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Hi TroyC,
You speak with ease, and your reads have a conversational feel to it. I noticed that you read many of the words differently than what was written, added words that were not there, and said some of the key words incorrectly, all of which can throw off the listener…so please be mindful of those things.
Thanks, and keep on posting!Hello! You have nice vocal tone and clarity that is easy to listen to. I felt like all three reads had a similar feel, kind of like reciting an inspirational poem to a large audience, rather than talking to one person. You might want to strengthen your choice of who you’re talking to in each read, maybe even change who YOU are in each piece, to see if that changes your delivery. Keep on posting!
Hi Mary, I enjoyed both reads, and I could tell the difference in their tone. I think you could even bring out more of each tone, especially in the iPhone read, where the last two sentences started to sound more like the tone of the Vanguard read. It may help to remember who you’ve chosen to talk to in the iPhone read, and imagine how excited they would be to know about the features and where to get them. Good job overall!
Hello! The pacing of this read needs to be a bit more balanced. There’s quite a dramatic difference between the beginning (extremely fast) to the very slow “gravel pounding ambition of youth” that might throw off the listener. Instead of pacing, consider other ways of showing the contrast between the two concepts you are talking about. For instance, you could try different emotions with lead-ins like: 1st emotion: clever-“bet you didn’t know this about us, but…” to 2nd emotion: enthusiastic “you’re going to enjoy how cool this car is…” or something like that. Your voice has a nice base tone to it, so take advantage of that and make the last sentence smooth and assured, rather than rushed. Keep on posting!
Hello! I think your voice is well suited for this type of script! I could also hear the humor within it, but I think the emotions could be brought out even more to show the transformation of the character checking in (formal, maybe uptight) to checking out (relaxed, refreshed, just a normal person again). I’d also try different versions of the last sentence to see if it can capture a bit of a “wink and a smile” feeling. Nice job!
Hi Joseph – You have a pleasant tone of voice. My main suggestion would be for you to be mindful of any overall patterns in your speaking, which, if it is evident enough to the listener, it might distract them from listening to what you are saying. For instance, there is kind of a up/down or rising/falling pattern that’s noticeable (to me) in the Nine Planets read. I think as you become more selective of which words to emphasize and find ways to emphasize them differently, then you will be less likely to fall into any pattern. Keep up the good work!
Hi suecat! Since I’ve heard you on previous postings, I can say that this mic definitely sounds better, and I agree with touzet that there seems to be some effects from processing. The delivery sounds conversational to me; I felt like you were talking with another mom. Be sure to enunciate the “t” in “Breakfast” and reduce the pause after “today.” I would experiment with different pitch levels on the last word or maybe the last sentence to give it a more solid feeling. Nice job!
Hello! I do hear subtle differences between the three reads, but I think the emotion you’ve chosen for each read really needs to be brought out more. What might be getting in the way of my hearing the individual character of each read is that I’m picking up on a pattern where several words are being emphasized within the same phrase, and maybe not all of them need to be emphasized. I would suggest choosing only the most important words to emphasize, which is usually not so much the nouns and pronouns. You’ve selected a good assortment of scripts, and I think your vocal tone in general is great for a wide variety of narrations! Good job, and keep on posting!
Hello VO Community,
Here is one commercial and one narration piece. Thank you for any comments and/or suggestions!
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