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edixon310
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Hi Keith. Your reads are technically sound. They were clear and well-paced with decent sound quality. However, they were a bit dry. As a narration, I was expecting to feel the doctor’s emotions. For instance, he was THE ONLY DOCTOR IN THE REGION, treating patients who HAD BEEN TURNED AWAY, working tirelessly DESPITE WARNINGS. (Caps are for emphasis, not me yelling).
The doctor is telling his story, he had to have felt something from this event.
Now that you’ve got the words out, lose yourself in the reading and paint us a picture of his emotional journey. (Think James Kirk, overacting in Star Trek)
Apply this to both reads.
I think you’re off to a good start.

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