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March 15, 2023 at 4:01 pm
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Hi Tim,
How exciting – working on your promo demo!
Alamo Travel Discounts
Nice pacing – you sound like you’re smiling:). Just two thoughts – Try going up in pitch in the beginning of the word California – so that this line sounds as smiley strong as the Florida and Hawaii lines. Also, 25% is important to emphasize, but consider making the “T” in twenty fit your overall read by softening it. Lastly, consider emphasizing the brand “Alamo.”
Ancient Mysteries
I hear more of an announcer style here. Perhaps, for a more mysterious tone, picturing that you’re talking with a child will get you there.
Looking forward to hearing more from you,
BJ