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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!
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Hi Everyone,
Posting my homework assignment. Please review the two recording and provide feedback as you see fit!
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Hi SWK,
Both readings sounded very similar in expression. Your tone, timing, and pitch are all great – but I was missing something behind those things. With 1-800-Collect, perhaps a little more excitement. And with Invisalign, adding a little softness or sympathy in the beginning and then and more eagerness or persuasion at the end. I don’t know if my suggestions are spot on, but I did feel like something behind the words was missing. I hope that helps!
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Hello Everyone,
I am in the process of working toward my narration demo.
My assignment was to record three Edge studio scripts. I am looking for feedback on my ability to connect with the script and sound believable and have the proper tempo that fits the read. Thank you!
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Good morning bevy,
I’ve provided some feedback about each of your scripts below, hope this helps!
Sincerely,
Jimmy
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Real estate – Really loving the tone, very friendly and conversational. But way too fast for me, it seems like you’re speeding through and hardly pausing at all between sentences.
Advance Technology – Much smoother pacing! More nitpicky feedback that you may want to really emphasize the name of the company, and when listing out the various items you’ll be going over, try to vary the tone or inflection to help make it seem less like a list and more like individual items
Cancun – Very solid, I think this one sounds good overall. I’d say it could probably benefit from the friendly tone from your real estate read (just more energy) but what you have seems fine!
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Would love any feedback…
Thanks,
Marc
Acura RDX script
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Marc,
This was really good. You have a confidence in your voice that really comes through in your delivery. In the beginning your cadence was a bit choppy however, it seemed in the second half you got your stride and the delivery was a lot smoother. I would suggest working on relaxing at the start to match the latter part of the recording.
SWK
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Hi! I’m working on sounding natural in my delivery. Hope you all can help me out!
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Hi Logan,
Thanks for the uploads. These were very good and you have a very stately/ professorial tone to your voice and your annunciation is great. For the sake of sounding natural I would suggest acting out (while recording) like you are talking to some friends. Which would help reduce some of the “formalness” that I suspect your voice naturally gives.
Overall, I think these were pretty good and look forward to hearing more.
SWK
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Hello Friends!
Just uploading a couple more commercial reads… I appreciate all the feedback.
Thanks!
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Hi Shaun,
I really enjoyed the Amstel Light read, you presented as a light-hearted and neighborly which fits well with the tone of the script.
I also enjoyed the Freshii read but agree that slowing down just a little bit, specifically when listing ingredients would make it better. Overall great recordings!
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Sounds good! You have a good calming, relaxing voice.
On the Freshii reading, you might want to slow down a bit and pronounce each word clearly, ESPECIALLY the word Freshii (the money word). Also, be sure to have good variation in your pitch in the middle of sentences. And when you pause, let your words naturally end, but don’t cut them off too soon. Do that, and your reading will be just that much better! Good work!
Your Amstel Light reading was really good! Sounds like it came from an official commercial. Creative variation in pitch, great accent, not too fast, but not slow either. Great job! Keep it up!
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I really like your voice – friendly, trustworthy, cool.
Careful of the p pops (plosives) on the “perfect” (say that 10 times in a row, lol). -
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Good Evening!
I have a couple of recordings here for homework- two commercial readings.
My main focus was making sure the reading was akin to a short story- I have to make sure my readings had a beginning, middle, and end. Any feedback is much appreciated, and thank you for your time!
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Good morning Timber Tykes,
I tried to provide some feedback for you below on each of your reads, well done!
Sincerely,
Jimmy
Saying No – lots of personality and definitely sounds like a conversation! I like the chuckle and do feel like this has a distinct beginning/middle/end. really nice!
Get More – this definitely sounds like a real commercial so that’s great! There is a good amount of tonal shift throughout, especially at the end, but in the beginning/middle sections you may want to change one of the exclamatory sentences to not end on a high inflection (e.g. depending on how much smartphone data YOU USE! and get a new phone ON US!)
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