Hey Chas82! Overall, I really think your tempo, volume, and pitch were steady throughout for both scripts. I noticed that in your Arby’s read, you kind of gained energy towards the end but didn’t have that same energy in the beginning of the read, so try to keep the same energy throughout. I think you have a great voice for these food-related commercial spots (especially for that Arby’s one).
Hello! I think your pacing and articulation overall were solid and crisp. I didn’t hear any background noise per say, but I did pickup some mouth noise occasionally. Also the first sentence for the eye spot (towards the end) sped up a little bit, so I felt like I didn’t quite catch what you were saying about the epithelium. Oh, and I forgot to say that you sounded so relaxed and calm for the first spot which is great!
Hi JensenJacobs! I think your read was smooth and clear. The only constructive feedback I’d give is to hit the word “and” between “you and your baby” since it’s all-in caps and to convey to the listener that both yourself and your baby are taken care. I also think you can hit either “we” or “care” in the last sentence more. Keep uploading!
Hello, hello! I’m trying out these scripts geared towards kids. I’d appreciate every and all feedback especially on my tempo/pacing, hitting key words, and sounding interesting/engaging. P.S. I recorded these on my iPhone, so please excuse my poor sound quality. Thank you! Scripts are below:
Type to Learn Jr
Welcome to Type to Learn Jr! Click on Shelby and me to go to the Learning Center. To practice your keyboarding skills, click on Cassie, Hopkins, or Tiny. To return to the Login Screen, click Login. When you are ready to leave the program, click Quit. You can return to this screen at any time to change activities. Have Fun!
Children’s Education Space Game
Today we’re going to explore all of the planets in our solar system and some other places as well. We’ll travel into the future when astronauts live throughout the solar system. On each world we’ll see what the weather is like, what we would wear, and what we would do to have fun! Grab your oxygen, put on your seatbelt, and let’s blast off!
Greetings Katelyn! I really liked your tone and pacing like Mary mentioned, and I liked the sound of your voice too. The only spontaneity I noticed is when you read “71 flights of stairs” (because it’s an amazing fact). So it would be nice if you can have that same energy for the other cool facts like for “a pig who got help for her owner who was having a heart attack” and a “cat who saved five kittens from a fire”. I hope that made sense. Thanks for posting!
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Hi Mary! I so appreciate that your reading had a good tempo and was really clear. The only suggestion I could think of is to spice up the opening sentences a little bit to make them “grab the listeners attention” a little more. Thanks!
Greetings Alicia! Ooh, this whole read sounded really nice! The only minor thing I heard was in the last sentence, there was almost like an awkward pause between “with secret” and “keep it fresh everyday”. But other than that, you hit all the key words and tempo, pitch, and volume were great!
Hi Lexi! I must say – I just love the sound of your voice. Great job on both commercials – the volume and tone are great in both recordings. The only piece of constructive feedback I’d have to give is that I can audibly hear you take big breaths in the AARP recording (which can be distracting). If possible, come up with some breathing techniques that will help you take in the amount of air you need without us listeners “hearing” it. Looking forward to hearing your other recordings!!