Edge Studio has been making spoken word fabulous, for over 30 years! It’s done via voice coaching and voice over recording, in 50+ languages. We also donate to numerous nonprofits and politicians who we support.
I am glad you were able to use noise reduction in the background. I can definitely hear your performance. While your performance is good overall, I think there are some pauses that are taking away from your delivery. Eliminate some of the pauses, and you will be all set.