[Shmuel]

Hi Dickson,
Good voice, good sound. First read: good, but I would vary it a bit more with a tad more acting. Not too much, you are very close. The text is ” a car that can actually see like a human, using stereotcopic cameras, and even stop itself if it has to. The technology ….. ” the stop itself line seems to be out of place. We are talking about the car seeing, and then one thing the car can do alluvasudden. It needs to be moved, or a couple of words to introduce it, like “…. cameras, this car can even stop itself if it has to …. ”
Second read: Cool, you sound like a different person. This is fun, I’m a gunna buy me a lottery ticket next time I’m in Omaha !
Third read: Yet a third person. Nice. Minor quibble: “In this world” sounds like “in this whorle”. And I would vary the read a bit. Just a bit, because it’s at the same spooky level the whole way.

[Shmuel]

Hi Chad,
You’ve got a rich voice with great potential.
For both reads, you need more emotion in it. Don’t go overboard, though.
Thermacare: No echo, but heard some plosives (P sound). I felt there was a bit too much base. The speech started too early, and cut off a bit early. Give it another moment or second. It felt like I missed something. You need to sound like blocking the pain with ordinary patches is for cavemen, but with Thermacare, you are SAVED !!! something like that.
Jif: What happened to the sound here? Mucho echo here. Add some more acting as well. Shucks, my kids (are kind of crazy, they play around mess up the house, but I love ’em, and what to make sure they’re getting the best. And the best thing to give them is peanut butter.) all they care about is peanut butter …… ( well, if they do, I’ll give them the best).
Keep at it, and wish you success !

[Shmuel]

Got it, thanks, Chad.

[Shmuel]

Got it, daniel. thanks

[Shmuel]

Thanks much

[Shmuel]

Nailed it. Sound great, enunciation great, pace great. After listening to this, I’m sure I can pass my medical boards thanks to you.

[Shmuel]

I hear an echo in all the reads.
Beer can – vary the energy like you did with Pepsi.
Cadillac – you need a more luxurious and or take-charge read, GET OUT OF THE WAY !!!
Pepsi – ohmygawd you are perfect for this. I would consider embracing the quirky, cutesy type of commercials. Done right, they are a lot of fun, and can get get a lot of attention. It fits your personality.
With you success !

[Shmuel]

Here are two commercial reads. DryFly and Great Courses Plus. Feedback would be appreciated.
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[Shmuel]

I tried this, using your feedback. What do you think?

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[Shmuel]

Wow, thanks, Kate. This is excellent feedback. I will take another shot at this.

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