[Shmuel]

The background sound effects are fine.
And your voice is good.
But Haley is right, the reading was a bit flat. You need to act, and I mean not “forced” acting, but acting like an actor acts. I only listened to composition, and for instance right at the beginning, you need to say the world stood still for the first time like the WHOLE WORLD man, stood still. Your Freshman year determines the rest of your High School life, and if you s***w it up, you are s*****d. And you might be s*****d. ohmygawd.
But you’ve got the technical aspects nailed, and as I said, you’ve got a good voice. You’ll do well. Wish you success.