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rogue1rogue1
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Hi Amber! Congratulations on your first post! Folks are very kind here, so I know you’ll feel welcome.

You performed a really lovely read–very clear, warm, and inviting. You also do a good job in sounding conversational and “real” (as opposed to sounding like you’re reading a script). My one suggestion would to be lean into that conversational aspect even more and further push the persona that you’re a mom excited by the talents of your child. For example, the segment where you talk about how “he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer…” sounds a touch like you’re reading a list instead of building in excitement as to what your creative child has already achieved through LEGO bricks.

Hope you find that helpful–keep up the awesome work!