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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #74107
    naderaliamer
    Participant

    Hi everyone! These are for my latest training session and a couple of them are redos(with suggestions from feedback from my last posting)

    Thanks again in advance!

    Fish Boil

    Even people who don’t like fish, have been known to like this fish. That’s why a fish boil is a must-do experience when you visit Door County. It all starts with a blazing bonfire under a
    kettle of salted water. People circle around to warm themselves and take in the crisp smell. When the temperature is just right and the crackle of the fire is just loud enough, the boil master adds a basket of potatoes and onions to the kettle. A few crackles later, the mild whitefish steaks, fresh from Lake Michigan, are delicately lowered in. At just the right moment, kerosene is tossed into the fire, exciting the blaze and causing the water to boil over, dramatically carrying off the fish oil that has collected on top. The fish are pulled out and greeted with a generous drizzling of butter. Ladies and gentlemen, dinner is served.

    Texicon Family

    “Hey there new employee, or should we say, new family member. As a member of the Texicon family, we want to formally introduce you to your new home, but not too formal because that’s just not our style. Now you’ve already got your new uniforms and met with our incredible CEO, or head of the family as we like to call him. Now it’s time for me to bring you up to speed on what your days are going to be filled in with. Make sure you grab some of the complimentary cake you have in front of you, we love cake here so you’re going to have to get used to that, and see what the rest of your time at the Texicon household has in store for you!”

    Jerry Seinfeld

    The move to New York meant returning to his roots for Seinfeld, who was born April 29, 1954, in Brooklyn and raised in the Long Island town of Massapequa (which he has always joked was an old Indian name meaning “by the mall”). After graduating from Queens College, Seinfeld appeared at New York comedy spots while supporting himself with odd jobs, including selling lightbulbs over the phone and waiting tables at Brew and Burger. As his act grew more polished, he honed the wry observational style that was to become his trademark.

    Educational Explainer Video Intro Only – Real Estate

    Would you like to buy a house?
    Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
    Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run.
    But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house.
    Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.

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  • #74100
    Marco Rigazio
    Participant

    Hello everyone, here are this weeks installments of my homework. I appreciate all your time and comments.

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    • #74117
      LFlynt
      Participant

      Marco: you’re clearly a pro: both were excellent – conversational, natural…sounds like you’re talking to a friend, but has the crispness of a professional. Nice tone and control of your instrument. “NASDAQ” had a sense of authority to it.

      awesome work!

  • #74095
    ILMVOMan
    Participant

    Getting ready to finalize spots for my demo. Thanks for any feedback

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  • #74084
    Nik
    Participant

    Hi everyone….first time posting on the forum.Hoping to get feedback on two takes of an HP Printer commercial.

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    • #74118
      LFlynt
      Participant

      hi Nik!
      very cool you shared multiple takes – always good to see (or hear), side-by-side, your adjustments. clear, crisp articulation and great pacing. I do get some hesitation in the delivery..maybe that’s not the right word, but I feel there was the start of some power, but faded a little.

      overall, very nicely done.

    • #74103
      Marco Rigazio
      Participant

      Hi Nik,
      I think you have a very pleasing and clear voice. So aside from the reverb in the recordings (which I’m sure you will fix as time goes on with proper treatments), your reads were good. I would suggest when reading a list of things like the “Make them, share them, store them, invent” part, try to give different inflections for each part. Otherwise it sounds pretty monotone throughout. Also, I couldn’t really make out the last word ‘invent’ which may be due to the reverb.

  • #74079
    LFlynt
    Participant

    Hi everyone!

    Would love your feedback on the below reads for me and my Coach to review for homework. Please be brutally honest: we’re working on specific areas for improvement..I won’t mention them here, so as not to bias you, Lol!

    Thanks so much for your help!

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    • #74105
      Marco Rigazio
      Participant

      A beautiful and clear voice! I could certainly see you voicing narrations such as the Niagara Falls recording. There were some plosives in both reads. Not many but a few. I love the ‘smirking’ tone of “See you later alligator” – that came through loud and clear. Great job!

