[Chelle Buffone]

Hello Edge Community!

I am in the Coaching Program here and have uploaded 2 pieces for creative feedback(no tech; not in professional studio yet) as a part of the learning process. The 1st piece is a “1st Person” commercial I wrote about a dish at a restaurant. The 2nd is a VO for a t-shirt company. As I am just starting out I am open to any thoughts/general notes, but specifically I’d like to know in the 1st piece if you believe my read to be authentically conversational? What changes could make it better?

And for the 2nd piece, same general notes/thoughts request, but also curious if you feel the character and tone match the piece? Did you get a feel for the product? Would you trust this voice? Why or why not?

Thank you so much for your contributions to this journey!

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