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Hi Chris,
Nice voice!
ACS – I would suggest more conversational, adjust the pitch, relax a little and connect with that type of audience who struggle with this habit. A little less emphasis on 50 million. It sounds like you loss some breath during the sentence …toll it takes on health and longevity. Let the copy breathe, move punctuation around so it sounds more natural.

Ziploc – good read. I would suggest here also to relax just a little and speed up the read just a tad. Try a lead-in, who are you telling about these ziploc bags? Think about, is this how you would tell them this.