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Brian Evans

Hi! For the AMC intro, I like the confident and informative beginning. It seems like it could pick up the pace and enthusiasm at “Movie fans can’t get enough…”. The new idea might be more enticing with an energy shift at that point. I also feel that the last few thoughts are a bit broken up. Maybe keeping the thoughts moving forward to the next idea would work.

For the Empire of Dreams documentary text, I also felt that you had a good tone of authority on the subject. One pattern that I noticed is the downward inflections at the ends of sentences. I think it works well when you sustain momentum between thoughts, as with “…small group from Cuba” into “then a larger one from Mexico.” Nice work!