly appreciated…thank you

Few Old Masters are as enduring popular as Rembrandt and the Museum of Fine Arts, Boston, is proud to exhibit “Rembrandt’s Journey: Painter-Draftsman-Etcher.”
The exhibition reveals the all encompassing scope of the artist’s interests via his paintings, etchings, and drawings. Beginning with Rembrandt’s constants and unflinching depictions of his own face, his pen and brush captured an unprecedented array of subjects

[Shaun Cruz]

Hi,
Just submitting my first ever story narration for feedback.

Thanks!

CORALINE:

CORALINE DISCOVERED THE DOOR a little
while after they moved into the house.
It was a very old house—it had an attic under
the roof and a cellar under the ground and an
overgrown garden with huge old trees in it.
Coraline’s family didn’t own all of the house—it
was too big for that. Instead they owned part of it.
There were other people who lived in the old
house.
Miss Spink and Miss Forcible lived in the flat
below Coraline’s, on the ground floor. They were
both old and round, and they lived in their flat with
a number of ageing Highland terriers who had
names like Hamish and Andrew and J**k. Once
upon a time Miss Spink and Miss Forcible had
been actresses, as Miss Spink told Coraline the
first time she met her.
“You see, Caroline,” Miss Spink said, getting
Coraline’s name wrong, “both myself and Miss
Forcible were famous actresses, in our time. We
trod the boards, luvvy. Oh, don’t let Hamish eat
the fruitcake, or he’ll be up all night with his
tummy.”
“It’s Coraline. Not Caroline. Coraline,” said
Coraline.

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[RYoung]

Recent audition I did for a video game promo. Got a listen from producer. Possibly wanted more animated voice? Any thoughts are welcome!

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[DillonP]

Seems pretty good so far, but could use more enthusiasm and slow down a little in your narration. other than that I think it was a fine promo that you did. Just make sure to keep up the good work.

[DillonP]

It took me some time but I finally got my HW for coaching done. please listen and reply.

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[RYoung]

Try to slow down your delivery to eliminate slurring. Your voice is friendly and realistic though!

[SteveVO]

Trying a bit of a longer audiobook script – Dracula. Thanks for any feedback.

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[RYoung]

Nice work on the narration and storytelling end. I was captivated, my only suggestion would be Dracula’s voice could have a different tone (scary) and maybe a pause in anticipation before Dracula speaks?

[Shaun Cruz]

Hi All just looking for some feedback on these 3 submissions for home work.

Thanks!

FORD ESCAPE:
Come on. You’re a smart person. If you’re buying an suv, why not get the one with the best gas mileage? The Ford Escape’s 1.6 liter Ecoboost engine saves you an average of fifteen hundred dollars on gas over 5 years. Ford Escape the smarter way to get there.

USPS:Tangled lights, mall parking and “some assembly required”. A few reasons to get a head start on the holidays. Fly Like an Eagle. UNITED STATES POSTAL SERVICE. We deliver.

OBSERVATION DECK:
Hello, and welcome to the audio simulation of the One Vanderbilt Observation Deck.
Please adjust your audio volume to a level that best represents my voice at a normal speaking volume to a person standing next to you.
This will calibrate your headphone level. Please do not adjust your audio volume again over the course of the simulation.

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[RYoung]

I liked the Ford Escape delivery, relaxed and realistic sounding. Sounds like some words are not enunciated right? like “dollars”, minor but it can make a difference. The USPS was a little formal, I would smile on delivery of the tag line UNITED STATES POSTAL SERVICE and highlight we deliver with a different tone? Nice work on these!

[Shaun Cruz]

Hi! Thanks for the feedback and the tips I’ll definitely keep them in mind!

[IvyEdgeCEO]

Hi Shaun – I hope you find this feedback helpful: Ford Escape – I like the way your intimate tone at the start pulls in the listener, like letting us in on a secret; USPS – I liked the just-the-facts energy of this read; Observation Deck – I could really imagine myself on an observation deck and hearing your voice walking me through a guided tour. Good job on all!

[Shaun Cruz]

Hi! Thank you for the feedback, much appreciated!

[IvyEdgeCEO]

Take two…

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[jphilippitheactor]

I love the Documentary and About Us demos, they showcase your personality more, if that makes sense, and you came alive! The other 2 are decent, well-articulated, more corporate, but, didn’t hear you as well as in the other two. But awesome job!

[IvyEdgeCEO]

Homework assignment for my 1st narration demo session

[IvyEdgeCEO]

Hm. Don’t know why this didn’t work. Will have to go back and try again?

[Tom_Connelly]

New homework assignment

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[IvyEdgeCEO]

I like the pace, energy as well as the pitch modulations towards the end. Good work!

[ILMVOMan]

Hey all. Here’s my first stab at this. Comments and feedback plz.

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