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Hey there!
This was a good read! Everything was clear, and your voice is nice and descriptive- perfect for this reading, in my opinion.
I have only two things that I’m at odds with: I feel that with every second line (evening cruises, fishing until dark, etc.) lacks variance, or rather that each second line sounds like every other second line, if that makes sense? Like, the first line has a good buildup, and then the second one falls a little flat.
My second issue isn’t too much, but I feel that ‘Seafoam,’ as a money word, could be better emphasized.
Hopefully you’re able to understand where I’m coming from through my rambling. An enjoyable job, nonetheless!
