[chas82]

Here’s a “before and after” of the same travel script, with the after intended to incorporate forum feedback I found very helpful. Primary objective was to bring more emotion to the phrases that paint the word pictures of the tropical setting, between 14 seconds and 21 seconds. Thanks in advance for all input.

• This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by chas82.

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