[mkell755]

Love this Katelyn! Agree with the comment before, sounds very relatable and authentic – I believe you!! Your voice sounds really good for this commercial – very well done!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Robert, I missed it earlier. I will work on the flow and making it sound more natural, thank you!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Amanda! I think it is usually easier to talk more confidently about things you know, at least it is for me. You are doing great, just keep at it!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Carla, thanks for the feedback! I don’t think I’ve ever thought about how many crimps are on a bottle cap, but now I know, so I think I was just making sure others knew too 🙂 I will experiment with an even more no-nonsense read; great suggestion. All of the beer people I know are characters, so that should not be too difficult. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Carla! I really liked this read! The energy and flow was great, and the emphasis on several words was very appropriate. It sounded like you were smiling during the script too, which works very well for this type of script and for your voice. Good job!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Sarah! Yes, I definitely need to work on truncating my “and” to “n”. I will check with my coach on the best way to make that sound natural without over-emphasis (what it sounds like in my head!) or rushing ahead. Glad the energy came out for Zeller’s, wanted it to sound a little more high energy than the first script. Thank you!

Mary

[mkell755]

You are welcome Katelyn! Now go buy that car! 🙂

Mary

[mkell755]

Hello all! Looking for feedback to this read, on one of my favorite subjects! Any and all feedback would be great. Thank you!

Sam Adams Beer
No matter how hard you try, you can not twist off the bottle cap of a Sam Adams. All that Sam Adams flavor is locked beneath a twenty one crimp bottle cap. So you’ll need a bottle cap opener to get at it…at the very least. Sam Adams, a better glass of beer.

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[mkell755]

Thanks for the tips Kathy! Yes, I forget that standing and even moving my hands during a read can help me. Smiling too if the script is meant to be enthusiastic like this one. Thanks!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Kathy! Good read! I liked the pace and flow of the read, and the choice of which words were emphasized and stretched a little. I agree with the previous comment about enunciating the word “hunters” at the beginning, it sounded like “hunners”. Very good read and well-suited for your voice!

Mary

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