[katelyndawnvo]

Dang I want chunky soup now. Really nice read!! I thought it was very well-fitting for your voice. There were just a couple things that popped out to me. I thought the pause was a little too long between “delicious, hearty” it felt like if you were having a conversation with your peeps you wouldn’t pause that long. And the “t” on “meat” was lost. Other than that this was great! 🙂

Katelyn