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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #74421
    Logan DFD
    Participant

    Hoping to get some general feedback on some recordings I’ve been practicing. Thanks!

    HelloFresh

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    Less stress, less mess.
    Umm. No promises on the less mess thing, but definitely less what’s for dinner blues.
    And who doesn’t love that?
    So gather round.
    Because this dinner that comes with so much less really gives you so much more.
    Join America’s #1 mealkit at Hellofresh.com.
    Get $80 off plus free shipping with code TV80 during our labor day flash sale.

    Earthbound Farm
    
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    And while farming organically may cost more, we think you’ll find Earthbound Farm organic produce is an infinitely better value.
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    Now and for years to come.
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    Food to live by.

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    • #74525
      TimberTykes
      Participant

      Hello! Thanks for your recordings! You have a very clear, and well- pronounced voice- no hesitation at all. It was really great to listen to!

      If I had any particular feedback, it’s actually the reading of your script. They were read in a straightforward manner, with little in the way of fluctuation to certain lines, or emphasis to certain words I feel would really send the message of the recording home.

      • #74527
        Renita
        Participant

        Thank you TimberTykes for your feedback and recommendations. I will definitely work on those two areas and plan to submit another recording in April.

        • #74528
          Renita
          Participant

          Ooops! Please disregard my comments. I’m trying to navigate my way to a post I made a couple of months ago.

  • #74408
    carynbell
    Participant

    Hi everybody!

    Just practicing some commercial scripts. Feedback is always welcomed!

    Thanks!

    SNAPPLE:

    Attention shoppers:those of you who are over in home improvements, and are looking for Snapple, please be aware, you will NOT find any of Snapple’s assortment of flavors in THAT department. We realize a tasty drink like Snapple Raspberry Iced Tea or Kiwi Strawberry Cocktail would, in fact, be a FINE improvement to any home. But technically, Snapple is a beverage. Therefore, we are left with no choice but to keep it in the beverage aisle. With that said, thanks for your cooperation. And happy shopping, from SNAPPLE.

    MAYBELLINE:
    This one is for the girls who make it happen… The ones who look in the mirror with confidence. Who apply passion to everything they do.
    This is for the women with drive in their eyes… Who see obstacles as opportunities. And show the world their courage and creativity every day.
    This is for every woman who looks in the mirror and sees the power of possibility. And if sometimes that mirror is clouded by doubt or insecurity… This is for the girls who know what to do.
    Put on your strong face, your “nothing’s going to stop me” face. Stand tall and proud. Go out and make it happen.
    Maybelline New York, Make it Happen.

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  • #74396
    Nik
    Participant

    Hi, I would love any feedback on my submission for last month’s competition.
    Thank you in advance!:)

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    • #74427
      tojo44
      Participant

      Sounded really good to me! Very relaxing read; exactly what the script called for.

  • #74383
    Ems412
    Participant

    Hello everyone,

    I recorded three narration reads below. I am looking to get some peer feedback on them.

    The airline ones are pretty self explanatory but the advance technologies one is an explainer video aimed at on boarding employees.

    I am looking for technical feedback tone and pitch etc. Your feedback is appreciated. Thank you.

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  • #74372
    Kim_Lomax
    Participant

    Hello again, everyone! Thanks so much for the comments on my previous post. I have curated several options for my demo and am including some practice I did on them today. I would so appreciate any feedback you could provide on these reads.

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  • #74361
    Garprocks
    Participant

    Hi Everybody! I could really use some feedback on my homework – Thanks!

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    • #74425
      tojo44
      Participant

      I thought they sounded great! I really like that you were having fun with the Alamo read!

  • #74344
    tojo44
    Participant

    Posting a few reads for my homework assignment. Feedback on recording, the reads themselves, etc. would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

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    • #74532
      Sylvanie
      Participant

      Hi, your voice is great!

      Enjoyed the AMEX read a lot. The Sales-training was a bit rushed, slow down a bit. All in all.. great reads. Keep up the good work.

    • #74390
      Ems412
      Participant

      Hello,

      I love your voice! I do hear a southern accent?? I think that’s is what Garprocks was maybe getting at when talking about the word “American”, but I think they all sound great. There was a little mouth noise in the sales training read around the 5-6 second mark.

