[JustJohn]

I think the use of the interrogative inflection on “smart doorbell” is a good touch. I wonder if you’re attempting to talk a little lower than your natural voice range once or twice (e.g., the word “everywhere” near the beginning). In “it’s a smarter way to transform your health,” I hear you emphasizing both “smarter” and “transform.” I wonder how it would sound if you only emphasized one of those two words. Good read overall, I think.