[mkell755]

Hi Alexis! That was very good! I really liked the warmth in your voice and it felt like you were smiling through a large part of the script, which in turn made me smile. Very good tempo and nice variation in pitch throughout. Great read!
Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Christineachsnyc! Both readings sounded really good! In the first script there seemed to be a good display of emotion, and with the appropriate emphasis on the words. For the 3rd emotion, I’m not sure how it could be changed to show more fear; that one sounded a little more angry than scared. For the second script, the read was spot on, great variation in pitch and tone and very well suited for this type of read. Great job for both!
Mary

[mkell755]

Hi SuperLuke! The volume was very low / distant on my end and I could not understand many of the words (it sounded far away?), but it sounded like good pace on the reading itself and the dog character was good. Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Sarah! I liked this read and your voice is well-suited for this sort of copy. The tempo was good and I found myself visualizing the fish over the fire. Good emphasis on several words to keep it interesting and varied throughout the read. A minute is long, but it did not seem long because of the way you read it. Great job! Mary

[mkell755]

Hi all! Looking for feedback on these 2 scripts. Any and all feedback is welcome! Trying to vary my pitch without sounding too over the top. Thanks! Mary

Script 1: Real Estate Educational Explainer
Would you like to buy a house? Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one. Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run. But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house. Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.

Script 2: Zeller’s [Local commercial, fast read, high energy]
Summer’s really heating up! Get into Zellers for our biggest event under the sun. Save up to 70 percent on a great selection of men’s, kid’s and ladies’ apparel and footwear. So hurry into Zellers – because savings like these don’t last forever.

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[mkell755]

Hi Fleishman619, great style of read for your voice! Very clear, good pace and variation of pitch. I found myself visualizing the items in the lists (birds, sharks, sea turtles and crocodiles) and really paying attention to what was being said. Great job!
Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Sarah – realizing now that if I reply to another’s feedback it might not also show up when you check for specific feedback to report back to your coach. Thanks again for your feedback, and I will work on the excitement and upbeat feel of the read. Thanks!
Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Kfvoice, this was a good read. I think you could use even more excitement in the second sentence where there is an exclamation point, like you are really excited about it being summer already!!! Your voice dropped down there, and I would think that the company (L.G. Energy) might want their name emphasized a little more. Otherwise, good enunciation and reading.
Mary

[mkell755]

Thank you kfvoice and Sarah! Really appreciate the feedback. In my head I feel like I am being somewhat sing-songy, but it sounds like I could vary it even more, and also keep it more upbeat and excited. Thank you!
Mary

[mkell755]

Hi nettipo1 – your voice sounds very well-suited to this type of read, it is warm and friendly sounding, which is what I would want to hear if I was looking for tax or other educational advice. Good pace of the read too. Great job!

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