    • #74381
      Nik
      Participant

      Amazing amazing voice!!!
      Only comment would be that the sales training vo sounded a tad bit rushed.
      Other than that, absolutely brilliant!

    • #74366
      Garprocks
      Participant

      Hey Brother – Great voice!

      Amex was almost perfect! The ONLY thing I heard was that the first “American” sounded to me like “AmURRican”. Excellent!

      On Kathryn Knight, I feel like the read needs smoothed out – it’s kind of choppy (the number one criticism I get). Also, “undeniably” came out as “un-de-niably” – I think there was too much emphasis on that particular word.

      The sales training read seems rushed and not as well enunciated. I heard “tothepotential”; “new info along the way” feels bouncy to me; and “entrpreneurs” doesn’t sound right to me.

      I can definitely see why you’re getting into this business. Would appreciate return feedback from you.

  • #74339
    Esandyii
    Participant

    Hello all-

    Homework for Art Bruder for 2.14.2022
    All comments welcome

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    • #74356
      TomFields
      Participant

      Esandyii,
      I really like the pacing and sincerity of both reads. I am picking up mouth noises and some breathing that are a bit distracting. On glenfiddich listen for the mouth sounds just before the first spoken word. You may want to back off the mic some or reduce the gain some. Staying hydrated and maybe try some apple slices or room temp apple juice to help w the mouth noises. You can silence the breaths in post. Hope your class is going well.
      Tom

      • #74776
        Esandyii
        Participant

        Many thanks!

        ES

  • #74328
    Elise Duke
    Participant

    Hi everyone! First time feedback submitter, here 🙂 Please let me know your thoughts on the below samples. I’d love feedback on my tone, tempo, and overall reading. Thank you, I appreciate it!

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    • #74367
      Garprocks
      Participant

      Hi there! You have a very pleasant voice, but I’m sure you know that already!

      On Beginning of first read, “Did you” comes out as “didju” – I particularly notice this because it’s something I have to watch in myself. Overall, you’re a WORM, so I want to hear more fun and/or irreverence in your voice – just the attitude.

      The second read sounds forced, like you are really focusing on each syllable of each word. I suggest just reading it to yourself several times and become completely familiar/comfortable with the text, and then make it really smooth and natural – like your natural voice.

      Great work!

      • #74511
        Elise Duke
        Participant

        Thank you so much @garprocks! I appreciate the feedback. Now I hear the “didju” as well and will definitely work on my pronunciation more.

    • #74355
      TomFields
      Participant

      Hey eduke45,
      Nice, clean recording. I like your clear articulation. I would suggest on the Nature read, since you are speaking as an earthworm, that you give it a try, visualizing a helpful, articulate, maybe a little goofy earthworm might sound. Have some fun with it.
      On both reads try to imagine you are speaking to someone, rather than just delivering some information. Pick out a few operative words that you want to accentuate with tone and/or volume changes.
      Tom

      • #74512
        Elise Duke
        Participant

        Thank you for the feedback, Tom! I get so caught up in focusing on not messing up that I lose sight of pretending I’m speaking to someone to make it sound more conversational. I appreciate it!

  • #74326
    Marco Rigazio
    Participant

    It’s the weekend and that means another homework assignment. I picked Motel 6 because it can be cheeky so I put a little ‘attitude’ in there. I’m not Tom Bodell (for you youngsters, he was basically THE voice of Motel 6 for what seems like forever. This one was fun 🙂

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    • #74357
      TomFields
      Participant

      Marco,
      Nice resonant voice, great pacing and attitude ;-). A couple of observations. Breaths distract from the copy. The copy has a lot of S sounds in it, which can sound hissy on playback. Words like Six and Save can sound drawn out. Plosives can sound too loud even when not obviously popping. On the endings of words like hat or dotcom try not to swallow the consonant sound. Lately, I have been editing a lot of my own recordings and I have many of the same small distractions that I can usually clean up in post. I gave yours a once-over and have the file attached.
      Keep up the great work.
      Tom

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      • #74405
        Marco Rigazio
        Participant

        Hi Tom,
        Thank you so much for your reply. It’s great to get feedback from others since I’m too close to my own work to hear some things.

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