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Gill
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Hi
These were good reads overall
Allstate: The pace could be slower in the middle to give more essences to the script it sounds raced. There’s a lot of “Your” in this read which could benefit from variations.
Sesame Place: Pace is good, this read could have more energy when describing the theme park. Be mindful of your diction with “life and taxi.”
Hope this helps!