      • #74114
        LFlynt
        Participant

        thanks so much, Marco – really appreciate the feedback: I’ll be sure to work on those: definitely a development area. 🙂

    • #74090
      Nik
      Participant

      Hi there…loved the reads – especially the very poetic feel the Niagra Falls one had.
      My only comment would be that the Lubriderm one sounded a bit rushed at times.
      Also for some reason, the word “rises” in Niagra sounded like “rices.”
      Other than that, brilliant work!

      • #74115
        LFlynt
        Participant

        thanks so much, Nik! and, yes – you picked up on one of the areas, for sure, Lol! I’ll keep working on it. really do appreciate your time in listening 🙂

  • #74073
    TimberTykes
    Participant

    Good Evening.

    I’ve got a couple of readings as homework, per my Instructor.

    Feedback would be most appreciated. I’m trying to make sure I’m leaving the impression of talking to someone, and also making sure that my words are being pronounced clearly.

    Thank you for your time.

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    • #74159
      Tracy
      Participant

      Hello – I thought that your reads were conversational and sounded like you were speaking with a friend. I would just note that the recordings were a bit choppy – in between phrases there was no room tone which made the reads sound a bit stilted.

      • #74274
        TimberTykes
        Participant

        Hey, and thanks for the reply!

        Yeah, for some reason, I have a penchant for ‘honoring the script.’ I tend to forget afrer it’s too late, but I definitely won’t forget next time. Thanks again!

  • #74060
    BryanDavidson
    Participant

    Hi, may I have some feedback on this promo? It’s for tourists visiting china, inviting them to visit China.

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  • #74058
    BryanDavidson
    Participant

    Hi! May I have your feedback on this voiceover? It’s for a China tourism promo. The voice is supposed to be calm, enticing, and inspiring tourists to visit China.
    Feedback appreciated! Thanks.

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  • #74052
    1stassi
    Participant

    Hi everyone I’m practicing before my demo prep in a week. Please take a listen. Im working on not pitching down and making sure the clients name is visible. Please let me know how I did. Thanks

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    • #74552
      airbear57
      Participant

      Hi,

      I thought the 7-11 script was great! Your timing is always so impeccable! I definitely felt like you pitched up when needed and could clearly hear the client’s name. That being said, when you got to the introducing 7-11 part, it felt like the story started to get lost a bit and it sounded more commercially and less conversational (if that makes sense), but you got that conversational tone right back in the last sentence. So, my one suggestion would be trying to figure out how to make the “sell” part of the script a bit more conversational. Otherwise, great work as always!

      Wow! The tonal differences between these 2 scripts were so great and just go to show your range! My two notes for the Carnation script have to do with the line of ‘packed with protein…’: 1) enunciation because it felt like the words started to get a little muddled (specifically the word ‘nourish’) and it took me out of the script for a second and 2) focus on the whole sentence as a whole and the thought it’s trying to get across instead of the individual words themselves. Overall, I thought this was a really fantastic read and again, I could clearly hear the client’s name! Keep up the great work 🙂

  • #74048
    chloeblackstone
    Participant

    Hi everyone! I’m posting my second sample here as part of my narration coaching. Again, please ignore the bad audio quality. I’d appreciate any feedback! Thanks in advanced for listening.

    “Let’s learn about foxes! Foxes are small, furry animals that belong to the same family as dogs, wolves, and jackals. Even thought they look a bit like cats, they are not related to them. Foxes are mammals, which means they are warm blooded, breathe air, feed their babies milk, and are covered in fur. Many foxes are nocturnal, meaning they are most active at night. But some are crepuscular, which means they are most active at dawn and dusk.”

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    • #74055
      1stassi
      Participant

      I love your voice for narration.
      I liked the read as well. The word fox is repeated alot so I would change pitching and tones to make it sound different. So everyone not just one pitch. Hope that makes sense.

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