[TimDKietzman]

To be honest, the recording quality makes it a little hard to listen to. However, I do think you sound very natural in your performance. You are speaking as if telling someone in person and the words you hit were very fitting and not overdone. Aside from the recording quality, I think the only thing you need to work on is your tempo. This is a narration script and you shouldn’t speak too fast. The point of narration is to explain, not sell, so make sure the words are spoken at a reasonable pace.