[John Trape]

Hi Alexis,

I really appreciate your feedback. Yes, I wondered a little about the pacing in script one before I pressed ‘send’, and when I listened to it again, I could see what you meant were it to have been intended as part of an audiobook. Script two and the conversational tone – yes, I have a tendency to be too serious when I read, and I know that I have to concentrate much more on placing myself in the scene, as it were. I tried that with script two, and I feel that it is beginning to work.

Thank you again,

John