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Mike, just got around to listening to this. I would say you have a lot of the ‘authoritative’ nuances in place. Namely the drop in pitch at the end of sentences. There is an awful lot of script for a 30-sec ad here, so the pace is justified. I think I would watch the exhales on certain words, especially the phrases near the end.
Not sure if you are expecting any comments on sound quality, but if so, I think you could use some processing to eliminate more noise and strengthen the voice some to match that wonderful, clean articulation. Maybe even get a bit closer to the mic to reduce some of the room that is present.
All in all, I was impressed with the read on a somewhat complicated script. A lot going on in there, and you worked it out…!
TimG
Hi all. Just wondered what this esteemed group thinks of the attached recording. Looking forward to any and all feedback…!
Hi all. Just wondered what this esteemed group thinks of the attached recording. Looking forward to any and all feedback…!
Adam, nice voice for this kind of thing. I would just suggest that you put quite a lot more energy into it. Really make the listener invest themselves in the subject. Push the volume of the speaking to more conversational levels, and find the words that make you excited about the subject and really get behind them. As for pace: good. Conversational: ok. Sometimes a script isn’t written like we speak, and that makes it a bit more difficult. But the recording space sounds great, and the noise floor is good. One more thing, watch the leading ‘F’ sound. It kinda squeaks on you much like it does me…:).
Looking forward to hearing more of your work.
TimG
Hey gang. Wanted to post something to see if my audio stack is up to the task. This is a clip where the first part is dry, straight from the mic. It is then repeated with R10 De-click, De-Noise, and ProEQ3, all in Studio One 6.5 (not the Pro version).
Any feedback is welcome. Thanks.
TimG
Hi Daniel..! First off: Oh G*d what a voice..!
Now that that’s out of the way….
For this interpretation, it seems a good read. I think all the inflection points are there, and the pace was pretty good. The first time through, “Candy and Jake hang” was a little hard to hear, but after that, it all sounded good.
As for the interpretation, the concepts of ‘framing’ and ‘hanging’ are kind of nefarious and sinister. I would try something that would use that, especially for the first and last parts. You would also be able to hold that concept in the middle section by envisioning Clark as using The Great Frame Up as an unwitting conspirator to further his ends. The script reads like 30 seconds of a western novel. I would love to hear what you could do with that.
Good work, though! For a first post, it’s clear you have been working on your craft already. Can’t wait to hear more.
–TimG
Hi Paula..! Seems your pace still needs some work. in the first clip, I would explore adding just a little lift (not really a pause) after ‘Tiffany’, and again before “in this episode…” I think that would tamp down the rushed feel. Also, a short drop in pitch on the last part of ‘Tiffany’ will separate that word from the following phrase. The first name is a first and last name, but Tiffany is just the first name, and the following phrase sounds like it could be a last name, until you realize that ‘with a’ isn’t a name. If you slow things down a bit, feel the flow of the copy, let the inflections and pacing group the words into complete thoughts, it will sound more like a story being told in real time, and not something being read.
The second clip has a lot of the same things. At the end, there is a list that, as you present it, is two things she loves: “entertaining her potted plants”, and “relaxation.” I am going out on a limb here, and say that there are probably three things: “entertaining”, “her potted plants”, and “relaxation”. Find a way to use inflexation and pace to create some room for each one without chopping it up.
As for diction, I would say…pretty good…!! Nice and clean!! Not much in the way of glottal stops, as you flow easily into the words that begin with vowels. I think you have a great voice, and am looking forward to hearing your progress. Your environment is a bit echoy, so feel free to step up to the mic a bit, so you can reduce your gain. That way the room won’t be quite as noticeable until you have a chance to treat it.
All in all a nice job. Again, looking forward to hearing your progress.
–TimG
Erika, I would say that your dialect coach is pretty good…! I played the track before reading your comment, and had no idea you were working on something like that. Actually a really good read. You didn’t mention about your recording environment, but it will need some work, as does mine…:). I have a take of this as well. It was really fun to do, and it seemed you had a good time with it as well.
Nice..!!
-TimG
Grace, you have a really good feel for the material. There are a couple of places where the inflection seems a bit out of place. “Although his wife dees most of the talking….” needs to be an addendum to the previous sentence as they form a single thought.
Also, your pronunciation of your voiced “th” sounds have a ‘d’ sound. You would have to check with a coach about if/when you would work on that.
Other than that, it was a nice read…! As I mentioned, you have a nice feel for this kind of material, and a really clear and clean voice. Nice Work…!
