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Got some more homework recordings! I went with a political ad and a History Channel ad. Id love to hear what people have to say! Im really trying to work on pronunciation, especially “For” instead of “fer” and “to” instead of “ta”, so hopefully I didnt over do the effort on those!
Ill paste the scripts here too!CLEANER ELECTIONS
Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics?
Do they think it really helps their campaign?
It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful.
So why do we allow them to continue?
It’s time to level the playing field.
You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.HISTORY CHANNEL
If you lived before our time, who would you be?
Would you fight your brother for the rights of another? Who would you be?
Would you find new dreams or create wonders?
What if you could choose from a 1,000 yesterdays; a 1,000 lives, when the past was today and the new took your breath away.
Who would you be? What would you feel? How would you live? Who would you love?
Remembering every generation before us;
Remembering for generations to come.
The History Channel. Where the past comes alive.-
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Hi, Colton!
Listening to these clips, your voice is very crisp and clear. Your diction is great–I can understand every word you say–and your pacing on the Cleaner Elections read was good!
One thing I believe you can improve on is creating more stakes in each read. Think about who you’re talking to in both pieces of copy. In Cleaner Elections, why is it important to stop the constant mudslinging tactics politicians use? Why is it so urgent that this system gets fixed? In the History Channel, what strikes your scene partner’s curiosity about living in another era? Is it their sense of right and wrong? Are they interested in the lives people of other time periods lived? Think about the emotional response you want from them both. You have incredibly clear reads and a wonderful voice, but it’s missing the substance that makes it sound conversational: Convey that urgency, heighten their curiosity, get them to FEEL something!
I would definitely keep these for practice and maybe edit the copy for a demo (never rip the exact copy, but don’t spoof the names). You picked really good options for reads!
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Hello,
I really enjoyed your interpretation of the Cleaner Elections script. Your pace was excellent-you read with clarity and conviction and it felt personal/conversational.
On the History Channel read, my only suggestion would be on the pacing, it went a bit quickly, specifically after the line “would you fight your brother for the rights of another”. Otherwise, nice read!
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Hi All! Thank you for any feedback you can provide.
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Hi all! I’m looking for some feedback on my upcoming narration demo. I’m going for conversational and friendly. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
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Nice work Mary. I like your authoritative tone however I suggest maybe lightening it a bit, I mean bee keeping is fun right? Not like you’re speaking to a kid, but still with a sense of authority and knowledge. Hope that makes sense.
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Hello,
I enjoyed the read overall. Your tone was friendly, you presented as one who is knowledgable about the subject. Your pace was on target and it was pleasant to listen to.
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Hello Everyone, I have attached (2) narration homework for your feedback. As always, it is so much appreciated. Thanks again!
Amelia Earhart (Biography)
Amelia Earhart dared to go where no one had gone before. The public adored the pioneering pilot. And news reels of the day captured her every move. Yet the private side of Amelia would always remain an enigma.
Disney’s Oceans Opening (Soft Spoken)
A boy comes running up, and he asks, “What exactly is the ocean? What is the sea?”
You could hit him with a lot of statistics and Latin names, but the answer isn’t something you’ll find in a book. To really know what the ocean is, you have to see it for yourself. And hear it. And taste it. You have to feel its power.-
Hi there. I love the expression in your voice! I would say make note of how long your pauses are between sentences. Try maybe to smooth it out a tad? If there’s video which these scripts seem like they may be used for, then it makes sense to pause to time with the visuals.
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Hi Gene, You have a great tone! Your pace just a tad bit fast. Slow down a little, but overall nice job! Good luck with it all.
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Hey Y’all!
My name is Max, I’m new here to the forum and relatively new to the world of VO. I pulled some copy from the script library and would love and really appreciate some feedback/constructive criticism if anyone has a minute.
Thanks!
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Hi all! I’m looking for some feedback for my upcoming narration demo. I was going for a friend teaching a friend knitting vibe here. Let me know what you think. Thanks! Mary
The important thing to remember is that every knitter is different, and what works well for one might not suit another. There are also many styles of knitting, with different ways of holding the needles and working with the yarn to create knitted fabric. We’ll show you the most commonly used methods, but you should do whatever feels most natural for you. Just experiment until you find a comfortable way of performing each technique, and don’t worry if your preferred way is slightly different from ours, as long as the result is the same.
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This is very good. I sometimes feel like your careful pronunciation causes the read to feel just a little less natural. The phrase “…with different ways of holding the needles and working with the yarn to create knitted fabric” sounds a little breathless or nervous to me. I wonder if a little more pitch variation and maybe slowing down a little at that point would make it flow a little more freely. Overall, though, it sounds friendly and comfortable.
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