Hey! I can’t pick a best take for this American Express spot that I’ve been practicing. Very minimally edited as I wanted to nail the whole thing in one take. Which one do you all like best and why? Thank you so much!
First, great job on all three. In my opinion, take 3 was your best. It had more emphasis on keywords and sounded more conversational than take 1 or 2, to my ear. It also sounded like you had more ‘energy’ at the end of the third take than the other two. All were good, I just liked 3 the best for those reasons. Again, great job!
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Hey all! So I’m just getting into the world of voice acting and decided to take a stab at a script on here. Let me know how I did and what I should improve!
Super energy and flow, I would like to hear some more variance in tone than volume, especially at the end when he’s the good guy if the money is right. Great job!
I think the two previous replies are spot on. I look forward to hearing your next take on this and how you work in the suggestions you’re getting here.
Great energy! Good feeling, but sometimes I can’t make out what you’re saying because the momentum obscures the words. This seems very much an acting exercise, so assuming you’re aiming for drama shows or video games. I agree with the previous poster, being more in the character will help the character’s story land better — right now it’s all the same level of intensity, but if you vary the range, more meaning and empathy will flow.
Hello, here are two new clips where I’m trying what I think is the appropriate voice for the copy given the finished commercials. Please let me know how authentic it sounds (though I never order a drink this way), and please, can anyone hear my laptop fan??? Thanks!
I think the Ketel One spot is a great use of your voice. You’ve really got the sultry vibe going for you. I like that you take pauses, but I think they might be a little bit long, particularly in the Dog recording. It’s got a good amount of feeling and a natural sound, but I think the train of thought gets a little muddy/choppy because of the length of the pauses.
Hello all,
I’m looking for some creative feedback. I was mainly focusing on flow and tone for this one. How do you think I did? I’m only just starting out, so I’d love any advice you’ve got (though I’m still working on the audio tech side of things). Thanks!
Good pacing here. It sounds like you’re reading the script, so what can you do to make this copy feel more natural? If you were saying this to me in person, how would you say it? I notice there’s also a rhythm in your speech, punching words regularly on a downbeat. If you can catch yourself doing it, then you can control it and use it effectively where it’s needed. You’ve got a nice voice!
Hey! Would anyone like to check out my mini reel? I working on getting better at the editing, but anyone other feedback is greatly appreciated! https://voiceactor.com/site/jennarachele
I LOVE your personal care ad! Sounds wonderful – nice friendly tone, steady speed, very natural.
Newcast reel – it’s a bit cheeky/perky, more like a Radio Personality than a Newscaster. Maybe change the name on that one (Radio Personality)
Hello! This is my very first post. Looking for creative feedback and not technical since I recorded it on my iphone. Please let me know how the flow sounds – if it is choppy or any other critiques. Thank you!
I really like the conversational tone you’ve got, your voice sounds great! The only thing I noticed to work on was that your pauses seemed a bit too long. Loved the “pop of pineapple”!
Your voice has a very nice tone, warm and inviting. My suggestion for improvement would be to vary your pitch a bit by picking some of the important words in the text to emphasize. Nice job putting up your first post!!
Theresa
The read comes off kinda pitchy in the beginning, but you got more balanced in pacing and tone as you continued. Try some lead in dialogue to help lead you in so you sound more nature from the start.
Hi Friends, back again. I’m struggling with this narration script and I recorded it over and over again and second-guessed myself, but I’m sharing 2 takes with you. Hoping for feedback as it relates to my vocal delivery (not technical – no professional equipment yet). I’m struggling to figure out what words to emphasize and sound natural and not so methodical with micro-pauses. Feel like I’m missing something – I tried standing up and breathing deeply, doing the “lead-in”….any thoughts or suggestions? Thank you!
I liked the second take the best. Your tempo was good compared to the first, which felt a little slow. Your tone in the first seemed a little too somber, but the tone in the second was still serious but felt more inviting. I would also suggest pitching the last word, “needs” of the script down rather than up. (I honestly, can’t tell exactly why. I haven’t been at the VO very long. 🙂 Still learning.) I feel pitching up at the end makes it sound more like a question. Also, I have definitely felt myself second-guessing how I am reading a script. When I hear it in my head it sounds a certain way and then I record and it sounds very different to me. You are not alone! I think this is a very natural part of the process. You’re doing great!
Theresa
Thank you so much for your thoughtful words and feedback. Yes! I get in my head and it’s probably best sometimes to take a break and then come back to it! Thank you for the suggesting on pitching down – I totally see your point and think that makes sense. I am quite new as well and agree, sometimes I just don’t know what exactly but know when something sounds right or a bit off haha! 😀 I go back through my notes from Technique 101 and make sure I’m using the correct terminology because I want to get comfortable in knowing what I’m talking about makes sense to me! Thank you!
Lorraine