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[Catherine Heitman]

Hello, all, and Happy New Year! I’m hoping to get feedback on my delivery on a couple of narration reads. Also, I’ve been trying to improve my noise floor and practicing my editing. I’d appreciate any feedback on those, as well. Thank you!

Catherine

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[Donnamichelle444]

Great clarity in your speech And very great sell though it did not sound like you were selling – excellent delivery

[Taylor Grissom]

Hi there! This is my first time posting to the feedback forum and I’d love to hear your critiques on my Canva and American Express commercial reads. My recording space is not fully set up yet, so please only provide voice-related feedback. Let me know if these sound conversational and any other feedback you may have. Thank you so much 🙂

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[T Hayes]

Hi Taylor
On the Canva read, your voice has a very nice tone and you did a nice job emphasizing those important words. One suggestion for improvement would be to speed your tempo up a little bit since these are for commercials and also maybe very your tempo to make it sound a little more conversational. For the Amex commercial, your tone was more varied. 🙂 Be careful to not emphasize words that don’t have a lot of punch, like you and your.
Hope this helps. Good luck to you!

[Catherine Hayden]

Hi Taylor – You have such a lovely and warm voice! One thing I noticed in your Canva read is something that I have also gotten some feedback on which is that you emphasize certain words, such as “just”, “playground” etc. in a way that makes sense with the cadence of the script but can somewhat bury the following word so I would just highlight that as something to be mindful of. Both reads are excellent, though!

[Catherine Heitman]

Hello! This is my first submission. I’m working on my narration demo and am practicing. Please ignore my focus on my delivery, rather than the technical aspects of my recording. Does the delivery sound authentic? How’s the pacing? I’d appreciate any other feedback. Thank you. — Catherine

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[Catherine Hayden]

Hi Catherine – Great reads! The Appalachian Trail Travelogue is engaging and conversational – it sounds as though you’re talking about the trail to real people in a visitors center. 🙂 I think the Audrey Hepburn read could use some more of that conversational element – it’s clear and well-paced but seems to be just missing the conversational cherry on top!

[Catherine Heitman]

Sorry. I meant to request that you ignore the technical aspects and focus on delivery. (I couldn’t edit my initial post, for some reason.) Thank you.

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[Jhern245]

Hi I’m looking for creative feedback. It’s my first time trying commercial. What advice do you have to sound more conversational? Does the tone and paste match the product? Thanks!

[Jhern245]

https://recorder.google.com/f527ecc5-fd72-4861-b0a4-876a18e4d0f0

Hopefully this works because I can’t seem to download an mp3.

[T Hayes]

Hi,

I could hear the smile in your voice, very pleasant. 🙂 A suggestion to slow your pace a bit would be to take a beat between each sentence and think about them as separate thoughts (this has helped me) Also, watch for micro-pauses between words. For example, between the words rendevous and with, and elegance and is. Great job!
Theresa

[Catherine Heitman]

Very friendly read, JHern. You sound youthful and energetic, exactly who I imagine they’re trying to reach with the ad. Well done. 🙂

[NCFisher]

Hi JHern,
Yes, the Google link worked. I’m in my commercial coaching sessions and also recently submitted my first commercial copy for feedback as well. We’re doing it!:D

In the sample, your voice sounds clear and bright, and I think the tone does match the product. I think the pace has just a touch of a halt-like cadence that isn’t quite a conversational pace. One piece of advice that I received and can share that could help you sound more natural/conversational is to imagine that you are speaking to a friend or someone that you want to convince to travel with Air France. Practice speaking to a partner in real life or write your own lead in (like, “Of course you can afford to go!”) and either hit record after you say your lead in or edit that part out. I still need a lot of practice and coaching, but visualizing and pretending that I’m talking to someone has helped me get closer to sounding more conversational.

Great job and good luck!
~Natasha

[Catherine Heitman]

Very friendly read. You sound youthful and energetic, exactly who I imagine they’re trying to reach with the ad. 🙂

[Catherine Heitman]

This was meant for JHern, Natasha. I realized I replied in the wrong place. 🙂

[NCFisher]

Hello everyone!
I am new to voice-over work, and this is my first time posting to the Feedback Forum. I’m looking forward to your critique. My recording space is not 100% set up yet, so please only provide voice-related feedback. I am currently in training for commercial work, so please let me know how these two reads sound. One is for a university and is supposed to be upbeat. The other is a PSA. Thank you for any and all voice-related feedback, and I look forward to improving. Thank you!
~Natasha

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[Catherine Heitman]

Natasha, I love your voice and your authentic delivery. It felt like you were a real person, speaking to me. Nice.

[T Hayes]

Hi Natasha,

Your voice has a lovely, rich quality to it. You did a nice job matching your tone to the tone of each of the reads. My one critique for each would be to speed up your pace a bit. They felt a little too slow. Nice job for your first post!

[NCFisher]

Okay, thank you for that feedback! I appreciate it. 🙂

[Laura Sparks]

Ha! Nevermind, I had to convert to mp3 to meet the size requirements. Please let me know what you think!

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[Catherine Heitman]

Hi Laura. I thought your flow was great. Your voice is quite pleasant, too. Nice job.

[HillOKeefe]

Hi Laura! I think your flow is quite nice, it’s relaxed and conversational, though perhaps a little too easy going. It’s missing that touch of confidence in what you’re saying which is critical for e-learning. Try imagining that you’re actually sharing this info with a real person who needs it. I’m also only hearing audio from the left channel. Hope this helps!

[Laura Sparks]

Hello Everyone! I am working on my flow and sounding conversational, how do you think I did? Also, does anyone hear a difference in quality between the wave and mp3 formats? My program said I will loose some of the original recording by saving as a mp3, just curious. Thanks!

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[Catherine Heitman]

Hi Laura. I think you have a nice voice and delivery for narration. The pace is nice, as well.

[T Hayes]

Hi Laura,

The tempo of this read was very appropriate for the topic. I like the tone of your voice. My one suggestion would be to put a little more emphasis on important words in the read such as “highlight” “choose”, etc. Nice job!

Theresa

[Sarah DeMike]

Hey all, would love some feedback on this one. The almost commercial feel to it was a real challenge for me. I’ve been struggling with conversational tone and sounding natural in my reads, how do you think I did?

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[Catherine Heitman]

Hi. I thought your read was very conversational and friendly. I think you did a nice job with it.

[Catherine Hayden]

Hi Sarah! I agree with JamesB that this is a great conversational read and also agree that the energy and variety of “The Freatom to eat ’em” line was perfect! I think it would be great to harness that energy throughout while keeping it conversational. My only feedback is that the list early on starting with “Looking to bulk up?…” could flow a bit better – I’ve gotten similar feedback so I know how. tricky it is!

[JamesB]

I think you did excellent. I think this is a very conversational read. Something that caught my attention was that it sounds a bit like you changed up the energy and gave more variety in your tone starting at the “The Freatom to eat ’em” line.

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