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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!
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Greetings! Here’s my latest Commercial homework. I would greatly appreciate any and all feedback. Thanks!
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Hello fellow actors
just completed by home booth and have uploaded sample Mp3 I created to send as audition . . .not sure about the quality of the recording – looking for sound engineer feedback on quality sample for volume, clarity, etc and what I need to work on to make it sound like it was produced in pro booth – thanks!!! Lance Wangel -
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AMSTEL
Hey… if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would actually come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. Who says nothing’s perfect?…Amstel Light.
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Greetings Bil-Bo! You have a nice soothing and deep quality to your voice! It sounds conversational throughout the majority of the read. However, there are certain parts where I think the conversational quality and connection to the reader could be pushed a bit further. For example, when you start off, the “Hey” seemed a bit uncertain. Be sure to have a reason for why your saying what you’re saying from the very beginning. That may help a lot. Also, I’d have to agree with Garprocks, in that emphasis in the name AMSTEL LIGHT seems a bit important as it not only is in all caps, but it’s also the brand name. So, putting emphasis on the brand name usually makes sense. But, overall, great job!
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Hi everyone. Here’s my latest Commercial homework. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thanks.
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Hi all,
I’m uploading my latest commercial homework reads and I’d love to get your feedback!Thanks,
ChrisBartenders Professional Training Institute
Who said work can’t be fun?
Train now at the bartenders professional training institute in Rochester
And you could be bartending in just four short weeks
The work’s fun, the pay’s great, and you meet some fabulous people.
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Go to PBSA.com for more details.
That’s PBSA.comCleaner Elections
Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics?
Do they think it really helps their campaign?
It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful.
So why do we allow them to continue?
It’s time to level the playing field.
You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.Clem the Prospector-Nebraska Lottery
Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector her to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel. all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin’ in this old mountain here. The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska lottery.
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Hi all,
This is my first homework assignment. I am feeling super excited, hopeful, and the “good” kind of nervous!!! All feedback is appreciated. Have a safe and happy day, week, and month!On the Revlon voice-over, I was not satisfied with the part that reads “…where it’s needed most. Every time.” What do you all think?
Six flags(NO!): Kids hate the word no. As in no, you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!
Revlon: Funny thing being a redhead…when I was a kid, I just wanted to be like everybody else, now it’s one of the things that makes me me. Get your best color. Revlon High Dimension Hair Color, so precise it takes only 10 minutes to deliver rich, dimensional color where it’s needed most. Every time. With deep conditioners that gently protect so your hair stays soft and shiny, and beautiful. I like being me.. 10 minutes to beautiful. Revlon. Be unforgettable.
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Hi, Rebecca! First, I love your natural voice! You sound naturally cheery and self-assured and it works well with these reads! Here’s my individual observations for each:
Six Flags: The enthusiasm works with this (who doesn’t get excited about a trip to Six Flags?!). However, it sounds like you’re trying to wring it out from start to finish and it feels forced. Think back to your childhood days when your parents said “no.” How did you feel about being told “no” when you asked for something? Disgust? Frustration? Dread? If you start with that familiar feeling, it will make the turn to, “Yes! You CAN go to Six Flags and have all the fun and excitement you wanted for so long! Yay!” stronger.
Revlon: This sounded more natural and I thought the pronunciation of being as “bein'” was a nice touch! One thing that might help with this read is what I will call “The Response Method.” Your partner may be asking questions as you talk about the product with f****l expressions or brief questions. If you can figure out where those questioning remarks or looks are, it will strengthen the read and make it sound more like “I think this will help strengthen/beautify your hair!” instead of “Here is something I use. You should try it.”
You have a solid foundation for both of these. With a bit of polish, I can see you doing a commercial for one of these companies/products down the line! Keep up the good work!
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Hiya! Just looking for any feedback anyone might have to offer, this is a possible script I will be using for my demo. I’m new to voice acting and appreciate anything you might have to say.
