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  • #100488
    MGoh
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    Hello, here are two new clips where I’m trying what I think is the appropriate voice for the copy given the finished commercials. Please let me know how authentic it sounds (though I never order a drink this way), and please, can anyone hear my laptop fan??? Thanks!

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    • #100688
      Sarah DeMike
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      I think the Ketel One spot is a great use of your voice. You’ve really got the sultry vibe going for you. I like that you take pauses, but I think they might be a little bit long, particularly in the Dog recording. It’s got a good amount of feeling and a natural sound, but I think the train of thought gets a little muddy/choppy because of the length of the pauses.

    • #100496
      Gmenjin
      Participant

      I can’t hear the fan in either of these! Both are pretty solid! I like the fluctuation in your voice on the Ketel one file. Very cool!

      • #100560
        MGoh
        Participant

        Thanks!

  • #100480
    Sarah DeMike
    Participant

    Hello all,
    I’m looking for some creative feedback. I was mainly focusing on flow and tone for this one. How do you think I did? I’m only just starting out, so I’d love any advice you’ve got (though I’m still working on the audio tech side of things). Thanks!

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    • #100495
      Gmenjin
      Participant

      Hey! The flow of this (to me at least) was very smooth! Keep it up!

      • #100559
        MGoh
        Participant

        Good pacing here. It sounds like you’re reading the script, so what can you do to make this copy feel more natural? If you were saying this to me in person, how would you say it? I notice there’s also a rhythm in your speech, punching words regularly on a downbeat. If you can catch yourself doing it, then you can control it and use it effectively where it’s needed. You’ve got a nice voice!

  • #100470
    jwilliams
    Participant

    Hey! Would anyone like to check out my mini reel? I working on getting better at the editing, but anyone other feedback is greatly appreciated! https://voiceactor.com/site/jennarachele

    • #100501
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      I LOVE your personal care ad! Sounds wonderful – nice friendly tone, steady speed, very natural.
      Newcast reel – it’s a bit cheeky/perky, more like a Radio Personality than a Newscaster. Maybe change the name on that one (Radio Personality)

      • #100512
        jwilliams
        Participant

        Ahh thanks so much for the feedback! I definitely think you’re right about changing the name of the news one. Good call!

  • #100432
    Karyn Bennitt
    Participant

    Hello! This is my very first post. Looking for creative feedback and not technical since I recorded it on my iphone. Please let me know how the flow sounds – if it is choppy or any other critiques. Thank you!

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    • #100482
      Sarah DeMike
      Participant

      I really like the conversational tone you’ve got, your voice sounds great! The only thing I noticed to work on was that your pauses seemed a bit too long. Loved the “pop of pineapple”!

      • #100485
        Karyn Bennitt
        Participant

        Thank you so much! Yes, I need to work on my pauses. Appreciate your kind feedback!!

    • #100467
      T Hayes
      Participant

      Hi Kristin,

      Your voice has a very nice tone, warm and inviting. My suggestion for improvement would be to vary your pitch a bit by picking some of the important words in the text to emphasize. Nice job putting up your first post!!
      Theresa

  • #100397
    dlegg
    Participant

    Denise submitting an audio file today.

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    • #100508
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      The read comes off kinda pitchy in the beginning, but you got more balanced in pacing and tone as you continued. Try some lead in dialogue to help lead you in so you sound more nature from the start.

  • #100386
    Lorraine Kish
    Participant

    Hi Friends, back again. I’m struggling with this narration script and I recorded it over and over again and second-guessed myself, but I’m sharing 2 takes with you. Hoping for feedback as it relates to my vocal delivery (not technical – no professional equipment yet). I’m struggling to figure out what words to emphasize and sound natural and not so methodical with micro-pauses. Feel like I’m missing something – I tried standing up and breathing deeply, doing the “lead-in”….any thoughts or suggestions? Thank you!

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    • #100468
      T Hayes
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      Hi Lorraine,

      I liked the second take the best. Your tempo was good compared to the first, which felt a little slow. Your tone in the first seemed a little too somber, but the tone in the second was still serious but felt more inviting. I would also suggest pitching the last word, “needs” of the script down rather than up. (I honestly, can’t tell exactly why. I haven’t been at the VO very long. 🙂 Still learning.) I feel pitching up at the end makes it sound more like a question. Also, I have definitely felt myself second-guessing how I am reading a script. When I hear it in my head it sounds a certain way and then I record and it sounds very different to me. You are not alone! I think this is a very natural part of the process. You’re doing great!
      Theresa

      • #100579
        Lorraine Kish
        Participant

        Hi Theresa,

        Thank you so much for your thoughtful words and feedback. Yes! I get in my head and it’s probably best sometimes to take a break and then come back to it! Thank you for the suggesting on pitching down – I totally see your point and think that makes sense. I am quite new as well and agree, sometimes I just don’t know what exactly but know when something sounds right or a bit off haha! 😀 I go back through my notes from Technique 101 and make sure I’m using the correct terminology because I want to get comfortable in knowing what I’m talking about makes sense to me! Thank you!
        Lorraine

  • #100297
    Don Atwood
    Participant

    Still just as new to this but gonna drop a second one in here for critique. again.I have done minimal editing. Open to the comments on what I should be starting to become aware of, and what I should be working on. thanks for your input.

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    • #100502
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      Great voice! Work on the pacing. There were a few micro-pauses that didn’t sound super natural. Nice take for minimal editing!

  • #100295
    Don Atwood
    Participant

    I am brand spankin new to all this. but I am gonna take a crack at it. I have begun recording and I am getting used to editing and all the other fun things that there are to learn. I am open to all comments. I did not do any editing on this piece, just picked the one I thot was best. I will be working on the editing side, and learning those tidbits. so any suggestions are welcomed.

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    • #100483
      Sarah DeMike
      Participant

      I really like your tone, your voice is so nice to listen to. I noticed you’re hitting a lot of down pitches at the end of your sentences, I would say that you could use some pitch variation (I also have difficulty with this). Keep it up!

  • #100289
    dlegg
    Participant

    Another post from Denise below. Pls let me know what you think.

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  • #100244
    Hennessey Marrero
    Participant

    Hello! My name is Hennessey and this is my first time posting to the feedback forum. I thought this was a great 10 second tid bit to practice with as I am training in the narration catergory.

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    • #100399
      Lorraine Kish
      Participant

      Hi Hennessey!

      Thanks for sharing and welcome. I’m fairly new as well! I’m just getting used to listening to voice clips and learning a lot from others too. Your voice sounds crisp, clear and friendly. What I might suggest which is something that I’m working on as well is to try to focus on someone you know and tell them what I need to say – tell them the “story” – even using a lead-in word. You already have such a natural sounding voice that’s pleasant to listen to. Not sure if that helps but great job!

    • #100283
      T Hayes
      Participant

      Hi Hennessey,

      Your voice has a very nice tone. It is great for narration. My suggestion for improvement would be to slow your pace down, just a bit. Congrats on your first post!
      Theresa

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