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Thirst–I was expecting to hear a more lighthearted approach during “you’re not thinking about it at all”–just minding your own business, la dee dah, and then suddenly desperation in “until it’s all you can think about…brain screams…”, and then maybe a change in tone to a more factual one halfway through as you begin to describe the list of effects of dehydration (after a bit more of a pause to emphasize the switch).
GNH–you definitely hit the friendly but authoritative mark!
Nicely done.
