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Hi GJS, very nice! Your voice is well-suited for this genre! Great pacing, clarity and variation in tone throughout. I was listening with an interest to understand who has been able to make sense of Covid-19; it was very believable. Very good!
Mary
Hi GJS! Very nice! I like the tone in your voice and the pace of the script that you delivered. It was very appropriate for the script, and I could hear the humor behind it. The last word “there” got cut off. I usually leave a second or two of silence at the beginning and the end – always easier to chop off excess than to add back words later and have it sound natural (without having to do a retake, at least for me). Good job!
Mary
Hi m822! It sounded like the recording got cut off at the end, I think it was missing a few words. I typically leave a second or two of silence at the beginning and the end just to make sure the entire thing is recorded before exporting as an mp3 file.
Your voice is very deep and it is interesting! “Age” sounded stretched out like it was 2 syllables which made it a little hard to understand the word. You might try “Kia” accented in a positive way as the tagline / focus of the script. Keep it up!
Mary
Hello all! Here is a script for my upcoming narration demo prep. I’ve been to this museum (now closed) and it was really great. I’m hoping the enthusiasm portrayed comes off as authentic, let me know what you think. Thanks for listening! Mary
At the Newseum, visitors experienced the story of news, the role of a free press in major events in history, and how the core freedoms of the First Amendment — religion, speech, press, assembly and petition — apply to their lives.
Located halfway between the White House and the U.S. Capitol, the building made a powerful statement, the 45 words of the First Amendment etched into a 75-foot tall tablet of Tennessee marble facing Pennsylvania Avenue. With 15 galleries and 15 theaters, the Newseum opened April 11, 2008, to great fanfare. It had two state-of-the-art television studios and was a sought-after spot for conferences, weddings, movie premieres and other special events.
Hi Ed, you are welcome for the feedback. Good job on the second take! I could tell you slowed it down some in the first half, but then it sped up again a little on the last sentence. The pauses were good, it makes it interesting to listen to, like what’s coming next? Give the listener a little time to hang on your last words. “slow, deliberate fashion” could be even further stretched out and emphasized. Unlike the US Postal Service script (people want their mail delivered really fast!) you are describing a process by which whiskey is made, and so people will assume that taking a long time to cure the whiskey is a good thing, like it indicates quality. I noticed that both of your recordings were 26 seconds long, you might even try it with the goal of having the recording last 30 seconds, which is a typical commercial script length. I too speak too fast sometimes, like I need to deliver the message and be efficient, so this is not uncommon to have to work on the speed of a particular script. Thanks for trying again! Mary
Hi Official81, good job! I like your voice for an on-boarding script such as this one. I liked the variation in the lists of items, it kept my attention. I think the enthusiasm was good for the script, good job!
Mary
Hi Official81, good job! I liked the edited version better, good job on the editing! It just sounded clearer and easier to understand. The pacing and enunciation was good and you had a nice natural delivery. Very good!
Mary
