[David Goldberg]

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[ilene.echavarria]

Hello Edge Friends!

Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 3 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!

Freshii:
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize! 

Ivory:
Inside of me lives a little girl who was fierce and bold and completely free. Now I’m the one people depend on. But that little girl…I know she’s still there, because I’ll always be an Ivory girl. That’s Ivory. Still 99.44% pure. Pure clean. Pure beautiful. Pure me. … Forever fresh…classic Ivory clean.

Breyers Ice Cream:
At Breyers, we’re churning out an amazing new ice cream
. One with double the whoa… double the wow
. New Double Churned from Breyers. 
The richest, creamiest tasting Breyers ice cream ever. 
Amazing

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[airbear57]

Hi everyone, I would really appreciate it if you would give my practice commercial scripts a listen and provide any feedback!

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Thanks so much,
Arin

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[ilene.echavarria]

Hi Arin! These are lovely and clear reads. On “Home Chef,” try a take a bit more playful and fun. Feel like you played it safe on this one. I think “Scribd” was golden. I can hear this playing on digital radio like Spotify or Pandora. Great job!

[iSynge]

Hello everyone! Got a few recordings I was hoping to get some feedback on before my next coaching session. I’d appreciate the help!

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[Provocaleric]

Dear Forum,

Please let me know what you think about this medical read, thank you all very much!

Phytophotodermatitis is a nonimmunologic phototoxic cutaneous eruption resulting from contact with photosensitizing substances found in plants; furocoumarins (present in limes and other plants) are typically implicated and get activated following exposure to sunlight, especially 320-400 nanometer UVA rays.

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[Provocaleric]

Dear Mir,

You have a clear, sweet tone with good diction. I would only criticize your pacing should pick up and add more flow, plus I think you miss pronounced Marauders. I appreciate you and wish you all the best, keep getting better and take care!

[Provocaleric]

Thank you Chloe, I appreciate it

[mir19800]

Hello Everyone,
I uploaded this file and would love your feedback. Your words of wisdom and suggestions will be greatly appreciated. Thanking you in advance.

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[Provocaleric]

Hello fellow friendly voice pals!

I was hoping to borrow your professional ears for a comment or two about this medical read genre I am considering for my demo. I picked a relatively easy word difficulty read to start with. Here is the script.
Blood Glucose Meters

f you have diabetes, using a blood glucose meter is very important. It helps you keep your blood sugar within a healthy range. They don’t all look like this one, but they all pretty much work the same way. You provide a drop of blood, and the meter tells you what your glucose level is. Don’t get freaked out, it’s just a little pinch, and using the meter is really easy. The first thing to do is to load a test s***p into the meter. That’s a little piece of paper that reacts with your blood.

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Provocaleric! Your voice is very smooth, clear, and professional! Since this read is all about Blood Glucose Meters, I would make sure to emphasize the words “blood glucose meter” in the first sentence. My other recommendation is to picture someone you are speaking to throughout the copy. Great job, overall. keep it up!

[Provocaleric]

Dear Chloe,
You have a friendly, clear and pleasant tone! If I had to criticize, I would say maybe you could have a bit more contrast with your tone on keywords and phrasing and maybe just a wee bit faster of a read overall, otherwise your awesome! Please feel free to read my for critique as well, thank you and I wish nothing but the best for you!

[Provocaleric]

Amelia Earhart
Amelia Earhart dared to go where no one had gone before. The public adored the pioneering pilot. And news reels of the day captured her every move. Yet the private side of Amelia would always remain an enigma.

House with Nobody Home
Whenever I walk to Suffern along the Erie track
I go by a poor old farmhouse with its shingles broken and black.
I suppose I’ve passed it a hundred times, but I always stop for a minute
And look at the house, the tragic house, the house with nobody in it.

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