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Hi Andres,
From the get-go, the read sounds quite confident, which seems suitable for this specific copy. It sounds like you were connected to your copy, as I could hear slight nuances throughout the read, which is nice. The enthusiasm didn’t sound forced at all, and it sounded quite conversational, while also having a professional quality to it. But, for the “that idea we borrowed from nature” part, I’d agree with Rebekah, as the pause (I struggle with this myself) seems to take away from the natural conversational quality of the read. But, overall, great job!
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I liked the variation of tone among the three pieces. My coach is trying to get me to use silence less when transitioning. He would like to hear tonal change instead. That said, there were a couple of places in the reads that might be smoother with this in mind. Great energy and diction! You use your very peasant voice appropriately for the each topic.
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Hi! Your voice is very clear and you enunciate your words well! You also have a naturally high pitch for reads, which will help tremendously for high-energy reads! One point I want to address before going into each piece is tone. It sounds similar through all of the reads even when the situations are different. Identify who it is you’re addressing in each of these reads and why you’re talking about the product or service (more on that in the individual notes).
Alaska (Holland America): Strong start on “Before.” It helps inform the audience that there’s something else they’ll want to do so their trip to Alaska is more special than a standard drive around the countryside (or ride on the railcar). One thing that will also help is to switch emphasis to “…you have to call Holland America.” Remember: You want them to enjoy the experience as much as possible by making them feel as if they can do this to make it more fun rather than a process they have to go through before they can go on the trip.
Harvey Home Theatre: This is an example piece of copy where you may want to play with punctuation rather than follow it uniformly. One question: How smart is he? Is he really so smart that he can do more than just cardiac surgery with ease? Or are there things even he has trouble with? That can help inform the tone for this read–I can feel a sassy quality from this copy just reading it. The heightened energy does work when you talk about it to your audience–after all, you want to transport them to a world where they control their immersion, don’t you?
Waterpik: This read sounded the most natural out of the three and feels like the best fit for your natural voice! Again, think about the tone of the copy. Think about how much of a struggle it is to manually floss between every single tooth. But, you have a solution! A strong start can always carry through to the ending when you know what your lead-in line is (what happened or was said immediately before you say the first word).
Out of all of these, the Waterpik and Alaska reads work best for your natural voice. Keep working some more on these to get a more conversational read!
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Hello all,
Just submitting my second book narration for feedback, I appreciate it..
Thanks!
Where the Wild Things Are:
The night wore his wolf suit and made mischief of one kind
and another
and another
his mother called him “WILD THING!”
and Max said “I’LL EAT YOU UP!”
so he was sent to bed without eating anything.
That very night in Max’s room a forest grew
and grewand
grew until his ceiling hung with vines
and the walls became the world all around
and an ocean tumbled by with a private boat for Max
and he sailed off through night and day
and in and out of weeks
and almost over a year
to where the wild things are.
And when he came to the place where the wild things are
they roared their terrible roars and gnashed their terrible teeth
and rolled their terrible eyes and showed their terrible claws
till Max said “BE STILL!”
and tamed with the magic trick
of staring into all their yellow eyes without blinking once
and they were frightened and called him the most wild thing of all
and made him king of all wild things.
“And now,” cried Max, “let the wild rumpus start!”
“Now stop!” Max said and sent the wild things off to bed without their supper.
And Max the king of all wild things was lonely and wanted to be where
someone loved him best of all.
Then all around from far away across the world
he smelled good things to eat
so he gave up being king of where the wild things are.
But the wild things cried, “Oh please don’t gowe’ll
eat you up-we love you so!”
And Max said, “No!”
The wild things roared their terrible roars and gnashed their terrible teeth
and rolled their terrible eyes and showed their terrible claws
but Max stepped into his private boat and waved good-bye
and sailed back over a year
and in and out of weeks
and through a day
and into the night of his very own room
where he found his supper waiting for him
and it was still hot.
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