[David Goldberg]

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[Provocaleric]

Hello fellow friendly voice pals!

I was hoping to borrow your professional ears for a comment or two about this medical read genre I am considering for my demo. I picked a relatively easy word difficulty read to start with. Here is the script.
Blood Glucose Meters

f you have diabetes, using a blood glucose meter is very important. It helps you keep your blood sugar within a healthy range. They don’t all look like this one, but they all pretty much work the same way. You provide a drop of blood, and the meter tells you what your glucose level is. Don’t get freaked out, it’s just a little pinch, and using the meter is really easy. The first thing to do is to load a test s***p into the meter. That’s a little piece of paper that reacts with your blood.

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Provocaleric! Your voice is very smooth, clear, and professional! Since this read is all about Blood Glucose Meters, I would make sure to emphasize the words “blood glucose meter” in the first sentence. My other recommendation is to picture someone you are speaking to throughout the copy. Great job, overall. keep it up!

[Provocaleric]

Dear Chloe,
You have a friendly, clear and pleasant tone! If I had to criticize, I would say maybe you could have a bit more contrast with your tone on keywords and phrasing and maybe just a wee bit faster of a read overall, otherwise your awesome! Please feel free to read my for critique as well, thank you and I wish nothing but the best for you!

[Provocaleric]

Amelia Earhart
Amelia Earhart dared to go where no one had gone before. The public adored the pioneering pilot. And news reels of the day captured her every move. Yet the private side of Amelia would always remain an enigma.

House with Nobody Home
Whenever I walk to Suffern along the Erie track
I go by a poor old farmhouse with its shingles broken and black.
I suppose I’ve passed it a hundred times, but I always stop for a minute
And look at the house, the tragic house, the house with nobody in it.

[Provocaleric]

Dear lovely Edge Artists,

As so many of us in here are getting are demos ready, please give me a hand and I will do the same for you if you would please take a listen to a couple of reads I borrowed from from the Edge script library

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[manchilda]

Strong read on Amelia Earhart, though it possibly sounded a little too cheerful as well. It seems you have a happy sounding voice based upon the other comment!

[RoxyMel]

Hi! As far as the house with nobody in it goes, I like this.the middle part is particularly strong. I may have though the end was possibly a little too cheerful sounding for the meaning I interpreted.

[Provocaleric]

Hello Ray,
You have a clear tone with good pacing but I would like to see a little more energy in your reads. Maybe a little brighter tone to add to your already friendly read. Thank you for letting me review your work. Please feel free to review mine as well, thank you Ray

[raymazebarnes]

Good evening,

I am uploading a few things that I have worked on over the past few weeks. Would love to get your feedback as I am looking to record my demo in the near future.

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi y’all! I would appreciate any feedback on this virtual campus tour video copy I’m considering for my narration demo. What could I do to improve this read? Thanks in advanced for listening!

-Chloe

“The Rutgers New Brunswick Campus, on the banks of the Raritan river, is located in Central New Jersey. One hour from New York City, Philadelphia, the Jersey Shore and Ski Resorts! The 22,00 acre Rutgers Community includes 5 residential campuses with a variety of settings, from Farmland, to a traditional northeastern college setting with historic ivy covered stone halls. Students enjoy green lawns, campus quads, and vibrant student centers. plus, a college town with boutiques, shops, four-star restaurants, hotels, and a theater district just a short walk away.”

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[KMcClintock]

Hey Chloe,

I like how friendly you sound in your read and you speak really well, I understood everything you said. For improvement you could speed up the read a little bit and maybe be talking to someone like you are giving a tour to potential students and you’re excited to share information about the campus. Hope this helps!

[Roman Saienni]

Happy Tuesday everyone…
Here a couple scripts I’ve been working on for homework.
I’d appreciate your critiques. Thanks for listening.

Roman

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[Roman Saienni]

Sorry everyone… i’m reposting the files.
I just noticed that settings were off and my levels were low.
thanks again for listening,
Roman

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[Provocaleric]

HI Roman,
I like your friendly tone and clear diction on all your reads! If I had to criticize anything assuming we are not being too critical on the actual audio, I would say your levels on the 1st two reads were still low and you could use a little more guy next door in your flow and musicality. Good luck to you and never stop getting better!

[Roman Saienni]

Thanks so much! I appreciate your comments.

Best,
Roman

[JAE Factor]

Hello All,

There are some practice scripts I found through the library that I’m using to practice and sharpen my skills. Let me know your thoughts. Thanks!

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[Provocaleric]

Hi Jae,
I agree with everything Chloe said lol, but I do want to say your voice has certain lively clarity that makes me want to listen, so keep at it and you’re on your way to awesome instructional reads

[JAE Factor]

Thank you for the compliment Provocaleric.

[chloeblackstone]

Nice reads! I enjoyed listening. You have a voice that really suits the copy you chose. For “Making Candy,” you sound really clear and well-paced. I would pay attention to the pitch at the end of each sentence – you’re pitching down a lot. If you vary the end pitch, it will sound more attention grabbing.

For Tesla, I loved this read. I would slow down though, I noticed some words run into each other. Since it’s instructional you want the listener to really hear and process each word you’re saying so they don’t have to listen a second time.

For Creating a New E-mail, this is longer copy, but take your time reading it and don’t rush it. I would also recommend vary the pitches a little as well. Your voice really sounds great with this copy though! Very nice read.

[JAE Factor]

Chloe, thank you for your feedback. I will work on varying my pitches and tweak my pacing on longer copies. I appreciate the compliments. Thank you!

[KMcClintock]

Hello everyone,

Here are two pieces of homework, any feedback would be appreciated.
Ace Brand: Ace Brand Lawn and Garden Supplies are made with a satisfaction guarantee. Because all the talk in the world doesn’t matter if you can’t back it up. Ace Brand.
Special K Red Berries: Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea. Putting them in the box was. With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good. Special K Red Berries.

Thank you,

Kendall

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Kendall! I liked how in both of your reads, you do a really good job of varying pitch in each sentence so they kept my attention throughout. My main tip would be to slow down and focus on enunciating each and every word. For example, to my ear, the words “lawn and garden supplies” blended together. Same with the opening line for special k “putting strawberries.” Overall, great energy in both!

[KMcClintock]

Thank you Chloe! Great advice too, I will work on my enunciation and slowing down!

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