[rogue1]

Hi Mary, As always you have lovely, inviting quality to your voice and your read is very clear. I agree with others that the first take seems more natural. Might I suggest trying one where you read the script in a more aspirational tone–like you are *celebrating* these Duluth -un 9 to 5ers; perhaps even slightly in awe of them and all they do as they “make bravely and build boundlessly.” Keep up the great work!