Feedback Forum

Viewing 3,175 reply threads
  • Author
    Replies
  • #100582
    Karyn Bennitt
    Participant

    Thank you so much!!

  • #100509
    kellcbell87
    Participant

    I think I nailed this one on the first try! What do you all think? Some night time baby music and bam!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100618
      JamesB
      Participant

      100% nailed it.

    • #100553
      MGoh
      Participant

      Yep, it’s a great read! Great pacing and feel! I’m looking for something to work on here, but if I were hiring this would be in the final selects!

  • #100503
    kellcbell87
    Participant

    Hey! I can’t pick a best take for this American Express spot that I’ve been practicing. Very minimally edited as I wanted to nail the whole thing in one take. Which one do you all like best and why? Thank you so much!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100617
      JamesB
      Participant

      First, great job on all three. In my opinion, take 3 was your best. It had more emphasis on keywords and sounded more conversational than take 1 or 2, to my ear. It also sounded like you had more ‘energy’ at the end of the third take than the other two. All were good, I just liked 3 the best for those reasons. Again, great job!

    • #100507
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      Here’s the script!

      American Express – Private Payments
      Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online, I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business.

  • #100492
    Gmenjin
    Participant

    Hey all! So I’m just getting into the world of voice acting and decided to take a stab at a script on here. Let me know how I did and what I should improve!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #101420
      Laura Sparks
      Participant

      Super energy and flow, I would like to hear some more variance in tone than volume, especially at the end when he’s the good guy if the money is right. Great job!

    • #100619
      JamesB
      Participant

      I think the two previous replies are spot on. I look forward to hearing your next take on this and how you work in the suggestions you’re getting here.

    • #100558
      MGoh
      Participant

      Great energy! Good feeling, but sometimes I can’t make out what you’re saying because the momentum obscures the words. This seems very much an acting exercise, so assuming you’re aiming for drama shows or video games. I agree with the previous poster, being more in the character will help the character’s story land better — right now it’s all the same level of intensity, but if you vary the range, more meaning and empathy will flow.

      • #100580
        Gmenjin
        Participant

        Thanks! I’ll try and keep that in mind for future recordings! and try and redo this one to make it better!

    • #100500
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      Hey there! Great energy in the read, but a bit over the top at times. Try to really find your character’s intention and that may help ground it more.

      • #100511
        Gmenjin
        Participant

        thanks! ill try and see what i can do about the intention and grounding it more!

  • #100488
    MGoh
    Participant

    Hello, here are two new clips where I’m trying what I think is the appropriate voice for the copy given the finished commercials. Please let me know how authentic it sounds (though I never order a drink this way), and please, can anyone hear my laptop fan??? Thanks!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100688
      Sarah DeMike
      Participant

      I think the Ketel One spot is a great use of your voice. You’ve really got the sultry vibe going for you. I like that you take pauses, but I think they might be a little bit long, particularly in the Dog recording. It’s got a good amount of feeling and a natural sound, but I think the train of thought gets a little muddy/choppy because of the length of the pauses.

    • #100496
      Gmenjin
      Participant

      I can’t hear the fan in either of these! Both are pretty solid! I like the fluctuation in your voice on the Ketel one file. Very cool!

      • #100560
        MGoh
        Participant

        Thanks!

  • #100480
    Sarah DeMike
    Participant

    Hello all,
    I’m looking for some creative feedback. I was mainly focusing on flow and tone for this one. How do you think I did? I’m only just starting out, so I’d love any advice you’ve got (though I’m still working on the audio tech side of things). Thanks!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100495
      Gmenjin
      Participant

      Hey! The flow of this (to me at least) was very smooth! Keep it up!

      • #100559
        MGoh
        Participant

        Good pacing here. It sounds like you’re reading the script, so what can you do to make this copy feel more natural? If you were saying this to me in person, how would you say it? I notice there’s also a rhythm in your speech, punching words regularly on a downbeat. If you can catch yourself doing it, then you can control it and use it effectively where it’s needed. You’ve got a nice voice!

  • #100470
    jwilliams
    Participant

    Hey! Would anyone like to check out my mini reel? I working on getting better at the editing, but anyone other feedback is greatly appreciated! https://voiceactor.com/site/jennarachele

    • #100501
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      I LOVE your personal care ad! Sounds wonderful – nice friendly tone, steady speed, very natural.
      Newcast reel – it’s a bit cheeky/perky, more like a Radio Personality than a Newscaster. Maybe change the name on that one (Radio Personality)

      • #100512
        jwilliams
        Participant

        Ahh thanks so much for the feedback! I definitely think you’re right about changing the name of the news one. Good call!

  • #100432
    Karyn Bennitt
    Participant

    Hello! This is my very first post. Looking for creative feedback and not technical since I recorded it on my iphone. Please let me know how the flow sounds – if it is choppy or any other critiques. Thank you!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100482
      Sarah DeMike
      Participant

      I really like the conversational tone you’ve got, your voice sounds great! The only thing I noticed to work on was that your pauses seemed a bit too long. Loved the “pop of pineapple”!

      • #100485
        Karyn Bennitt
        Participant

        Thank you so much! Yes, I need to work on my pauses. Appreciate your kind feedback!!

    • #100467
      T Hayes
      Participant

      Hi Kristin,

      Your voice has a very nice tone, warm and inviting. My suggestion for improvement would be to vary your pitch a bit by picking some of the important words in the text to emphasize. Nice job putting up your first post!!
      Theresa

  • #100397
    dlegg
    Participant

    Denise submitting an audio file today.

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100508
      kellcbell87
      Participant

      The read comes off kinda pitchy in the beginning, but you got more balanced in pacing and tone as you continued. Try some lead in dialogue to help lead you in so you sound more nature from the start.

  • #100386
    Lorraine Kish
    Participant

    Hi Friends, back again. I’m struggling with this narration script and I recorded it over and over again and second-guessed myself, but I’m sharing 2 takes with you. Hoping for feedback as it relates to my vocal delivery (not technical – no professional equipment yet). I’m struggling to figure out what words to emphasize and sound natural and not so methodical with micro-pauses. Feel like I’m missing something – I tried standing up and breathing deeply, doing the “lead-in”….any thoughts or suggestions? Thank you!

    Attachments:
    You must be logged in to view attached files.
    • #100468
      T Hayes
      Participant

      Hi Lorraine,

      I liked the second take the best. Your tempo was good compared to the first, which felt a little slow. Your tone in the first seemed a little too somber, but the tone in the second was still serious but felt more inviting. I would also suggest pitching the last word, “needs” of the script down rather than up. (I honestly, can’t tell exactly why. I haven’t been at the VO very long. 🙂 Still learning.) I feel pitching up at the end makes it sound more like a question. Also, I have definitely felt myself second-guessing how I am reading a script. When I hear it in my head it sounds a certain way and then I record and it sounds very different to me. You are not alone! I think this is a very natural part of the process. You’re doing great!
      Theresa

      • #100579
        Lorraine Kish
        Participant

        Hi Theresa,

        Thank you so much for your thoughtful words and feedback. Yes! I get in my head and it’s probably best sometimes to take a break and then come back to it! Thank you for the suggesting on pitching down – I totally see your point and think that makes sense. I am quite new as well and agree, sometimes I just don’t know what exactly but know when something sounds right or a bit off haha! 😀 I go back through my notes from Technique 101 and make sure I’m using the correct terminology because I want to get comfortable in knowing what I’m talking about makes sense to me! Thank you!
        Lorraine

Viewing 3,175 reply threads
  • You must be logged in to reply to this topic.